Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Minor Myths"Poems written using the pantoum form
62 total reviews
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Oh, I am very sorry I have no six here. This is stunning. You hit the mark so well on a message I have tried to write about, that is the arrogance of man. I love and respect science, but we are too full of our collective selves to think we have it all figured out. I am convinced the human mind could never comprehend the slightest scope of God's domain.
This is serious good and I like the use of the refrain line too. It is a winner for sure.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Oh, I am very sorry I have no six here. This is stunning. You hit the mark so well on a message I have tried to write about, that is the arrogance of man. I love and respect science, but we are too full of our collective selves to think we have it all figured out. I am convinced the human mind could never comprehend the slightest scope of God's domain.
This is serious good and I like the use of the refrain line too. It is a winner for sure.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for this review. It means a lot to me. I read quite a lot of your prodigious output of fine poetry though I don't always have the time to respond to it all. Knowing what a good poet you are, your praise is highly valued. I was introduced to the works of Joseph Campbell by another poet on this site. There is great depth in his thinking and he repeatedly hits the mark. What I have written is just an echo of what I have so far read of his works. Thanks again!
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. We look at God's creations and try to find simple answers. Science can tell us how certain things act. It can not tell us why it all exists. How it started. The big bang sounds something like what came first, The chicken or the egg? Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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I love the picture. I love the poem. We look at God's creations and try to find simple answers. Science can tell us how certain things act. It can not tell us why it all exists. How it started. The big bang sounds something like what came first, The chicken or the egg? Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your kind review, Nelliesellie. So much appreciated!
Comment from pattipac
Your pantoum about man's struggle to comprehend God's purpose. by adhereing to simplistic myths to believe-in is quite poignant. Excellent word choice and rhyme-scheme makes your poem flow easily like a gentle stream.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Your pantoum about man's struggle to comprehend God's purpose. by adhereing to simplistic myths to believe-in is quite poignant. Excellent word choice and rhyme-scheme makes your poem flow easily like a gentle stream.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Many thanks for your lovely review and generous gift of stars! What a very nice thing to wake up to as the sun creeps up over the horizon on this Antipodean Saturday morning!
Comment from Dustman6180
I've read several of the pantoum entries for this contest. Once I looked up the meaning of "wraith" and "cogent," I found your poem easy to read, with perfect rhythm and rhyme. The sentiment was well received also.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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I've read several of the pantoum entries for this contest. Once I looked up the meaning of "wraith" and "cogent," I found your poem easy to read, with perfect rhythm and rhyme. The sentiment was well received also.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Dustman, for taking the time and trouble to review. Also for your kind comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Writer,
Well stated and the urge to demystify well stated. Einstein believed in a God, need I say more?
Good luck in the contest. A well written poem.
Happy Holidays,
Winslow
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Dear Writer,
Well stated and the urge to demystify well stated. Einstein believed in a God, need I say more?
Good luck in the contest. A well written poem.
Happy Holidays,
Winslow
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Winslow, for taking the time and trouble to review. Also for your kind comments. Much appreciated. Einstein was a wise man.
Comment from wadamani
A difficult format of poetry for some to appreciate but I felt the words you used and the flow of your stanzas managed to open some critics to this style of poetry. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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A difficult format of poetry for some to appreciate but I felt the words you used and the flow of your stanzas managed to open some critics to this style of poetry. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Wadamani, for taking the time and trouble to review. Also for your kind comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
Well stated, and developed.
"The heart which is established in righteousness seeks nothing for itself, requires nothing, and demands nothing. When we attain to a sufficient faith, all things that are needful are added. Miracles are wrought, not as a result of faith, but by the very fact of faith." --Manly Palmer Hall
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Excellent.
Well stated, and developed.
"The heart which is established in righteousness seeks nothing for itself, requires nothing, and demands nothing. When we attain to a sufficient faith, all things that are needful are added. Miracles are wrought, not as a result of faith, but by the very fact of faith." --Manly Palmer Hall
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, E1Poetry, for taking the time and trouble to review. Also for your kind comments and quotation from Manly Palmer Hall. Much appreciated.
Comment from Treischel
Nicely written phantom that carries a strong spiritual message of Reality check. We are blind to Gods message as we try to demystify creation, well done! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Nicely written phantom that carries a strong spiritual message of Reality check. We are blind to Gods message as we try to demystify creation, well done! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Treischel, for taking the time and trouble to review. Also for your kind comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from 9999pool
With so many myths and questions in our minds as well as the coincidences and the mystery that life has, we will undoubtly have some minor myths to dwell on.
But whatever it is, the truth is usually difficutlt to grasp and so we must put more faith and belief in God and one day we will know.
Excellent write and well expressed.
Cheerio, and good luck to the contest.
Best, Ritchie. :))
Have a great day.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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With so many myths and questions in our minds as well as the coincidences and the mystery that life has, we will undoubtly have some minor myths to dwell on.
But whatever it is, the truth is usually difficutlt to grasp and so we must put more faith and belief in God and one day we will know.
Excellent write and well expressed.
Cheerio, and good luck to the contest.
Best, Ritchie. :))
Have a great day.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Ritchie, for taking the time and trouble to review. Also for your kind comments. Much appreciated. Faith, as you suggest, is the key. It locks in belief and locks out many fallacies.
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Welcome, cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Happy holidays.
Comment from Mastery
Well, I have never heard of Joseph Campbell, but he looks quite astute. The poem is well written and I enjoyed this stanza in particular, author:
"The vastness of the universe,
Must twist the facts we cannot mend.
With cogent whispers quite diverse
Our weak attempts to comprehend
Good luck in the contest. Bob
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Well, I have never heard of Joseph Campbell, but he looks quite astute. The poem is well written and I enjoyed this stanza in particular, author:
"The vastness of the universe,
Must twist the facts we cannot mend.
With cogent whispers quite diverse
Our weak attempts to comprehend
Good luck in the contest. Bob
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Bob, for taking the time and trouble to review. Also for your kind comments and good wishes for the contest. Much appreciated.