The Man With The Boring Building
Britain's greatest secret agent battles his nemesis.11 total reviews
Comment from beautyseeker
This is the only one that kept me reading, the entry, story, suspense, wondering what will happen next. I liked it a lot, and i am not one for short stories, long stories, or long short stories, mainly i like poetry but... Got my vote! Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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This is the only one that kept me reading, the entry, story, suspense, wondering what will happen next. I liked it a lot, and i am not one for short stories, long stories, or long short stories, mainly i like poetry but... Got my vote! Well done.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your support. Glad you liked it. Basildon will return.
Comment from MagKing
It was quite very long in narration, but it's a good story.
Well, you did well without doubt.
I do think it's contest worthy.
Although there were parts I had to reread your writing.
A good one!
Good luck in the contest
MagKing
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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It was quite very long in narration, but it's a good story.
Well, you did well without doubt.
I do think it's contest worthy.
Although there were parts I had to reread your writing.
A good one!
Good luck in the contest
MagKing
Comment Written 08-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Basildon will return.
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel your story of Mr Basildon and Scorpio battling out for control an Basildon stuck in the lift to contemplate his next move and sorting through all of his gadgets
flows well easy read
cheers SC
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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good luck in the contest
your words allow the reader to see and feel your story of Mr Basildon and Scorpio battling out for control an Basildon stuck in the lift to contemplate his next move and sorting through all of his gadgets
flows well easy read
cheers SC
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Basildon will return
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welcome...SC
Comment from notdeadyet
This is a great spoof on spy movies. It is an enjoyable read because of the arrogant cuss you have picked for your protagonist. You portray him well with your dialogue of thought. This is very eel done.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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This is a great spoof on spy movies. It is an enjoyable read because of the arrogant cuss you have picked for your protagonist. You portray him well with your dialogue of thought. This is very eel done.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Basildon will return.
Comment from ScydeFX
Brilliant parody of spy films, especially the monologue in the elevator! Can't really find anything to critique, although I think the phrase is "Who'd have thought".
Great humour, glad I randomly read it. Well Done
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Brilliant parody of spy films, especially the monologue in the elevator! Can't really find anything to critique, although I think the phrase is "Who'd have thought".
Great humour, glad I randomly read it. Well Done
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your time and for the review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from RodG
I love your spoof of James Bond! You are obviously having fun with this and the absurdity of the plot is well designed. There is not much you missed in your parody of Bond himself, and I like how the story ends with the greatest of Great Britain's special agents trapped and a bit bewildered. A fun read!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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I love your spoof of James Bond! You are obviously having fun with this and the absurdity of the plot is well designed. There is not much you missed in your parody of Bond himself, and I like how the story ends with the greatest of Great Britain's special agents trapped and a bit bewildered. A fun read!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your time and for the review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Louise Michelle
I think you have a terrific sense of humor - I'm partial to fun romps. However, I think what's missing is a strong sense of wanting to be for or against your protagonist. Perhaps instead of starting with his being stuck in the elevator and flashing back, that could be used at the end which would provoke laughter because of his silly predicament.
I found just a little spag: 'too' cocky; 'it sure is, gentlemen'(comma); and 'rhymes'
I hope this helped. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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I think you have a terrific sense of humor - I'm partial to fun romps. However, I think what's missing is a strong sense of wanting to be for or against your protagonist. Perhaps instead of starting with his being stuck in the elevator and flashing back, that could be used at the end which would provoke laughter because of his silly predicament.
I found just a little spag: 'too' cocky; 'it sure is, gentlemen'(comma); and 'rhymes'
I hope this helped. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review. You pointed out something that I was a bit worried about- the little intro. I've showed it to a friend and like you, they think it's not needed so I've taken it out.
Thanks for the advice and take care.
Comment from RonCraig
Very funny! I enjoyed your humor and remembered Maxwell Smart as a childhood hero. Your dialog is perfect and precise and the story flows well. How can you leave "Britain's greatest ever secret agent" in this mess???? Surely there is a gadget that will keep the universal balance of good over evil! I propose at least his battery operated can opener.
Very good job here, I did enjoy your work!
Ron
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Very funny! I enjoyed your humor and remembered Maxwell Smart as a childhood hero. Your dialog is perfect and precise and the story flows well. How can you leave "Britain's greatest ever secret agent" in this mess???? Surely there is a gadget that will keep the universal balance of good over evil! I propose at least his battery operated can opener.
Very good job here, I did enjoy your work!
Ron
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I'm glad that you liked it.
Comment from w.j.debi
This is excellent. Bond movies are fun because of the outrageous gadgets, car chases and stunts. You have defined the staples of spy movies well and in an entertaining way.
Rats! Does look like the villain will win this one. At least Barrington has his tux on.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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This is excellent. Bond movies are fun because of the outrageous gadgets, car chases and stunts. You have defined the staples of spy movies well and in an entertaining way.
Rats! Does look like the villain will win this one. At least Barrington has his tux on.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to read this. I enjoyed writing this piece. Being from the UK, Bond movies are part of our heritage and although this is a spoof of the genre and I write it as a kind of tribute to the guys who have played Bond. They entertained me growing up and I want to entertain people now.
Thank you for your time. Take care.
Comment from Candy Burton
I enjoyed reading your story. I would suggest using more, in depth descriptions and completing your sentences in more depth. I myself find that I tend to cut off my sentences by rushing my thought. I have to go back sometimes 3 times to add the little words of ( and, or, then, and I, etc.). My mind thinks faster than my fingers.
I found detailed description in places which was nice to read because my mind then could visualize more easily what was happening as you told the story.
nice job
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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I enjoyed reading your story. I would suggest using more, in depth descriptions and completing your sentences in more depth. I myself find that I tend to cut off my sentences by rushing my thought. I have to go back sometimes 3 times to add the little words of ( and, or, then, and I, etc.). My mind thinks faster than my fingers.
I found detailed description in places which was nice to read because my mind then could visualize more easily what was happening as you told the story.
nice job
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much for the kind review and for the six stars. I certainly wasn't expecting that. I'm glad you like the story. Thank you for your time.