The Bounty Hunter
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Hunter becomes the Hunted"Supernatural Bounty Hunter
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Comment from Silent1rose
Samuel took out the stick that used be a lollipop and flicked [it] aside.
As the silence hung in the air[,] he figured she could only read the thoughts at the front of his mind.
But[,] they have something we want, or something you want, and I don't mean Devlin's head."
In seconds his revolver was replaced by a silver automatic rifle with a smiling red devil image on the barrel. "Cute." (Did the bounty hunter just say cute??? D8)
A veteran of countless combat tours[,] he didn't need to ask any questions.
With one hand[,] he held the creature by the neck as it struggled to sink its teeth into man flesh.
Yikes!! The hunter's arm is gone! He's cheated death once, he can do it again. I believe in hime. :) I love this book. My heart's racing, and my eyes are bucking. LOL. Good chapter. I only found a few little things that needs to be fixed. This chapter was great. ~ Rose
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Samuel took out the stick that used be a lollipop and flicked [it] aside.
As the silence hung in the air[,] he figured she could only read the thoughts at the front of his mind.
But[,] they have something we want, or something you want, and I don't mean Devlin's head."
In seconds his revolver was replaced by a silver automatic rifle with a smiling red devil image on the barrel. "Cute." (Did the bounty hunter just say cute??? D8)
A veteran of countless combat tours[,] he didn't need to ask any questions.
With one hand[,] he held the creature by the neck as it struggled to sink its teeth into man flesh.
Yikes!! The hunter's arm is gone! He's cheated death once, he can do it again. I believe in hime. :) I love this book. My heart's racing, and my eyes are bucking. LOL. Good chapter. I only found a few little things that needs to be fixed. This chapter was great. ~ Rose
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much. Good eyes you have, I will fix those. Yes, he said, Cute because of the little devil.
Comment from judiverse
Jessie makes the revelation that Devlin has her mother and is holding her hostage. The Colt's powers are amazing. It can change into a more powerful weapon when needed. The squad is made up of werewolves and they're are hungry. The Hunter is really up against it. He feels the end is near as a wolf chews his arm. Fast-paced action. judi
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Jessie makes the revelation that Devlin has her mother and is holding her hostage. The Colt's powers are amazing. It can change into a more powerful weapon when needed. The squad is made up of werewolves and they're are hungry. The Hunter is really up against it. He feels the end is near as a wolf chews his arm. Fast-paced action. judi
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much, Judi
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You're so welcome. I wanted to say congratulations too on your winning the prompt contest. Such a powerful thought. Part of the problem is the foolish women who put up with these deadbeats. judi
Comment from Twilightspire
Nice work. I love how you keep adding more and more to the monster mythology, goblins and orcs...excellent. I like the opening paragraph. It drew you into the story quickly and prepared us for the rest of the chapter. Mesmerizing, in a word.
The hook at the end, the almost sure death of the Hunter was amazing. If I wasn't already obsessed, I would be now.
Great job, my friend.
-T.J.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Nice work. I love how you keep adding more and more to the monster mythology, goblins and orcs...excellent. I like the opening paragraph. It drew you into the story quickly and prepared us for the rest of the chapter. Mesmerizing, in a word.
The hook at the end, the almost sure death of the Hunter was amazing. If I wasn't already obsessed, I would be now.
Great job, my friend.
-T.J.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Wow! I appreciate the great rating and review. I thank you for following the story. To think it all started from a sentence starts contest.
Comment from pbroussard209
You got to be kidding me you stopped there. I saw another post so I hope for your sake it's the next chapter. Lol loved this chapter excitement all the way to the end.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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You got to be kidding me you stopped there. I saw another post so I hope for your sake it's the next chapter. Lol loved this chapter excitement all the way to the end.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much. I'm sorry for the abrupt cliff hanger. I had to find a somewhat plausible break point. I really appreciate your staying with the story to the end.
Comment from Siouxsun
Great chapter! Perfect picture!
Minor spag
1.werewolves -[werewolf's or werewolves']
2.heart beat -[one word]
3.the [Serge] began taking off his shirt-did you mean[sarge]?
That is a pretty viscous attack. Very graphic. Just what you were going for I'm sure. Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Great chapter! Perfect picture!
Minor spag
1.werewolves -[werewolf's or werewolves']
2.heart beat -[one word]
3.the [Serge] began taking off his shirt-did you mean[sarge]?
That is a pretty viscous attack. Very graphic. Just what you were going for I'm sure. Well done!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much. I hope you enjoyed Chapter 10 as well. That's the end of the story.
Comment from adewpearl
large Oak tree - oak
These things aren't human, so I'm - add comma
sliding glass door, and it was indeed - add comma
Blended into the shadows, he was invisible - add comma
You got it, lover - add comma for direct address
Excellent detail of setting
Good character development
Good natural-sounding dialogue
Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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large Oak tree - oak
These things aren't human, so I'm - add comma
sliding glass door, and it was indeed - add comma
Blended into the shadows, he was invisible - add comma
You got it, lover - add comma for direct address
Excellent detail of setting
Good character development
Good natural-sounding dialogue
Brooke
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much, Brooke
Comment from sumbody32point5
Crazy! Got my heart beat going! The action really helped me visualize the scene, which kept the pace of the story moving. I'm going to take a look at death and deals.. You got me hooked
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Crazy! Got my heart beat going! The action really helped me visualize the scene, which kept the pace of the story moving. I'm going to take a look at death and deals.. You got me hooked
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the action, most can't take that level.
Comment from kf4tap
A fascinating read. It caught and kept my attention from start to finish. the wording helped to project me into the story line as if it was a movie being watched. excellent job! I look forward to seeing more of this.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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A fascinating read. It caught and kept my attention from start to finish. the wording helped to project me into the story line as if it was a movie being watched. excellent job! I look forward to seeing more of this.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you. I hope you enjoy chapter ten. That's the end of his story.