Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "A vivid dream"Words to pass on to my children
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Comment from country ranch writer
MAY JUSTICE BE SERVED UPON THE EVIL ONE WHO HAS BROUGHT UNHAPPINESS TO A DEAR ONE CLOSE TO YOU, A GOOD FRIEND. MAY THEY CATCH HIM BEFORE HE STRIKES AGAIN
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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MAY JUSTICE BE SERVED UPON THE EVIL ONE WHO HAS BROUGHT UNHAPPINESS TO A DEAR ONE CLOSE TO YOU, A GOOD FRIEND. MAY THEY CATCH HIM BEFORE HE STRIKES AGAIN
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks, for a kind and understanding review, I appreciate it. Mary
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WELCOME
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your dream for justice to happen. Unfortunately, there are many sick individuals at large--we need more fairy godmothers to protect us and the children. I admired your adding rhyme to this account for more intensity. Hope your weekend is pleasant- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thank you for sharing your dream for justice to happen. Unfortunately, there are many sick individuals at large--we need more fairy godmothers to protect us and the children. I admired your adding rhyme to this account for more intensity. Hope your weekend is pleasant- Joan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks Joan for your wonderful review. Mary
Comment from gazzagodbod
and i hope she weeds him out makes me sick too especially when its men in trusted positions hope your godmother has a shotgun xxgazzaxx
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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and i hope she weeds him out makes me sick too especially when its men in trusted positions hope your godmother has a shotgun xxgazzaxx
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks for the review and you great comments. I appreciate your encouragement. Mary
Comment from krys123
Heavy, porcine an copious Piece of work that had me totally by surprise and how terrible to find out that your Godmother was the man. Your rhyming couplets were neither forced, labored or strained all the rhythm float very smoothly and made it easy for me to read your poem clearly. Thank you for the read in for sharing and posting this for others. May you in yours always be blessed.
Alex
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Heavy, porcine an copious Piece of work that had me totally by surprise and how terrible to find out that your Godmother was the man. Your rhyming couplets were neither forced, labored or strained all the rhythm float very smoothly and made it easy for me to read your poem clearly. Thank you for the read in for sharing and posting this for others. May you in yours always be blessed.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Hi Alex thanks for your review, and comments. I did not mean that the Godmother was the man. It was a dream of the Godmother allowing me a wish I wished for my friends abuser to be caught.
Mary
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All I see said the blind man as he picked up his table and saw!!! I understand now. And you are so sincerely welcome Mary.
Comment from Gungalo
Rape is a horrible thing girl but you have made arrangements. Good for you and your couplets are absolutely wonderful too. Bravo.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Rape is a horrible thing girl but you have made arrangements. Good for you and your couplets are absolutely wonderful too. Bravo.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks Pam for your review. Mary
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Smile.
Comment from robina1978
Excellent picture that complements your rhyming couplets very well. I think dream't should be dreamt. But you dreamt a fairy godmother came and you could ask for something. You mentioned the abuse of a child. Good cause.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Excellent picture that complements your rhyming couplets very well. I think dream't should be dreamt. But you dreamt a fairy godmother came and you could ask for something. You mentioned the abuse of a child. Good cause.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks robins for review and tip
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Mary
Comment from in777wr#
This was a well written poem. It does seems in our society, and world wide that there's a lack of justice. Your poem reads well, and the message is clear. Nice job.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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This was a well written poem. It does seems in our society, and world wide that there's a lack of justice. Your poem reads well, and the message is clear. Nice job.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks for that encouraging review and your comments. Mary
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You're welcome.
Comment from Smoothiecool
your words allow the reader to see and feel the images of your dream as your fairy Godmother as you to make one wish
your wish for the monster that raped your friend and is still out in society
as you woke your godmother was not there but you now know she is aware
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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your words allow the reader to see and feel the images of your dream as your fairy Godmother as you to make one wish
your wish for the monster that raped your friend and is still out in society
as you woke your godmother was not there but you now know she is aware
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks Smoothiecool, for the great review, I do appreciate it.
Mary
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your most welcome..SC
Comment from LoannaLois
A difficult yet important poem. This, is close to me ..and the idea of telling her Godmother...was very real and poignant. The things we write about help heal us...and others...when a person relates. I am glad you wrote this.God bless you, Lo
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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A difficult yet important poem. This, is close to me ..and the idea of telling her Godmother...was very real and poignant. The things we write about help heal us...and others...when a person relates. I am glad you wrote this.God bless you, Lo
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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I am so pleased you feel it is a good poem to submit. I will always do my best to help our children If I can. Mary
Comment from Caressa_08
Vivid dreams can sometimes be strange, though even stranger is that a lot of friends & young people are abused, and unfortunately it happens, happens everyday...People posing as "good people"...Be they even ministers, school counselor, etc.. Unexpectedly do terrible things, & leaving their victims so tarnished & bruised, mentally with a physical abusive act of rape, that shouldn't of ever happened...I like your poem & the concept of informing your fairy godmother about this terrible situation, & to find this monster and to let justice be done once he is found.
Caressa
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Vivid dreams can sometimes be strange, though even stranger is that a lot of friends & young people are abused, and unfortunately it happens, happens everyday...People posing as "good people"...Be they even ministers, school counselor, etc.. Unexpectedly do terrible things, & leaving their victims so tarnished & bruised, mentally with a physical abusive act of rape, that shouldn't of ever happened...I like your poem & the concept of informing your fairy godmother about this terrible situation, & to find this monster and to let justice be done once he is found.
Caressa
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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You have written a great review and your comments are so encouraging to me, because I take every opportunity to expose these evil men and women who destroy children. Mary
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I am glad that you put both sexes in your reply...though, think too, some of these abusers, unfortunately, never got the help that they needed & became abusers because of that..Parents need to be very watchful.Though, not everyone has good parents either..And, know it has gone on in earlier years...It's just with the media out everywhere we are learning more about all the rampant abuse...And, hopefully one day there will be a cure, we hope..Though,doubt it..
Caressa