Comment from Carrie Carson

Excellent

Interesting that I come across this now...especially with Alvin's passing. I have a friend, my "bestest" fifty years plus, who is not well, massive understatement. I think I may be halted for a time but dang it, carry on we must.

Free verse a "modern" thing to me but this one caught me just right. I'm out of sixes, otherwise this would rate one from me.

Ready or not, right? :) Carrie

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this:)

Comment from ann marie mazz

Excellent

hi teresa

I hope this day finds you well

your entry and words are excellent
as I am guilty of having life stand still
and have watched time pass by
I understood your every word
thank goodness we don't know what lies ahead
we as people just need to carry on and go forward
it is true we can not get back yesterday

thank you for sharing
thank you for the valuable reminder
this was a pleasure to read
enjoy the night
ann marie

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014

thanks so much Ann Marie for the review:)

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest
you allow the reader to see and feel life passing one by as the world spins
good alliteration in
time, tragedy
delayed, death
world, which
stand, still
while, we
stood, still
cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014

thanks.

reply by Smoothiecool on 27-Feb-2014

welcome..SC

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. Death does make time stand still. You wonder how the world went on. You couldn't. But the world continued to turn. Eventually, you do catch up. Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014

thanks so much.

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hi :) It's true, no matter what happens in our own little bubble, life goes on without us, the world keeps on turning and we get left behind. You put this really well in your free verse poem and I wish you well in the booth. Nice use of alliteration in delayed/death & stood/still. Kindest regards, Debra :)

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

thanks!

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

A wonderful write. My favorite lines are these:
"you wake one day
to realize
the world on axis spun
while we stood still
and it left us behind"

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

thank you.

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is such a pensive poem about the time-halting effect of a death or tragedy. The world keeps spinning, but we ignore it for awhile. This has a ring of truth. Good luck in the contest, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

thank you.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Your words ring true -
life flies by far too
quickly

pass by our eyes - might I suggest pass before our eyes



Good luck with the contest.

Margaret

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

thanks.

Comment from evrenios

Excellent

While this is such a wonderful subject, eloquently spoken, it isn't really free verse to me as the rhyme is masterfully crafted. "Free verse" is a form of nonmetical writing that takes pleasure in a various and emergent verbal music. I would ordinarily give this a vote - but, sadly, it is too regular for me.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

THanks for the review. Actually I don't see 1 rhyming word.

reply by evrenios on 26-Feb-2014

Actually - there were two: eyes/realize and the aliterative vowel sounds of thrive and time.

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

An excellent poem! The poem flows well. The poem is deep and thought provoking. The author's words are creative and strong. The artwork is eccentric and compliments this poem.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

thank you.