Comment from HL Pepper

Excellent

You might think you do it too often, but you rock at writing so you are using them most effectively (my big one is adverbs). Nice, nice job. So talented you are and a blessing to many!!

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014

Thank you, HL Pepper. Yeah, adverbs are my downfall.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

oh this is absolutely brillent
never saw one laid out like this and it is so cute
filled the rules and yet was very humerous.
made me chuckle

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

Thanks, Barb. :)

Comment from TOMORAL

Excellent

I do this too. Great little piece here and the picture is me only I am female. The problem is I can never think of the proper noun to use!

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

Thank you. Yeah, I struggle with adverbs. I use them far too frequently, I guess.

Comment from Marillion

Excellent

What a clever piece, Aiona! Not only do I like the conceit of the poem, I love the words you so aggressively marked out in favor of the remainder!

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

Heh. Thank you, Marillion. :)

Comment from Misrael

Excellent

I can understand what you are saying because I am afraid I do the same thing. But one of these days I intend to take a course or two so I can get better. Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014

Thanks, Misrael. I am doing my best to cut out the adverbs. They call it "lazy writing," right? Man, it didn't feel like it when I was trying to figure out all the adverbs I could use for this poem!