Paper Dolls and Toy Soldiers
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Comment from Keturah Martin
This writing is a very good example of portraying a specific message to the teeming masses. Something here which we can all take heed to. Keep up your great writing, my fellow-scribe.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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This writing is a very good example of portraying a specific message to the teeming masses. Something here which we can all take heed to. Keep up your great writing, my fellow-scribe.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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How nice. Thank you. Love those teeming masses. HA!! We shall scribe on indeed! mikey
Comment from pattipac
Michael, I liked how you lead us down the path where we try in vain to express to a loved one how much we truly love and respect them, how much they have done to guide and enable us to get up when we have fallen, or mentored us when we needed one,etc. I could go on and on, but like you so skillfully expressed in your poem, 'a thousand words can't quite describe it, nor can a thusand mere. And finally our grief cecomes the only love that receives no response and needs none."
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Michael, I liked how you lead us down the path where we try in vain to express to a loved one how much we truly love and respect them, how much they have done to guide and enable us to get up when we have fallen, or mentored us when we needed one,etc. I could go on and on, but like you so skillfully expressed in your poem, 'a thousand words can't quite describe it, nor can a thusand mere. And finally our grief cecomes the only love that receives no response and needs none."
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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I am glad you liked the ending because that meant the most to me. That was kind of the spot where the meaning of it all hit me. Wonderful insights. Thank you!! mikey
Comment from ravenblack
Really like your analogy with the ice cream cone- unexpected and quite witty. Our sense of mortality, a link to the human family, comes with birth and death and in between- as I puff on a cigarette- we tend to think we are immortal, special. Love does give us life and grief- in a different sense, it does too.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Really like your analogy with the ice cream cone- unexpected and quite witty. Our sense of mortality, a link to the human family, comes with birth and death and in between- as I puff on a cigarette- we tend to think we are immortal, special. Love does give us life and grief- in a different sense, it does too.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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Sorry to be so behind. I am with the cigarettes too. Glad you liked this. I thought the ice cream cone was pretty good too. Happy you picked that out. Much thanks, mikey
Comment from L.A.Matthies
It is real when it sings
It is real when it dances
It is real when it is foolish
It is real when a thousand words
can't quite describe it
nor can a thousand more - both utterly true and resonating!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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It is real when it sings
It is real when it dances
It is real when it is foolish
It is real when a thousand words
can't quite describe it
nor can a thousand more - both utterly true and resonating!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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I am so pleased that you liked this. Thank you very much, mikey
Comment from ELumpkins
It is real when it sings
It is real when it dances
It is real when it is foolish
It is real when a thousand words
can't quite describe it
nor can a thousand more
This must be real. Good post. Should rhyme more
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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It is real when it sings
It is real when it dances
It is real when it is foolish
It is real when a thousand words
can't quite describe it
nor can a thousand more
This must be real. Good post. Should rhyme more
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Sometimes I am more sublime and I rhyme, then others I am like the slime that beg for dimes!! But, not a crime this time, mikey
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. I enjoyed reading this poem, wondering where it would take me. My favorite line is 'clarity comes with death'. After reading it and then sitting a bit and reading it again, I figured I best pick up my hurt and strive on! I reminder not to wallow but get up and get going. Love and grief are going to happen. That's life.
Thanks for the poem.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Hello. I enjoyed reading this poem, wondering where it would take me. My favorite line is 'clarity comes with death'. After reading it and then sitting a bit and reading it again, I figured I best pick up my hurt and strive on! I reminder not to wallow but get up and get going. Love and grief are going to happen. That's life.
Thanks for the poem.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Excellent insights and comments. Your review and time are most appreciated. Thank you, mikey
Comment from trevorletang
Hi Michael - I truly appreciate this one from the heart. Genuine and insightful, thought-provoking and sobering. poignant and painful, truthful and personal, I dare comment.
Keep up the poignancy in your writing.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Hi Michael - I truly appreciate this one from the heart. Genuine and insightful, thought-provoking and sobering. poignant and painful, truthful and personal, I dare comment.
Keep up the poignancy in your writing.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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What encouraging words to hear. I am delighted that you enjoyed this piece. Yes, this was straight from the heart. No cleverness or anything. Just my thoughts and feelings. I can't thank you enough for this wonderful review. I may smile all year. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from tfawcus
The hidden words of grey that tear us apart and the irony of our breaking borrowed hearts... this poem is made of powerful stuff. It digs well below the surface gloss in its search for the love that lies buried beneath. What a mind-blowing ending, Mikey... "our grief
becomes the only love
that receives no response
and needs none
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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The hidden words of grey that tear us apart and the irony of our breaking borrowed hearts... this poem is made of powerful stuff. It digs well below the surface gloss in its search for the love that lies buried beneath. What a mind-blowing ending, Mikey... "our grief
becomes the only love
that receives no response
and needs none
Comment Written 02-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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I am so pleased you liked it. Very encouraging words to hear. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Petriesan
I always like your stuff.
This line spoke to me: Truth in life is a cone with ice cream on the ground
I could see lots of things being built around that
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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I always like your stuff.
This line spoke to me: Truth in life is a cone with ice cream on the ground
I could see lots of things being built around that
Comment Written 02-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much. Very appreciated, mikey
Comment from elchupakabra
I really enjoyed this piece, Michael. I thought you did a great job playing around with the construct of the piece, alternating between the quatrain and quintain at first but eventually using a descending technique as well. The linework itself was well written and flowed easily. Great work overall here, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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I really enjoyed this piece, Michael. I thought you did a great job playing around with the construct of the piece, alternating between the quatrain and quintain at first but eventually using a descending technique as well. The linework itself was well written and flowed easily. Great work overall here, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
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Appreciate the kind words and compliments. Great encouraging details that you pointed out. Makes the work feel worth it. Thank you kindly, mikey