The Empty Sails
Sonnet contest entry96 total reviews
Comment from jshep
this is exceptional in every way, DragonSkulls, the presentation, the perfect adherence to the rules of a sonnet. I especially like the subject you used with the metaphors with the sail boat and the influences upon your muse.
That unsettling 3rd stanza which causes the imperfections or flaws that come in our lives. Perfect to use the windless days with lack of inspiration with words, and then the satori to dream of those distant shores when the anchor has to be cast. Love all the rhymes you used. Did you sign up for the crown of sonnets? If so, I had better beef mine up that have written but not posted yet. LOL
This is an awesome entry for the contest. Best of luck. Joyce
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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this is exceptional in every way, DragonSkulls, the presentation, the perfect adherence to the rules of a sonnet. I especially like the subject you used with the metaphors with the sail boat and the influences upon your muse.
That unsettling 3rd stanza which causes the imperfections or flaws that come in our lives. Perfect to use the windless days with lack of inspiration with words, and then the satori to dream of those distant shores when the anchor has to be cast. Love all the rhymes you used. Did you sign up for the crown of sonnets? If so, I had better beef mine up that have written but not posted yet. LOL
This is an awesome entry for the contest. Best of luck. Joyce
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and big sixer, Joyce. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. No, I haven't entered the crown yet. I can't seem to come up with seven different views of any one thing. I can if it's something negative but we all know anything negative won't get too far in the contest. I'm still thinking though. Ya never know. Thank you so much again, J. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
Richly detailed, imagery rich piece of writing! The photograph accompanying the poem further enhances the impact of the writer's words. The poem has an excellent rhyme scheme throughout, with a general abab format except for the final two lines which have an aa format. This was a great way to draw the reader's attention to the final lines, making them stand apart from the rest of the poem. The flow created through the repetitive abab format in each stanza makes the poem cohesive and easy to comprehend. The descriptive word choices create a clear picture for the reader of the events that unfold in each stanza. Excellent use of alliteration is evident throughout the entire piece. Well written and well constructed!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Richly detailed, imagery rich piece of writing! The photograph accompanying the poem further enhances the impact of the writer's words. The poem has an excellent rhyme scheme throughout, with a general abab format except for the final two lines which have an aa format. This was a great way to draw the reader's attention to the final lines, making them stand apart from the rest of the poem. The flow created through the repetitive abab format in each stanza makes the poem cohesive and easy to comprehend. The descriptive word choices create a clear picture for the reader of the events that unfold in each stanza. Excellent use of alliteration is evident throughout the entire piece. Well written and well constructed!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Rainbows. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
Ron
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You are truly welcome! :-)
Comment from joeakeefe
Your thene is rendered with great skill. The content of the work is made so concrete through the use of vessel and Nature eloquently combined. How often the wind of creativity is in the doldrums. Sails of ideas run slack and the boards of the vocabulary shrink. I am playing with the Rhyme of the Ancient Mariner here. But it does have application to the merssage that you are deliveringr.'
Great joib;technical aspects perfect
joeakeefe
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Your thene is rendered with great skill. The content of the work is made so concrete through the use of vessel and Nature eloquently combined. How often the wind of creativity is in the doldrums. Sails of ideas run slack and the boards of the vocabulary shrink. I am playing with the Rhyme of the Ancient Mariner here. But it does have application to the merssage that you are deliveringr.'
Great joib;technical aspects perfect
joeakeefe
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, joeakeefe. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind words, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from GracieAnn
Dragon, this Sonnet Poetry Contest entry is written with serene language and excellent word imagery that utilizes an interesting comparative personification with the writing muse. Original and creative. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Dragon, this Sonnet Poetry Contest entry is written with serene language and excellent word imagery that utilizes an interesting comparative personification with the writing muse. Original and creative. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review, GracieAnn. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from simplyteresa
Your sonnet captures so well the wanderer's spirit for those that truly must always be on the move find an anchor to be such a burden. My husband has a wanderers soul so I can relate to this very well.
So beautifully written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Your sonnet captures so well the wanderer's spirit for those that truly must always be on the move find an anchor to be such a burden. My husband has a wanderers soul so I can relate to this very well.
So beautifully written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review, Teresa. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. It's really more of a metaphor about one losing the inspiation of thier muse at times. I'm glad you liked the piece, T. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from visionary1234
Well it sounds like you're writing about someone ELSE dear - certainly not you, for whom witty inspiration never seems to fail! This is a magnificent sonnet and totally worthy of much more than a sixer!
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Well it sounds like you're writing about someone ELSE dear - certainly not you, for whom witty inspiration never seems to fail! This is a magnificent sonnet and totally worthy of much more than a sixer!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and big sixer, Sharyn. Yeah, I like to do that once in a while, write a piece about losing your muse but using an intricate piece like this one to do so, lol. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words, S. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. Have a great day.
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Ron
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. The author's words are deep, creative and strong. The reader found this poem thought provoking. The artwork is just beautiful and enhanced the read. Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. The author's words are deep, creative and strong. The reader found this poem thought provoking. The artwork is just beautiful and enhanced the read. Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review, Harmony. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Starlit Ink
Your sonnet is in correct form, with excellent use of meter. I also enjoyed the combination of emotion and vivid nature imagery. This is a stand-out entry for the contest, so best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Your sonnet is in correct form, with excellent use of meter. I also enjoyed the combination of emotion and vivid nature imagery. This is a stand-out entry for the contest, so best of luck to you.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Starlit Ink. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from reconciled
Hey Ron...-smile- good to see you sir...A sonnet that doesn't sound as one reads a sweeter taste. Hope your doing well brother....love Michael
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Hey Ron...-smile- good to see you sir...A sonnet that doesn't sound as one reads a sweeter taste. Hope your doing well brother....love Michael
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Hey, Michael, hello, friend. I'm doing okay on this end. Just the same old, same old, work, eat, sleep, work, eat, sleep and repeat. I had a few reviews to answer because the site's been down in my couple precious hours of goof off time the last couple days. Thank you for the fantastic review, M. I really appreciate the generous stars. I hope all is well on your end too. Have a great day and gab with you later.
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Ron
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem is a metaphor I think all the readers and writers out there can own. Your sonnet is written in perfect meter and is displayed with panache.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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This poem is a metaphor I think all the readers and writers out there can own. Your sonnet is written in perfect meter and is displayed with panache.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Bill. I'm glad you liked the piece.
