Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 87 "When I fail"My book of poems and stories
48 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
How have I not seen this yet? Lovely poem. I enjoy poems that rhyme, and this one fits the bill. I didn't see any typos, and I like the rhyming scheme as well.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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How have I not seen this yet? Lovely poem. I enjoy poems that rhyme, and this one fits the bill. I didn't see any typos, and I like the rhyming scheme as well.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks for your comments and review. The contest is well over and I haven't been on site in a while. I have been taking college courses to improve my reviewing skills. Really helping.
Thanks again.
Comment from gazzagodbod
put me in mind of my favouritwe poem of all time the footprints in the sand great words my friend love the message xxgazzaxx
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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put me in mind of my favouritwe poem of all time the footprints in the sand great words my friend love the message xxgazzaxx
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate your input.
Comment from LorraineK
Loved your poem. Oh how true this poem is. Christ is there to pick us up when we are down. You did a great job in describing the feelings of really, really being down in the dumps. Then of course the light at the end of the tunnel from Christ. Great job. LorraineK
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Loved your poem. Oh how true this poem is. Christ is there to pick us up when we are down. You did a great job in describing the feelings of really, really being down in the dumps. Then of course the light at the end of the tunnel from Christ. Great job. LorraineK
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate your input.
Comment from Narvik
Good depiction of faith. This poem has a definite feel of hope and redemption.
My only suggestion is to ditch the quotation marks around "He". The capitalization already singles it out and I got a sense of overkill with the quotation marks.
Other than that, I enjoyed this inspirational poem.
~ Jack
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Good depiction of faith. This poem has a definite feel of hope and redemption.
My only suggestion is to ditch the quotation marks around "He". The capitalization already singles it out and I got a sense of overkill with the quotation marks.
Other than that, I enjoyed this inspirational poem.
~ Jack
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your review and comments. I appreciate your input.
Comment from vapros
My very best grade for this excellent poetic effort, in praise of the power who helps you when you are weary. I envy those with such faith. 'Don't give up, I will help you to stand.' Fascinating reading.
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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My very best grade for this excellent poetic effort, in praise of the power who helps you when you are weary. I envy those with such faith. 'Don't give up, I will help you to stand.' Fascinating reading.
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you again for your review and comments.
Comment from LadyFrancoise
The feelings that this writing brought to me filled my eyes with tears. Which one of us has not walked this lonely road until YES, THE SMALL VOICE WHISPERS. I only pray that we all hear it!
Great writing with truth and intensity!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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The feelings that this writing brought to me filled my eyes with tears. Which one of us has not walked this lonely road until YES, THE SMALL VOICE WHISPERS. I only pray that we all hear it!
Great writing with truth and intensity!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Comment from Allblockout
Many people around the world are in the same boat,with the suffering and pain that is spreading like a cancer in societies,just waiting to hear that voice in their head,Great poem :)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Many people around the world are in the same boat,with the suffering and pain that is spreading like a cancer in societies,just waiting to hear that voice in their head,Great poem :)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
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You are very welcome :)
Comment from Acquired Taste
Lovely poem - sentiments I believe many of us share...too often.
The third sentence seems to break the cadence a bit - perhaps removing the word 'within', but that is certainly your call.
All in all, a moment of fear we all face at one time or another.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Lovely poem - sentiments I believe many of us share...too often.
The third sentence seems to break the cadence a bit - perhaps removing the word 'within', but that is certainly your call.
All in all, a moment of fear we all face at one time or another.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Comment from hobopoet
A beautiful poem, and the only quibble I have with it is that the meter slips oh-so-much on the third and eighth lines. You have a wonderful sing-song quality (which any metrical poem will have, and it's a good thing) that hooked me in and carried me along...it just hit a couple of bumps on the way.
Still...a good write. :)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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A beautiful poem, and the only quibble I have with it is that the meter slips oh-so-much on the third and eighth lines. You have a wonderful sing-song quality (which any metrical poem will have, and it's a good thing) that hooked me in and carried me along...it just hit a couple of bumps on the way.
Still...a good write. :)
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for your review and comments . I value criticism and take a second look at my writings because of it. Thanks for your input.
Comment from Joy Graham
This is really nice. It reaffirms that i must never give up my faith. Even when I feel alone and lost He is still working with me and through me. This is a great message that resonates with me. Best wishes to you in this conrtest :)
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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This is really nice. It reaffirms that i must never give up my faith. Even when I feel alone and lost He is still working with me and through me. This is a great message that resonates with me. Best wishes to you in this conrtest :)
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you Joy for your review and comments. You don't know how many times I have hauled out this poem and re-read it to give me a boost when I have been down.
