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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Desire"A book of poetry, quotes and short stories
21 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
Wow! A pretty steamy Valentines message! Gungalo would be proud of you! There is a wonderful sense of rising passion in the way your poem progresses from verse to verse.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Wow! A pretty steamy Valentines message! Gungalo would be proud of you! There is a wonderful sense of rising passion in the way your poem progresses from verse to verse.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much....lol
Comment from dmt1967
Everything gelled in this poem the pink background and the picture of the rose goes very well with the words good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Everything gelled in this poem the pink background and the picture of the rose goes very well with the words good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much...I appreciate you thoughts on this, you are very kind
Comment from adewpearl
excellent detail with strong sensory and sensual detail
you definitely make clear the speaker's impassioned desires
a very poignant closing as we realize this beloved who is so desired is not there
Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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excellent detail with strong sensory and sensual detail
you definitely make clear the speaker's impassioned desires
a very poignant closing as we realize this beloved who is so desired is not there
Brooke
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful words and wonderful review! Have a great day
Comment from Sankey
Where is he? Was it a dream? How sad. Very passionate and great reading. Good luck in the contest. Thanks again.
No Spags well done.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Where is he? Was it a dream? How sad. Very passionate and great reading. Good luck in the contest. Thanks again.
No Spags well done.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much...good questions, lol!!!
Comment from livelylinda
Annie: hot and spicy then the flame expires. Why does this ring so familiar? Perhaps it has happened to me. Nice enticing write. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Annie: hot and spicy then the flame expires. Why does this ring so familiar? Perhaps it has happened to me. Nice enticing write. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Or even me...Thank you so much for the thoughtful words and great review ::
Comment from Petriesan
good luck in the contest
lovely ending, this:
And as I suddenly awake from this tender dream a
tear stains my cheek, I reach for you in a whisper,
saying your name
easy to read and sweet
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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good luck in the contest
lovely ending, this:
And as I suddenly awake from this tender dream a
tear stains my cheek, I reach for you in a whisper,
saying your name
easy to read and sweet
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Such a lovely poem. Your title Desire, and writing above it 'wanting someone who does not know you exist' does not tie in with your lovely poem. Because he/she does exist. You wake from the dream and reach out for them with a whisper - saying your name. Of course I may be wrong - you reach out and no one is in the bed with you, and that is why you cry. Lovely read. A bit misleading but that is just me not sure how to interpret. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Such a lovely poem. Your title Desire, and writing above it 'wanting someone who does not know you exist' does not tie in with your lovely poem. Because he/she does exist. You wake from the dream and reach out for them with a whisper - saying your name. Of course I may be wrong - you reach out and no one is in the bed with you, and that is why you cry. Lovely read. A bit misleading but that is just me not sure how to interpret. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much for reading and for the well wishes for the contest :)
Comment from Selina Stambi
The desire - the strong emotions - are beautifully conveyed, as is the anti-climactic sense of desolate disappointment.
Very well done, Annie.
Nice to meet you! :)
xxx
Sonali
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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The desire - the strong emotions - are beautifully conveyed, as is the anti-climactic sense of desolate disappointment.
Very well done, Annie.
Nice to meet you! :)
xxx
Sonali
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2014
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Thank you, you are very kind :)
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with wild/with...what/we/would...make/me...ever/end/eagerness...tender/tear. Good comparison with sweet as honey. Love the photo. Love the message. Good work.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with wild/with...what/we/would...make/me...ever/end/eagerness...tender/tear. Good comparison with sweet as honey. Love the photo. Love the message. Good work.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much!!
Comment from krys123
A very good sensual, sexy and stimulating poem that is written very well.
I would like to wish you good luck on the Valentines Poetry Contest. Your imagination or imagery was fantastically displayed so well that I envision many of the heartwarming lustful liveliness in your poem. Thank you for sharing and posting your poem for everyone. May you and yours be blessed always?
Alex
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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A very good sensual, sexy and stimulating poem that is written very well.
I would like to wish you good luck on the Valentines Poetry Contest. Your imagination or imagery was fantastically displayed so well that I envision many of the heartwarming lustful liveliness in your poem. Thank you for sharing and posting your poem for everyone. May you and yours be blessed always?
Alex
Comment Written 11-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thank you for you very kind review, much appreciated!
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You are so sincerely welcome Annie...