The Lesson
A Lesson Carried Through Life13 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
An interesting poetry style in which the fourth line of each stanza rhymes with the one before it and the first three lines of each do not. Read and re-read your poem several times until I got the concept and meaning. Yes, I guess we do learn a lot in childhood, painful lessons but true.
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An interesting poetry style in which the fourth line of each stanza rhymes with the one before it and the first three lines of each do not. Read and re-read your poem several times until I got the concept and meaning. Yes, I guess we do learn a lot in childhood, painful lessons but true.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from allborn66
This is a delightful poem. You communicate your story well. The word choice paints a vivid picture. The color scheme is a little bright on my computer.
Barbara
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This is a delightful poem. You communicate your story well. The word choice paints a vivid picture. The color scheme is a little bright on my computer.
Barbara
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from Ronni
I love the "life lesson' here...indeed...'we don't
always get the prize we choose"; which in disappointment
we often forget or deem so deveatating. Yet my 'my life
-love lesson' is similar to yours...
"Love may come
love may go
but no 'love"
leaves nothing..."
Good luck on this writint prompt entry....it is
so true and a direly needed reminder for us all...
Best wishes always, Ronni
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I love the "life lesson' here...indeed...'we don't
always get the prize we choose"; which in disappointment
we often forget or deem so deveatating. Yet my 'my life
-love lesson' is similar to yours...
"Love may come
love may go
but no 'love"
leaves nothing..."
Good luck on this writint prompt entry....it is
so true and a direly needed reminder for us all...
Best wishes always, Ronni
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from Lylise
This is a strong entry into the He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not writing prompt. It is well written and displays feelings and insights into romance. I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a strong entry into the He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not writing prompt. It is well written and displays feelings and insights into romance. I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from Delores J. Howard
Sad beginning. I personally don't like those Valentine mail boxes--remember them well. Some kids didn't get many--some not at all--or, as your poem put it, you may not have gotten one from the only one you really had hoped to. Happy ending here! Loved it!
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Sad beginning. I personally don't like those Valentine mail boxes--remember them well. Some kids didn't get many--some not at all--or, as your poem put it, you may not have gotten one from the only one you really had hoped to. Happy ending here! Loved it!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from barleygirl
This is a well-written poem that unfolds the story that many have experienced & the lesson at the end is a pleasant victory (altho not completely convincing). The first stanza is very excellent, with the imagery, & anticipation. Thanks for sharing & good luck in the contest.
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This is a well-written poem that unfolds the story that many have experienced & the lesson at the end is a pleasant victory (altho not completely convincing). The first stanza is very excellent, with the imagery, & anticipation. Thanks for sharing & good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from emrpoems
When you expect too much you are likely to be disappointed often. Give love and do the right things and it will naturally come back to you. Expect nothing in return for your kindness. You will find great joy when indeed someone shows appreciation.
Excellent use of enjambment alliteration and rhymes. loved your picture too.
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When you expect too much you are likely to be disappointed often. Give love and do the right things and it will naturally come back to you. Expect nothing in return for your kindness. You will find great joy when indeed someone shows appreciation.
Excellent use of enjambment alliteration and rhymes. loved your picture too.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from rouskin
Nice contest entry My favorite lines:
And we don't always win
The prize we choose
Best of luck in your contest and have a great week
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Nice contest entry My favorite lines:
And we don't always win
The prize we choose
Best of luck in your contest and have a great week
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from seaglass
this is beautifully presented with the pink and colorful picture. I like the way it feels like free verse, then the last lines of each verse rhyme. Your should pump it higher so more people will read.
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this is beautifully presented with the pink and colorful picture. I like the way it feels like free verse, then the last lines of each verse rhyme. Your should pump it higher so more people will read.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
Comment from LorraineK
Enjoyed your poem about the Valentine lesson. Sometimes anticipation is better than the real thing. Sometimes the real thing anticipated never happens. This was the case in your poem. Funny and clever. LorraineK
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Enjoyed your poem about the Valentine lesson. Sometimes anticipation is better than the real thing. Sometimes the real thing anticipated never happens. This was the case in your poem. Funny and clever. LorraineK
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014