The Empty Sails
Sonnet contest entry96 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
I love the metaphor you use and
sustain throughout the poem.
When the muse leaves, it is definitely like
being left adrift with no wind for your sails.
Beautiful imagery and rhyme, excellent meter
and a well conceived closing couplet. Nancy
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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I love the metaphor you use and
sustain throughout the poem.
When the muse leaves, it is definitely like
being left adrift with no wind for your sails.
Beautiful imagery and rhyme, excellent meter
and a well conceived closing couplet. Nancy
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review, Nancy. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from emrpoems
Beautiful and eloquent language here.
But on caressing waves my vessel sways,
I float amid the stillness of the dawn.
Too often come these woes of windless days
while pondering where inspiration's gone.
Well structured sonnet
Loved the poem and wish you all the best in the contest.
Compellingly paired picture
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Beautiful and eloquent language here.
But on caressing waves my vessel sways,
I float amid the stillness of the dawn.
Too often come these woes of windless days
while pondering where inspiration's gone.
Well structured sonnet
Loved the poem and wish you all the best in the contest.
Compellingly paired picture
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer. emrpoems. I really appreciate the gracious rating and good luck wishes. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from omerta16
Nice work. I love the format and picture and even the font. The imagery and flow/meter of the poem are awesome, done with perfection. The very last line gives it that final somber punch which made it end perfectly. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Nice work. I love the format and picture and even the font. The imagery and flow/meter of the poem are awesome, done with perfection. The very last line gives it that final somber punch which made it end perfectly. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review, omerta. I'm glad you liked the piece.
DS
Comment from Just Pete
Simply brilliant. The sonnet is not an easy form to write well but here, you have perfected it as as an extended metaphor ( another clever poetic device). The theme of a sail boat is so fitting to a writers quest for new ideas. I enjoyed reading this immensely. The awards are well deserved.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Simply brilliant. The sonnet is not an easy form to write well but here, you have perfected it as as an extended metaphor ( another clever poetic device). The theme of a sail boat is so fitting to a writers quest for new ideas. I enjoyed reading this immensely. The awards are well deserved.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review and big sixer, Pete. I really appreciate the generous rating and kind words. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again, friend.
Ron
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello to you DragonSkulls
I like you sonnet from the start to your last two lines and to me when you said-
I dream of distant shores beneath the mast
as sadly, once again, the anchor's cast.
You don't desire to have to stop and use the anchor again.
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Hello to you DragonSkulls
I like you sonnet from the start to your last two lines and to me when you said-
I dream of distant shores beneath the mast
as sadly, once again, the anchor's cast.
You don't desire to have to stop and use the anchor again.
Gert
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review, Gert. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
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You are welcome dragon
Gert
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Dragonskulls
I expected a treat and am not disappointed. That muse can be a fickle beast. A wonderful metaphor for your muse and spectacular presentation.
You have simultaneously captured the essence of an early morning sail and the excited flow of the pen as it begins a poem and equally the thrall of that wilful muse and the sullen becalmed vessel when "Too often come these woes of windless days". Beautiful, elegant yet simple phrasing. Unforced rhyme and excellent meter. Congratulations and a fine entry for the contest. I wish you the best of luck. Warmest Regards - Lovinia xoxox
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Hi Dragonskulls
I expected a treat and am not disappointed. That muse can be a fickle beast. A wonderful metaphor for your muse and spectacular presentation.
You have simultaneously captured the essence of an early morning sail and the excited flow of the pen as it begins a poem and equally the thrall of that wilful muse and the sullen becalmed vessel when "Too often come these woes of windless days". Beautiful, elegant yet simple phrasing. Unforced rhyme and excellent meter. Congratulations and a fine entry for the contest. I wish you the best of luck. Warmest Regards - Lovinia xoxox
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and good luck wishes, Lovinia. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
Ron
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Hi Ron
My pleasure. I forget I should come with sixes in my basket when I review your work. :))) Enjoy your day also. Thank you.
Hugs - Lovi xoxo
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That's no biggie, L. I'm just glad you liked it.
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I sure did! You hit the right spot .... a great metaphor ... and I have sailed, and been becalmed literally and figuratively. :)))
Comment from Rondeno
It's a very good Shakespearian sonnet, properly constructed, with a nice metaphor running all the way through it. Great piece of craftsmanship!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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It's a very good Shakespearian sonnet, properly constructed, with a nice metaphor running all the way through it. Great piece of craftsmanship!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Rondeno. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from Cedar
This is a great entry for the Sonnet Contest. Everything about it just falls in place. That gorgeous picture matches your words perfectly and your rhyming pulls it all together. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Bill
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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This is a great entry for the Sonnet Contest. Everything about it just falls in place. That gorgeous picture matches your words perfectly and your rhyming pulls it all together. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Bill
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Bill. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from Leineco
Very nice metaphorical passage through the cresting/falling waves of a writer's sea of fluctuating inspirations. The giddy joyful sail across the wind driven course; the melancholy pause to anchor awhile in the doldrums.
Such is the life of a poet :-)
The sonnet form is beautifully done :-)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Very nice metaphorical passage through the cresting/falling waves of a writer's sea of fluctuating inspirations. The giddy joyful sail across the wind driven course; the melancholy pause to anchor awhile in the doldrums.
Such is the life of a poet :-)
The sonnet form is beautifully done :-)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Leineco. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from ragamuffin
I really like the way this starts of so free and soaring, and then, reality hits, the writer's doldrums. Lovely overall presentation that fits the sentiment quite well.
Great description and a piece that many, if not all, can identify with. Well done!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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I really like the way this starts of so free and soaring, and then, reality hits, the writer's doldrums. Lovely overall presentation that fits the sentiment quite well.
Great description and a piece that many, if not all, can identify with. Well done!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, RM. I'm glad you liked the piece.
