Sea Musings
a free verse poem about storm watching30 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
You capture the essence of the storm well and tie it nicely to yearning for the one you love and miss. The cadence of your verse flows well to make for an enjoyable read. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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You capture the essence of the storm well and tie it nicely to yearning for the one you love and miss. The cadence of your verse flows well to make for an enjoyable read. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much for your encouragement and best wishes. RodG
Comment from paulah60
Some lovely, rich use of words in this piece (including personifying as a wonderful device that breathes life into a poem):
'Grayish clouds hug the horizon'
'squeezing whiteness from the sky'
'the briny breath of the sea',
and this one in particular:
'While air thickens like slow-stirred chowder'. Great imagery.
Your poem has a melancholy feel, which gradually intensifies with each stanza (also magnified by the accompanying pic). Nice work!
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Some lovely, rich use of words in this piece (including personifying as a wonderful device that breathes life into a poem):
'Grayish clouds hug the horizon'
'squeezing whiteness from the sky'
'the briny breath of the sea',
and this one in particular:
'While air thickens like slow-stirred chowder'. Great imagery.
Your poem has a melancholy feel, which gradually intensifies with each stanza (also magnified by the accompanying pic). Nice work!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Paula, it is so encouraging to receive praise like this. I really appreciate your pointing out the devices you enjoyed. Thank you. RodG
Comment from comanalbert
"Yearning" holds the key to all of the images.And you do not disappoint in flashes of pictures blazing beyond the eyes.Well done, i am at a loss of words, I will come back
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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"Yearning" holds the key to all of the images.And you do not disappoint in flashes of pictures blazing beyond the eyes.Well done, i am at a loss of words, I will come back
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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I am thrilled you are at a loss for words in describing your reaction to "Sea Musings.". This is every poet's hope. Thank you again, comanalbert.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a very good free verse - well written eleven good lines. I particularly like the lines 3 and 4 of your first stanza. An overall good read. Hope you do well in the contest. Good Luck Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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This is a very good free verse - well written eleven good lines. I particularly like the lines 3 and 4 of your first stanza. An overall good read. Hope you do well in the contest. Good Luck Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you, Dorothy,for your review and kind praise. RodG
Comment from sujo1964
Beautiful description. I go to the beach to write, and this is exactly how I feel while I am there. Beautiful at night, and the day. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Beautiful description. I go to the beach to write, and this is exactly how I feel while I am there. Beautiful at night, and the day. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, sujo, for this encouraging review. I am delighted that you can relate to "Sea Musings'" Speaker's experience so well. RodG
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is a beautiful poem that embraces the quiet moments of thoughts. Everyone has that special place to go and just think of someone. Thanks for sharing.
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This is a beautiful poem that embraces the quiet moments of thoughts. Everyone has that special place to go and just think of someone. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your kind praise. I am delighted you were able to put yourself in the Speaker's shoes. RodG
Comment from honeytree
Very powerful art work for these words
That have been written in a very beautiful way.
Thoughts flow, memories come alive, for love that is missed.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Very powerful art work for these words
That have been written in a very beautiful way.
Thoughts flow, memories come alive, for love that is missed.
Honey tree
Comment Written 04-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Your analysis could not be more succinct, and I truly appreciate your warm praise. RodG
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I am glad you liked the review RodG
Annie
Comment from L.A.Matthies
The briny breath of sea ...I love that line! This makes me want to take a drive to the ocean right now, you're descriptive words are outstanding!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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The briny breath of sea ...I love that line! This makes me want to take a drive to the ocean right now, you're descriptive words are outstanding!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Thank you, L. A. Matthies, for your lavish praise. I think of myself as a wordsmith rather than a poet and truly appreciate the compliment. RodG
Comment from Oatmeal
RodG,
Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Very enchanted atmosphere, thought provoking, very enjoyable and thrilling.
It is spotless. No errors at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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RodG,
Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Very enchanted atmosphere, thought provoking, very enjoyable and thrilling.
It is spotless. No errors at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Oatmeal. I post poems often, so please look for me. RodG
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Rod,
I will watch for you.
You are very welcome.
Love you,
Camille
Comment from harmony13
CORRECTED: An excellent poem! The poem flowed well. The poem is thought provoking and deep. The reader found the line "While air thickens like slow-stirred chowder" extremely descriptive. The author's words were creative and intense.
Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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CORRECTED: An excellent poem! The poem flowed well. The poem is thought provoking and deep. The reader found the line "While air thickens like slow-stirred chowder" extremely descriptive. The author's words were creative and intense.
Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 03-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2013
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I am extremely pleased you like "Sea Musings" so much. Thank you for your kind praise. RodG