The Empty Sails
Sonnet contest entry96 total reviews
Comment from Andrewajgblue
What a lovely poem it started out quite upbeat and then changed and became sad , I really liked it, your rhyming was really good ,and it flowed really nicely , I loved the picture also
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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What a lovely poem it started out quite upbeat and then changed and became sad , I really liked it, your rhyming was really good ,and it flowed really nicely , I loved the picture also
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Andrew. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from victor 66
A very impressive sonnet. I plan to keep track of it to use as an example the next time I try a sonnet myself. Congratulations on a well deserved win! Best wishes.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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A very impressive sonnet. I plan to keep track of it to use as an example the next time I try a sonnet myself. Congratulations on a well deserved win! Best wishes.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Victor. I really appreciate the generous stars and congrats, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
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You bet.
Comment from Domino 2
Congratulations on this well-deserved win, Ron.
We can all associate with this lack of inspiration theme at times, and your sailing metaphor captures it perfectly in poetic form.
Faultless pentameter and top perfect/near rhymes.
To supplement the 'sails', I guess we all need an engine as back-up. :-)
Top sonnet!
Best wishes, Ted
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Congratulations on this well-deserved win, Ron.
We can all associate with this lack of inspiration theme at times, and your sailing metaphor captures it perfectly in poetic form.
Faultless pentameter and top perfect/near rhymes.
To supplement the 'sails', I guess we all need an engine as back-up. :-)
Top sonnet!
Best wishes, Ted
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Hey, Ted, hi. Thank you for the excellent review and generous stars, friend. I really appreciate the congrats and kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a good one, T.
Ron
Comment from vapros
Congratulations on your recent win, and this sonnet makes clear how it happened. With imaginative phrases and concepts, you have shown that the muse doesn't produce every time she is summoned. At the same time, she cannot appear, at all, unless your sails are set. Very well done, and thanks -
v
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Congratulations on your recent win, and this sonnet makes clear how it happened. With imaginative phrases and concepts, you have shown that the muse doesn't produce every time she is summoned. At the same time, she cannot appear, at all, unless your sails are set. Very well done, and thanks -
v
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and the big sixer, V. I really appreciate the kind words and congrats, friend. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Super entry. I think the choice of photo/illustration is extremely appropriate. Nice work on meter. I guess the word 'pondering' could be scanned more than one way. Congratulations on winning the sonnet contest.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Super entry. I think the choice of photo/illustration is extremely appropriate. Nice work on meter. I guess the word 'pondering' could be scanned more than one way. Congratulations on winning the sonnet contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the great review, Crystie C. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and congrats. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from MissMerri
Congratulations again. Another first place winner and a beautiful poem too. I always love to read writing poems, and often can't resist writing them as well. The sustained metaphor throughout this poem makes it especially appealing and of course the sonnet form, the perfect rhymes and unflagging iambic pentameter make this a total delight from beginning to end. Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Congratulations again. Another first place winner and a beautiful poem too. I always love to read writing poems, and often can't resist writing them as well. The sustained metaphor throughout this poem makes it especially appealing and of course the sonnet form, the perfect rhymes and unflagging iambic pentameter make this a total delight from beginning to end. Well done!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you for another outstanding review and big sixer, Miss Merri. I really appreciate the gracious rating and congrats. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked my contest offering. Thank you so much, MM.
Ron
Comment from adewpearl
Congratulations on your sonnet contest win :-) Your rhymes are strong and in good English sonnet format, and your use of consistent iambic meter makes for good cadence when read aloud. Excellent use of enjambment keeps the thoughts flowing from line to line.
Nice alliteration in woes of windless
strong use of consonance in waves my vessel
a thoughtful use of imagery to explore the nature of the creative writing process and the rule of inspiration. Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Congratulations on your sonnet contest win :-) Your rhymes are strong and in good English sonnet format, and your use of consistent iambic meter makes for good cadence when read aloud. Excellent use of enjambment keeps the thoughts flowing from line to line.
Nice alliteration in woes of windless
strong use of consonance in waves my vessel
a thoughtful use of imagery to explore the nature of the creative writing process and the rule of inspiration. Brooke
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Brooke. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and congrats. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment from lakeport
the empty sails, congratulation on your win, That's a beautiful expressed Sonnet poem.I enjoyed reading it.God bless you,Lakeport.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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the empty sails, congratulation on your win, That's a beautiful expressed Sonnet poem.I enjoyed reading it.God bless you,Lakeport.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review, Lakeport. I really appreciate the generous stars and congrats. I'm glad you liked the piece.
DS
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your welcome.lakeport.
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your welcome.Lakeport.
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your welcome.Lakeport.
Comment from Irish Rain
What a beautifully written description of the search to write! Congratulations to you with this wonderful first place win! Well deserved!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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What a beautifully written description of the search to write! Congratulations to you with this wonderful first place win! Well deserved!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, JJ. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and congrats. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Ron
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You are so welcome...and deserving!
Comment from Little Miss History
I think that you chose a beautiful photograph to evoke the mood of the poem. The beginning starts out with such hope of new vistas and discoveries. Like the windless days, often our dreams and realities are stalled as life intervenes. I like your ending; it conveys the feeling that as long as there is life we have that spark to find the unknown treasure within or around us.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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I think that you chose a beautiful photograph to evoke the mood of the poem. The beginning starts out with such hope of new vistas and discoveries. Like the windless days, often our dreams and realities are stalled as life intervenes. I like your ending; it conveys the feeling that as long as there is life we have that spark to find the unknown treasure within or around us.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review Little Miss H. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece.
DS
