Aiona's Poems
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Comment from TOMORAL
Another fine fart story. You have me in stitches this morning. Funny little poem to start my day. I'll be sure to watch my air today. lol great read.
Looking forward to seeing how the young woman got out of the stolen boat thing.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Another fine fart story. You have me in stitches this morning. Funny little poem to start my day. I'll be sure to watch my air today. lol great read.
Looking forward to seeing how the young woman got out of the stolen boat thing.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Yes, I have to get back to that stolen boat thing today. Thank you, TOMORAL.
Comment from Misrael
Yes when we are comfortable with some one we can let loose and be ourselves with that person. Good read, kepp up the good work and keep on writing
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Yes when we are comfortable with some one we can let loose and be ourselves with that person. Good read, kepp up the good work and keep on writing
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Misrael!
Comment from Marillion
Sounds like a companion piece with the other one, Aiona, and in a way it's a compliment, I think, to feel comfortable enough to do that in front of someone. What's next? Asking him to pull your finger? ;-)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Sounds like a companion piece with the other one, Aiona, and in a way it's a compliment, I think, to feel comfortable enough to do that in front of someone. What's next? Asking him to pull your finger? ;-)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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LOL! Yeah... it's indeed a privilege for someone to hear me belch. A sign you're within my "inner circle." Hee!
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another great addition to the previous poem. This leads on nicely and I love the way that you portray the fact that you have to be comfortable with someone to let loose. I am on painkillers at the moment and they are causing flatulence. When I am in polite company I excuse myself but when I am with ny friends I just let loose as well. LOL.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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This is yet another great addition to the previous poem. This leads on nicely and I love the way that you portray the fact that you have to be comfortable with someone to let loose. I am on painkillers at the moment and they are causing flatulence. When I am in polite company I excuse myself but when I am with ny friends I just let loose as well. LOL.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Tomes. If you ever declare me a friend, make sure I know, so I can stay on this side of the pond. :)
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I will. LOL.
Comment from Glasstruth
Like the idea of this. The first two lines are just fine, but I would work on the last one. I get it, but could be better. Thanks for sharing. Les
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Like the idea of this. The first two lines are just fine, but I would work on the last one. I get it, but could be better. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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You're welcome, Les.
Comment from country ranch writer
Oh!Oh! newness has worn off the relationship if he is cutting loose. Men are like that though they do try to be thoughtful at first.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Oh!Oh! newness has worn off the relationship if he is cutting loose. Men are like that though they do try to be thoughtful at first.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Who said I was talking about men? :) Thank you, country ranch writer!
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