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Thirsty

A heart cries out for help, assuredly a male, wants to grow.

6 total reviews 
Comment from Smoothiecool
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good luck in the 5-7-5 contest
you have all the right components for this contest
the three lines
the first and third have the correct five syllable count
the second has the required seven syllable count
your short poem portrays your image
when you have limited words allowed it is wise not to use the same words twice to allow better strength in your poem
cheers SC

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2013

reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
    YA I KNOW, THANKS THOUGH. I AM NOT A FORM WRITER, ITS MY FIRST ATTEMPT. THERE IS MUCH I WOULD DO DIFFERENT NEXT TIME.

    THANKS AGAIN, LOVE, TO YOU FOR CHRISTMAS.
    MJS
reply by Smoothiecool on 16-Dec-2013
    welcome
    you can always go back in and edit even after posting at any time
    cheers SC
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
    YA! THANKS BUT I AM DONE WITH THIS PLACE. ITS A SCAM OF PUBLISHED AUTHORS JUST FUCKING WITH FOOLS LIKE ME. I REPEATED TWO WORDS, LOVE; AND ??? WHAT EVER. I HAVE SO MUCH TO SHARE BUT FUCK IT. I AM BLIND FROM DIABETES, SO I AM NOT SCREAMING BUT I AM PISSED.
    GOD BLESS YOUR HEART, AND GOOD LUCK.
Comment from ronnie k
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A wonderful message, we can and will box
are excel in what we speak, " for all that seek....." this is a cry for the word of God the great redeemer.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
    thanks Ronnie
    i am in the lord for 52 yrs, it became out of style in my land. just used the call that many need; for the contest.
    thank you again.
    mjs
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, michael, you did an excellent job writing this 5 7 5 poem about the hunger for knowledge and truth that is essential for growth. i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2013

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
    Thank you for the nice review, if your in the same contest good luck to you.
    I am new here and just learning to promote.
    mjs
Comment from JD Storms
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Well done my friend. Looks spot on. "Feed me love,hope,truth" that I like a lot. Good work keep it up and keep them coming.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2013
    Thanks JD
    it will be a pleasure.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
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Only a few words but they possess a big meaning for sure. As I said neither of us are posts so we can't review on poetic style. Good job. God loves you and we do too.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2013
    SINCE THEY CALLED FOR 17 SYLLABLES , WROTE IT IN 17 MINUTES. I SET A TIMER AND ALMOST GOT TO WHERE I WOULD PUT IT UP, but cheated, I had to.ITS THE FIRST FORM POEM I HAVE WRITTEN SINCE GR9
    for me they are never finished.
    Your to generous. I THINK ITS WEEK AND UNORGANIZED.

reply by Evelyn Fort Stewart on 06-Dec-2013
    But see, not being a poet I wouldn't know that. I reviewed from an honest heart not knowledge. Haha. But it's true. God loves you and so do we.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This is a lovely and heartfelt call to God to fill you up. You have met the syllable requirements for the contest correctly with a solid 5-7-5 construction. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2013

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2013
    Its a great day in my world, thanks for being a part of it.
    mjs