Hell's hot door
A lune poem17 total reviews
Comment from tbacha58
Evil, the cold trip
Always ends
Behind Hell's hot door
Hi Vance, that is an amazing verse, I just loved the evil, and then you end it , behind devils hot door.
Because you have gone through good and bad in your life, you came out with an exceptional way of putting down the right words for the Contest. Good luck Vance. Love Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Evil, the cold trip
Always ends
Behind Hell's hot door
Hi Vance, that is an amazing verse, I just loved the evil, and then you end it , behind devils hot door.
Because you have gone through good and bad in your life, you came out with an exceptional way of putting down the right words for the Contest. Good luck Vance. Love Terry xoxo
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much dear Terry...I'm glad you found this poem to be meaningful as so often we are challenged with these very HOT doors of reality....By the way: It's 116 degrees in Las Vegas today!!! I hope you are cool and pleasant wherever you are right now. Hugs and much Love dear one! Vance
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Wow, that warm? no here in Montreal it's hot, but never as hot as 116. I remember once years ago I was visiting my younger son working as a banker in Dubai, and once home , he pulled me to the balcony, and said, mum feel the real heat. My God Vance it was suffocating, so I have an idea how you must feel. Stay in the air-conditioning for a while. Love Terry xoxo
Comment from Spitfire
This is so appropriate for the weather these days. In fact, this freeze is hell to me. I'd rather die by fire than ice.
Good use of alliteration in the last line.
Hugs,
Shari
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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This is so appropriate for the weather these days. In fact, this freeze is hell to me. I'd rather die by fire than ice.
Good use of alliteration in the last line.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment Written 30-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2014
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Thank you Shari! Always a delight to hear from you and glad you liked this one. Vance
Comment from adewpearl
Effective pairing of artwork and poem, which is in excellent 5/3/5 syllable count for the Lune
good consonance in Evil cold and alliteration in Hell's hot door
You create a compelling scene and deliver a powerful message
Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Effective pairing of artwork and poem, which is in excellent 5/3/5 syllable count for the Lune
good consonance in Evil cold and alliteration in Hell's hot door
You create a compelling scene and deliver a powerful message
Brooke
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you Brooke: I always love hearing from you! Vance
Comment from rjuselius
"Evil, the cold trip
Always ends
Behind Hell's hot door"
this is a witty piece of poetry! i especially like the concept of hell's hot door, like opening a door in a fire.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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"Evil, the cold trip
Always ends
Behind Hell's hot door"
this is a witty piece of poetry! i especially like the concept of hell's hot door, like opening a door in a fire.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank You Rebekka x ....your review is greatly appreciated and great to hear from you...Vance
Comment from Dom G Robles
A Lune contest entry, 5-3-5. The picture denotes what may happen at the corridor or behind the closed doors. A murder or something grave maybe committed, that is the theme portrayed in the poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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A Lune contest entry, 5-3-5. The picture denotes what may happen at the corridor or behind the closed doors. A murder or something grave maybe committed, that is the theme portrayed in the poem.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you Dom..your review is much appreciated. HIS GRAYNESS
Comment from seaglass
What is it about long halls that is so creepy? I have been collecting photos of them for some time. This Lune is correctly written, and says all I ever want to know about hell. lol
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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What is it about long halls that is so creepy? I have been collecting photos of them for some time. This Lune is correctly written, and says all I ever want to know about hell. lol
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Dear Seaglass; THANKS SO MUCH FOR YOUR KIND REVIEW AND I AGREE WITH YOU ...THAT'S A HALL AND A DOOR, I DON'T EVER WANT TO SEE!! VANCE
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Most welcome
Comment from robina1978
An excellent photo to complement this poem and then an original, simple Lune poem. Dot on syllable count. I liked it, you might be a strong contender. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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An excellent photo to complement this poem and then an original, simple Lune poem. Dot on syllable count. I liked it, you might be a strong contender. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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HI ROBINA; thanks so much for your review and good wishes. Glad to hear from you! Vance
Comment from michaelcahill
Perfect form here. Wow. This came out really well. A concise on the money statement I think. very philosophical and wise. Great insightful piece. Strong entry. mikey
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Perfect form here. Wow. This came out really well. A concise on the money statement I think. very philosophical and wise. Great insightful piece. Strong entry. mikey
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hi Mikey....thanks so much for the great review and your encouragement is always appreciated. Vance
Comment from John Coxon
Hmm if only it were true, hell (pardon the pun) maybe it is,certainly evokes strong images of fire and brimstone for the most deserving, good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hmm if only it were true, hell (pardon the pun) maybe it is,certainly evokes strong images of fire and brimstone for the most deserving, good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Hello John: Glad to meet you and certainly appreciate your very kind review and good wishes! Hoping to see you again soon and I will be around to return the goodwill! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Vance, liked the concept of this one - I only get a 4 count on your last line - for a Lune poem it needs to be 5-3-5 for this contest anyway.
Have another look at it.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen
"Evil, the cold trip 5
Always ends 3
At Hell's hot door" 4
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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Dear Vance, liked the concept of this one - I only get a 4 count on your last line - for a Lune poem it needs to be 5-3-5 for this contest anyway.
Have another look at it.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen
"Evil, the cold trip 5
Always ends 3
At Hell's hot door" 4
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
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That's what's great about good reviews! Many thanks, I fixed it! Hugs...Vance
