A Monumental Pain
To veterans...everywhere43 total reviews
Comment from Sylvia Page
These Quatrains in iambic pentameter are very well written.
It is a beautiful tribute to the fallen heroes of any country. The imagery of your word pictures are very clear.
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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These Quatrains in iambic pentameter are very well written.
It is a beautiful tribute to the fallen heroes of any country. The imagery of your word pictures are very clear.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, Sylvia! I appreciate it.
Comment from janalma
Brought tears to my eyes. It is so sad what they have suffered and can never forget. My dad worked with a guy, who, at the sudden sound of a plane overhead, would take off running for cover...years after the second world war. Your poem is very expressive of the pain they have and still go thru.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Brought tears to my eyes. It is so sad what they have suffered and can never forget. My dad worked with a guy, who, at the sudden sound of a plane overhead, would take off running for cover...years after the second world war. Your poem is very expressive of the pain they have and still go thru.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend. I come from a military family, and I'm one of the few who never had to see combat. I had a great uncle who was a glider pilot shot down behind enemy lines during The Battle of the Bulge, and he was never the same again. He died alone and wandering, never fully back from his ordeal. I truly appreciate your heartfelt review, my friend.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a lovely poem David depicting the horrors of war and the impact it has in the minds and hearts of the veterans who fought the battles. God Bless them all and help them cope with the terrible memories. Very nice my friend and we must thank them, each and every one, for the sacrifice they and their families made. Nancy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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This is a lovely poem David depicting the horrors of war and the impact it has in the minds and hearts of the veterans who fought the battles. God Bless them all and help them cope with the terrible memories. Very nice my friend and we must thank them, each and every one, for the sacrifice they and their families made. Nancy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Yes, we must. Thank you so much, Nancy! I really appreciate it.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Very well written and dedicated to veterans everywhere. In perfect iambic pentameter, but has to be read carefully as pronouncing some words - the longer ones - incorrectly can spoil the meter and some might think the IP is wrong. It is an interesting read together with your author notes. I think it is very rare that men who fought in wars rarely talk about it, but they never forget. Thank you for submitting. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Very well written and dedicated to veterans everywhere. In perfect iambic pentameter, but has to be read carefully as pronouncing some words - the longer ones - incorrectly can spoil the meter and some might think the IP is wrong. It is an interesting read together with your author notes. I think it is very rare that men who fought in wars rarely talk about it, but they never forget. Thank you for submitting. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Dorothy. I'm hoping that people can get beyond the meter of only using one and two syllable words and realize that meter is possible in multi-syllabics. I appreciate that you can, my friend.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
'No matter where, or when, or what the war,
The continent, the climate, or terrain,
a sense of brotherhood unlocks the door
to every veteran's unspoken pain.'
I absolutely loved the above lines..It is a truly well-written poem!God Bless!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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'No matter where, or when, or what the war,
The continent, the climate, or terrain,
a sense of brotherhood unlocks the door
to every veteran's unspoken pain.'
I absolutely loved the above lines..It is a truly well-written poem!God Bless!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, Kauser. I really appreciate the great review.
Comment from barkingdog
Your rhyming quatrains read smoothly with their even tempo and good use of enjambment.
You give the reader many visuals to show him the possible memories a veteran might have while visiting a war memorial.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Your rhyming quatrains read smoothly with their even tempo and good use of enjambment.
You give the reader many visuals to show him the possible memories a veteran might have while visiting a war memorial.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, barking dog, for the great review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I love the verse, and it's a great read visually, and audio as well. I missed Vietnam by a year or so ('64) but I get as emotional as they do when I witness. Kenny
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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I love the verse, and it's a great read visually, and audio as well. I missed Vietnam by a year or so ('64) but I get as emotional as they do when I witness. Kenny
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, Kenny. I'm glad for you that you missed it, my friend.
Comment from madhatter1977
This is brilliant, David. Very moving anti-war poem and a moving tribute to the American veterans, as well as all veterans I guess.
In the UK people used to line the streets of a small village called Wootton Bassett and applaud the dead passing by in hearses from the airbase. I wrote the following poem about it. They don't pass that way now, however. Hope you enjoy... Pete
Wootton Bassett
A one-armed man is clapping 'gainst his thigh
Under a purple and clouded twilit sky.
The hearse moves slowly past all passers-by,
Young men were sent to pointless war to die.
But they fell foul of the official lie,
Far too young to ask the masters, "oh why?"
Veterans line up, blazer, shirt and tie;
And they salute the dead and so do I.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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This is brilliant, David. Very moving anti-war poem and a moving tribute to the American veterans, as well as all veterans I guess.
In the UK people used to line the streets of a small village called Wootton Bassett and applaud the dead passing by in hearses from the airbase. I wrote the following poem about it. They don't pass that way now, however. Hope you enjoy... Pete
Wootton Bassett
A one-armed man is clapping 'gainst his thigh
Under a purple and clouded twilit sky.
The hearse moves slowly past all passers-by,
Young men were sent to pointless war to die.
But they fell foul of the official lie,
Far too young to ask the masters, "oh why?"
Veterans line up, blazer, shirt and tie;
And they salute the dead and so do I.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thanks very much, Pete! My brother lived in London in the early 90s, and I visited a few times, but I wasn't aware of that tradition. Thank you for sharing that and your excellent poem, my friend.
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Hi there. I've only been aware of it since Afghanistan but there were muslim protests about it too so it was stopped and the dead soldiers are repatriated other ways now.
Best wishes, Pete
Comment from Ben Colder
Thank you for your ode to us vets. Brothers in arms have a bond many never understand. Thanks again for a well worded poem. Shalom my friend.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you for your ode to us vets. Brothers in arms have a bond many never understand. Thanks again for a well worded poem. Shalom my friend.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Ben, for your great review, and for your service.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abab rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with sands/hands...well/hell. Good description and alliteration. This piece flows well as the rhymes are not forced. Thank you for sharing this wonderful tribute.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Good use of the abab rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with sands/hands...well/hell. Good description and alliteration. This piece flows well as the rhymes are not forced. Thank you for sharing this wonderful tribute.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Righteous Riter. I really appreciate it.
