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Comment from Sankey
A lovely poem. Thanks for talking about our old friend the Man in the Moon hehe. I also liked the photo in the post as well quite appropriate.
No Spags, Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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A lovely poem. Thanks for talking about our old friend the Man in the Moon hehe. I also liked the photo in the post as well quite appropriate.
No Spags, Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment and review!! :)
Comment from krys123
As the days go by except for a blue moon you are so correct when you say it's almost taken for granted. But a knowledge reverie it blesses the sky with ominous beauty. Thank you so much for sharing this poem with everyone including myself. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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As the days go by except for a blue moon you are so correct when you say it's almost taken for granted. But a knowledge reverie it blesses the sky with ominous beauty. Thank you so much for sharing this poem with everyone including myself. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much krys123....much appreciate your kind thoughtful words :)
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You are so welcome
Comment from zanya
A celebration of that heavenly orb - the moon -the poem has a quiet tranquil rhythm reflecting the theme of the moon's serene, quiet beauty
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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A celebration of that heavenly orb - the moon -the poem has a quiet tranquil rhythm reflecting the theme of the moon's serene, quiet beauty
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much zanya, I appreciate your thoughtful comments
Comment from Smoothiecool
love the picture choice
your poem portrays to the reader your thoughts about the moon the solitude and beauty of it
one can see and feel this as one reads
flows well easy read
cheers SC
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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love the picture choice
your poem portrays to the reader your thoughts about the moon the solitude and beauty of it
one can see and feel this as one reads
flows well easy read
cheers SC
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much...cheers to you also :)
Comment from Treischel
Exquisite thoughts you composed about the moon. A lovely free verse poem. The quite serenity and it's closeness come through wonderfully. It's great the was it is, but I thing a little more sculpting of the verse might give it even more dash. Something like:
So beautiful
is the moon
as it sits high
in its
solitude,
looking down
from
its beaming throne...
reminding me
of its
magnificent loneliness
so close,
you can almost
touch it,
but it sits
unreachable
in its loveliness
most often
taken for granted...
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Exquisite thoughts you composed about the moon. A lovely free verse poem. The quite serenity and it's closeness come through wonderfully. It's great the was it is, but I thing a little more sculpting of the verse might give it even more dash. Something like:
So beautiful
is the moon
as it sits high
in its
solitude,
looking down
from
its beaming throne...
reminding me
of its
magnificent loneliness
so close,
you can almost
touch it,
but it sits
unreachable
in its loveliness
most often
taken for granted...
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much :)
Comment from emjaihammond
What a lovely word picture involving the moon. Your words alone are attractive and they cause me to think about the beauty that is ours in nature. The picture is also an enhancement to your words. Great job.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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What a lovely word picture involving the moon. Your words alone are attractive and they cause me to think about the beauty that is ours in nature. The picture is also an enhancement to your words. Great job.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, glad you enjoyed it :)
Comment from MoIronE13
In deed the artwork is fabulous with your poem.
The Moon (that me - Mahina) is certainly a mysterious piece of Rock.
I was reading that the moon from the perspective of Earth, looks like it never moves or rotates. But in indeed does if it is view from the North Star = Polaris. It take 27.5 day to make one rotation.. FYI stuff
Your writing and delivery has me spinning in joyful glee.
Makes me want to "Howl"... LOL
But seriously, this poem Rocks the house.
Just beautiful, like me!
Bless you.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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In deed the artwork is fabulous with your poem.
The Moon (that me - Mahina) is certainly a mysterious piece of Rock.
I was reading that the moon from the perspective of Earth, looks like it never moves or rotates. But in indeed does if it is view from the North Star = Polaris. It take 27.5 day to make one rotation.. FYI stuff
Your writing and delivery has me spinning in joyful glee.
Makes me want to "Howl"... LOL
But seriously, this poem Rocks the house.
Just beautiful, like me!
Bless you.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you MolronE13, that's wonderful of you to say, God bless your day...I enjoyed the bit of moon history also because the moon never seems to move although it seems to follow us. But as in Geography class we were all taught that the moon revolves around the earth. It is nice to know that when I look up at the moon, others see it too :)
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Keep thy head up and see the Light..
Comment from Caressa_08
Thanks for reminding us what is out there, for all who can see the beauty, even at night that is given to us all...And, so much occupies us on a daily basis, the moon is still out there, so wonderful, it shines,like a night light on the outside & it's free...and quite a wonder & yes, under appreciated.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thanks for reminding us what is out there, for all who can see the beauty, even at night that is given to us all...And, so much occupies us on a daily basis, the moon is still out there, so wonderful, it shines,like a night light on the outside & it's free...and quite a wonder & yes, under appreciated.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you for you kind and thoughtful words, have a great day and evening :)
Comment from TOMORAL
That is a beautiful piece of artwork, indeed. Also the poem. I got caught up in your words as you described something we do often take for granted, but every time I look up at it, I am in awe.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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That is a beautiful piece of artwork, indeed. Also the poem. I got caught up in your words as you described something we do often take for granted, but every time I look up at it, I am in awe.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much, I love the moon too and always take time to gaze up at the stars also, take care
Comment from FrannyG
This is a very simple poem but quite a lovely theme. You need to remove all your apostrophes in all the 'its'. None needed. Your adjectives are also bordering on cliches and more original creative ones would improve an otherwise quite good poem. But well done.
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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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This is a very simple poem but quite a lovely theme. You need to remove all your apostrophes in all the 'its'. None needed. Your adjectives are also bordering on cliches and more original creative ones would improve an otherwise quite good poem. But well done.
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Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you, I did go back to change the apostrophes as you suggested...it's late and I wasn't thinking and so glad you pointed that out. :)