Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Archer"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
5 total reviews
Comment from darknessgone
I have my daughter permission to thank those publicly for using my art and I'm so glad she's allowed me to. This is fsntastic,
! Your wotdsare full of action abd keep the reader interested and onthe edge of their srt until the last sentence. Thank you for using my rather odd character for such outstanding writing
lynnkah
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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I have my daughter permission to thank those publicly for using my art and I'm so glad she's allowed me to. This is fsntastic,
! Your wotdsare full of action abd keep the reader interested and onthe edge of their srt until the last sentence. Thank you for using my rather odd character for such outstanding writing
lynnkah
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from Misrael
That sounds like a real fighting woman and one tat does not give up. Yes we all need to aim true no matter what. Good read and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
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That sounds like a real fighting woman and one tat does not give up. Yes we all need to aim true no matter what. Good read and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Misrael. Sometimes not giving up can be a vice. ex. Rob Roy. But some of us are just born stubborn, eh?
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Yes some of us can be more stubborn than what is good for us.
Comment from Marillion
I guess once Cupid gets you in those sights, it's all over but the loving. I really enjoy this fun look at the archery of love, Aiona, and the short lines of pithiness. The last line is a great clincher!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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I guess once Cupid gets you in those sights, it's all over but the loving. I really enjoy this fun look at the archery of love, Aiona, and the short lines of pithiness. The last line is a great clincher!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Hee! Thanks, Marillion. Any suggestions for improvement?
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The only place I thought about suggestion was the first line, second stanza, but it works. I thought possibly "All required is", but I don't think that's any better than what you already have.
Comment from RJ
A nice written poem, good flow and vision. I'm ready to see the heart swell at she wields the arrow to makes its mark. Thanks for sharing. RJ
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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A nice written poem, good flow and vision. I'm ready to see the heart swell at she wields the arrow to makes its mark. Thanks for sharing. RJ
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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BECKY! I wish I could be there today. I'll try to make it next week. Thanks for the critique of my synopsis.
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You are welcome. I believe I'm ready for two contests entries. Because of that, not ready for group today, will only make it for a few minutes today. :-)
Comment from jadapenn
This was a really fun poem. I always search for a bit of humour and some positive thinking on this site. Am I crazy or what? I hate tear-jerkers. lol. You should have entered this in the valentine's contest. Well penned. luv jada
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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This was a really fun poem. I always search for a bit of humour and some positive thinking on this site. Am I crazy or what? I hate tear-jerkers. lol. You should have entered this in the valentine's contest. Well penned. luv jada
Comment Written 15-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thanks. :) Yeah, I realized that a bit too late, huh! Still, it was a fun poem to write. Yeah, I am not keen on tear-jerkers right now either. And no you're not crazy. I love happy endings. Hence I'm trying my best to write romance.
