Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Suicide is not the answer. Keep writing.... You're a good writer. Also, being expressive is good for the soul. Take care of yourself.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014

Thanks sunny always appreciate your input ... only in my mind !

Comment from Amsterdam

Exceptional

Burning through bullets
Bang bang ~ bang bang
Surely Hard to control it
Like blood bleeding through veins

Governments trolls us
I love~ the NSA
Get on the gold bus
No longer slaves

Someone has told us
Bullets, is not sane
Bullets, for killing

Ideas....
Well they do the same.

Hope all is well...

Am

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014

Thanks Am
you da man
bullets
help
with
the master plan

However
it is not mine
but
a
devils brow.

Comment from Tina McKala

Excellent

very thought provoking and kind of depressing poem. I read it three times, and it was getting deeper and more profound each time. I loved expressions such as "undulating mood" or "surmounting doubt" "roulette of a Russian kind" (so much better than just saying a russian roulette). it showed hopelessness, empty space left after a lost faith, wondering if it would be better to end things or let them flow endlessly and without a goal. Dark, but very elegant writing.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2014

Thanks Tina ... in my mind !

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

Great piece. Love your style. Perfectly spaced out for pauses in just the right spot and to emphasize the words when you want. Not too many do that here and some of the reviewers "Don't get it" hahaha. I know the thought process though it is pretty familiar and not really bothersome to me anymore. I kinda laugh at it now if that makes any sense. Perfectly stated though and most will relate. Some awesome and original phrasing. Love it, mikey

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Hey Mikey your one in a million ... YOU get it ... I studied this stuff for 48 hrs solid straight before I got it ... I laughed my head off when the penny dropped ... glad you enjoyed !

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

sometimes
I bite the bullet

in my mind

What a write this is Bic. I can relate to it for the braveness of it and the boldness. Awesome job.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

Thanks G ... been a while ... be a lie if I say I have'nt been in the doldrums again ... My God is always there ... just like you G !

reply by Gungalo on 30-Jan-2014

Good to see you back Bic. Yep, I'm always here.

reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

... do you never take a holiday G. I here the South Pole is nice at this time of year ... some say I should visit sometime !!!

reply by Gungalo on 30-Jan-2014

Sure I do Bic but you can forget the South Pole. Toooooooooooo coldddddddddddddddddd.

reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

BBBBBBRRRRRRRRRR !!! I've no teeth left.

reply by Gungalo on 30-Jan-2014

LOL well definitely don't go then. LOL

reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014

... no worries ... LOL.

reply by Gungalo on 30-Jan-2014

LOL.