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Roswell's Bounty

sci-fi flash

27 total reviews 
Comment from oorwull
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nice twist. Starts off as a tale that many families follow, the moving and the making ends meet problems. So where is it going? To that galaxy far away.........
Liked it a lot!

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
    Wow. I wrote this 5 years ago and gad to read it to remember. How very kind to comment. Thank you.
Comment from ScydeFX
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Really good, the pacing was done, the writing was simple, and I never saw the ending coming. It does make me want to know more about those aliens, and how that arrangement was made. Nice work.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
    Thanks, glad you enjoyed my twist.
Comment from Macsween
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Very good. I liked it. This is a great short story and is very well written. The ending was great. This should do very well in the contest. Good luck in the voting.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
    Thank you very much. I had some fun throwing in a gross factor.
Comment from in777wr#
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This was an original. This story is well written. The parents had no idea of what was going on. The 4H project was a shocker. This is a well written story.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
    Thanks, I'm glad my twist worked.
Comment from maggieadams
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I like the build-up, the foreshadowing. I figured it would be about Roswell or maybe the bomb projects in Los Alamos...but I did not jump ahead because it was a good read. Thanks.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
    Those were the clues that seem almost mandatory, but then the trick is to take the reader in a slightly different direction when the final twist is revealed. I'm so glad you enjoyed the read.
Comment from MagKing
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A very nice and good one indeed

Beautifully composed and also very interesting

A fine one indeed, which I do believe is contest worthy.

But I do believe this is more than 600 hundred words.

Although I didn't count, just speculated.

Nevertheless I think it's a good one

MagKing

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
    It is exactly, and I mean exactly 600 words. Thanks for reading.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
    Actually, i lied. I just checked again. It is 593 words. Thanks for reading.
Comment from michaelcahill
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Yep. No sex and no cuss words. Ha! This is so well written that I must vote for it. You really can write about anything!! This was most clever and caught me napping. Well done. mikey

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
    Thank you so very much. I imagine most preachers believe in procreation erstwhile, where would they find new parishioners? I enjoyed writing this for the sole private joy I got thinking readers would believe I wandered way off course, telling a silly story about white picket fence lifestyle and then trying to gross them out at the end. Do appreciate the vote.
Comment from Daedalia
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Ewww! :) This was really good for such a short story. It flowed well and I didn't see the ending coming at all! Great imagination and wonderful writing.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
    If you're not fancy on Fred, I'm pretty certain they have Ted in the freezer. Glad I was able to evoke the yuck factor Thanks for reading.
Comment from forestport12
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Wow! It got me thinking Space Babies gone Wild, sequels and more. I like how in so few words it has a firm plot and ending thoughts of what could be. You amaze me. I thought messing with the preacher would be fun and toying with the idea of other life having a creation story would be cool, but you did something here to make an avid science fiction reader think. I can tell you had fun as I did.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
    Yes, I had fun. Mostly because I figured I suckered the readers into believing I was way off base from the prompt. You got my vote and I understood perfectly what you were doing, playing to the end user.
Comment from tfawcus
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What a delightfully ghoulish fantasy! We sometimes fall into that trap on the farm of naming our livestock. It can be hard to eat a slice of Fred! However, the more personal connection with what we eat makes us more thoughtful about how we eat. Many city children do not make the connection between the supermarket shelves and the origin of the produce on display.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2014
    You're right, most kids thing food come from boxes or drive thru lanes. I really can't imagine farm life from that perspective, not denying the reality, but I'd likely become a true vegetarian.

    Thanks for reading.