A Collection of Dennis Clough's Wit
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "FanStory Wanderer"Great stuff!
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Comment from SimianSavant
This definitively captures the sentiment. Any longer and you would be talking about the quality/effort of the comments commensurate with the reward offered. It is a LOT of work to be able to promote our own work without paying a bunch of money. Many many hours of reviewing. More if we leave detailed reviews.
Ok this a very fine detail but: What do you mean, 'you don't know?" technically you should close the single quote before the double quotes. Which with straight quotes looks a bit silly. I really don't care if you do or not, just wanted to make sure you knew.
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You missed an opening quote mark here: => What do you mean, 'maybe'?"
That's it, great premise, fun writing, and thanks for the read!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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This definitively captures the sentiment. Any longer and you would be talking about the quality/effort of the comments commensurate with the reward offered. It is a LOT of work to be able to promote our own work without paying a bunch of money. Many many hours of reviewing. More if we leave detailed reviews.
Ok this a very fine detail but: What do you mean, 'you don't know?" technically you should close the single quote before the double quotes. Which with straight quotes looks a bit silly. I really don't care if you do or not, just wanted to make sure you knew.
Also:
You missed an opening quote mark here: => What do you mean, 'maybe'?"
That's it, great premise, fun writing, and thanks for the read!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Thanks for your review and your honesty. I will get you for that! 😂 Seriously, it was a long time before I picked up on punctuation for a quote within a quote. And I couldn?t agree more how silly it looks. When I originally wrote this, I probably was not aware of the proper placement of the ? .
Thanks again, Dennis
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You?re welcome. I did notice that you correctly nailed your placement of the '?'; well done!
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Comment from Modee
I love this site also, and am back after quite a few years. It can be an addiction. Liked your story - the only mistake I found is a missing apostrophe in - "So its gone that far...you've had relations with others already." - change it to it's - :)
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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I love this site also, and am back after quite a few years. It can be an addiction. Liked your story - the only mistake I found is a missing apostrophe in - "So its gone that far...you've had relations with others already." - change it to it's - :)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Thanks for your review and I do wander back and forth with FS but for all its faults it?s still the best.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is an amusing short story on - to stay or not to stay - on this writing site. It is an entertaining read with pleasing font. Yes, sometimes it is good to take a breather away. It's when you come back you realise what you did like about the site but also what you definitely don't like and can't do anything about.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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This is an amusing short story on - to stay or not to stay - on this writing site. It is an entertaining read with pleasing font. Yes, sometimes it is good to take a breather away. It's when you come back you realise what you did like about the site but also what you definitely don't like and can't do anything about.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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I agree with your sentiments. It has faults but many good points as well. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Supe
This is so cute and very well done. I didn't think I had seen you in a while, but I have been gone for a bit as well. Welcome back! I am glad to see others enjoyed it as well.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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This is so cute and very well done. I didn't think I had seen you in a while, but I have been gone for a bit as well. Welcome back! I am glad to see others enjoyed it as well.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Thank you, very appreciated.
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you are very welcome.
Comment from jenintorre
This is such a clever write. I keep asking myself why I continue forking out money on this site, it is so expensive and can be so frustrating however I am still here. Thanks for a great read. Cheers. Jen.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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This is such a clever write. I keep asking myself why I continue forking out money on this site, it is so expensive and can be so frustrating however I am still here. Thanks for a great read. Cheers. Jen.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I keep hearing people give Tom a hard time but hey, everyone is entitled to make a living surely...I enjoyed this and am glad you decided to stick around a while. Take care. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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I keep hearing people give Tom a hard time but hey, everyone is entitled to make a living surely...I enjoyed this and am glad you decided to stick around a while. Take care. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 22-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Janet Foor
I love this Dennis. You are a great story teller and writing in dialogue is really quite a talent.
I understand your frustration and wish there was a better site to fix all our issues.
Well done my friend.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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I love this Dennis. You are a great story teller and writing in dialogue is really quite a talent.
I understand your frustration and wish there was a better site to fix all our issues.
Well done my friend.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from xvi
I love the allusion to romantic speech in this piece. I especially loved the lines, "'Of course I do. I've nurtured you from a lump of coal into a...a polished piece of coal...from a puppy, to a real dog of a writer.'" I really appreciated the "lump of coal" changing into a "polished piece of coal". Such a subtle change. That turned this from a exercise to a craft in that moment.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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I love the allusion to romantic speech in this piece. I especially loved the lines, "'Of course I do. I've nurtured you from a lump of coal into a...a polished piece of coal...from a puppy, to a real dog of a writer.'" I really appreciated the "lump of coal" changing into a "polished piece of coal". Such a subtle change. That turned this from a exercise to a craft in that moment.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Woww!! It was such an amazing piece of writing. You're possessed with such a wonderful talent. I loved it and enjoyed reading it completely. I hope you'll go miles as a writer. Wishing you luck.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Woww!! It was such an amazing piece of writing. You're possessed with such a wonderful talent. I loved it and enjoyed reading it completely. I hope you'll go miles as a writer. Wishing you luck.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Susan Larson
This would be an excellent entry in the dialogue contest. I've had these same thoughts, but then writing reviews exercises my brain much more than sudoku it mahjong and also educated me more. I'm having fun racking up points and member dollars, and also making friends while I do it.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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This would be an excellent entry in the dialogue contest. I've had these same thoughts, but then writing reviews exercises my brain much more than sudoku it mahjong and also educated me more. I'm having fun racking up points and member dollars, and also making friends while I do it.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
