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Aiona's Poems

Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Ode to the Young Sod Poodles"
Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.

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Comment from TOMORAL
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This is an absolutely true to life poem that many find once they leave the safety of home. Well written with perfect rhyme and flow. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2014

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    Thanks, TOMORAL.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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Dear Aiona - well it started nicely and then flat as a pancake. Poor wee beasties don't stand much chance do they. Well penned and creative Ode.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2014

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    Thanks! How did you know it was me?
reply by Maureen's Pen on 02-Feb-2014
    Your name was beside your title:D
    Enjoy your weekend.
    Hugs
    Maureen
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    LOL! Oh!
Comment from Misrael
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Poor prairie poodles they just want to explore their surroundings. I feel sorry for the little things and yet it is funny in a sad way. Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2014

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    Thank you, Misrael! Yes, I always hated that season. Tended to drive slower, but to no avail.
Comment from Marillion
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A very nice poem, my friend, with a solid, if flattening, ending. :-)
I guess that was a pretty short journey. The only "nit" I would point out is the "a new" should be "anew" if I'm reading it right.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2014

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    Ah! Thanks! Will fix.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    Oh, actually, it was a an adjective without its noun. I did that so it would rhyme. :( Somewhat confusing I guess. I probably should find a different way around it.
Comment from CR Delport
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Ah no! It starts out so well, and make you feel warm and fuzzy, and then you have them running out onto the tarmac. How cruel! :) Sad, but true. Thanks for sharing and good luck.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2014

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2014
    Thank you, CR.