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Comment from CornishChick
Hey Tom,
You outdid yourself on this. I was expecting a poem about a carnival ride. You roped me in with the first stanza. Your talent shines with this poem.
Every line flows, even with such exacting restrictions.
I identified with this poem on a very deep level. Maybe we don't "get it" until we have snow on the roof!
I totally respect and enjoy your God-given talent. Thank you for sharing... and sharing... and sharing!
I don't have time to read your poems every day, but anticipate every one!
Thanks again, Arlene
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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Hey Tom,
You outdid yourself on this. I was expecting a poem about a carnival ride. You roped me in with the first stanza. Your talent shines with this poem.
Every line flows, even with such exacting restrictions.
I identified with this poem on a very deep level. Maybe we don't "get it" until we have snow on the roof!
I totally respect and enjoy your God-given talent. Thank you for sharing... and sharing... and sharing!
I don't have time to read your poems every day, but anticipate every one!
Thanks again, Arlene
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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Thank you Arlene. I'm always glad when I hear from you. You are always insightful and encouraging in your reviews. I'm glad you liked this one, and am elated with the award of all those stars.
Comment from Selina Stambi
I agree entirely with the thoughts in the author notes, Tom.
It's amazing how the slings and arrows of outrageous fortune can change one's circumstances overnight.
The point is .. joy is a state of mind - no matter what!
Love the pic. It's perfect for the write.
Sonali
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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I agree entirely with the thoughts in the author notes, Tom.
It's amazing how the slings and arrows of outrageous fortune can change one's circumstances overnight.
The point is .. joy is a state of mind - no matter what!
Love the pic. It's perfect for the write.
Sonali
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Thank you Sonali, for being along on the rude.
Comment from ravenblack
Very philosophic roller coaster. You are right, sometimes the rides are far to brief. Highs, lows, steep drops- tell you the truth, I can't stomach the rides much anymore. Inner ear problems and even the coasters I used to love make me nauseous.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Very philosophic roller coaster. You are right, sometimes the rides are far to brief. Highs, lows, steep drops- tell you the truth, I can't stomach the rides much anymore. Inner ear problems and even the coasters I used to love make me nauseous.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013
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Thank you ravenblack, I liked them more as a kid myself.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
What a clever format and cetainly used well in this poem.
Your subject choice was well suited to this style and the syllable format reminded me of the Giant Drop ride at Seaworld in OZ.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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What a clever format and cetainly used well in this poem.
Your subject choice was well suited to this style and the syllable format reminded me of the Giant Drop ride at Seaworld in OZ.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thanks Shirley. That's quite a drop.
Comment from rod007
This poem appeals to me. It really does bring home the reality that life is too short which it is filled with momentary pleasures and sadness. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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This poem appeals to me. It really does bring home the reality that life is too short which it is filled with momentary pleasures and sadness. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you Rod. As I know you well know.
Comment from Joan E.
I can relate--one of my shortest poems is in "Pieces of Her Mind": life/ is too/ sprint
Thank you for sharing another form and stretching yourself by using it to describe life's "ride". I enjoyed your rhymes and your photo brought back memories of a trip to this extraordinary mall some years ago. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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I can relate--one of my shortest poems is in "Pieces of Her Mind": life/ is too/ sprint
Thank you for sharing another form and stretching yourself by using it to describe life's "ride". I enjoyed your rhymes and your photo brought back memories of a trip to this extraordinary mall some years ago. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you Joan.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent Eleven77 poem with the required line syllable count and rhyme and refrain.It has excellent rhythm and excellent unconventional, visually pleasing structure. I believe it characterizes one of life's truths.
Preston
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent Eleven77 poem with the required line syllable count and rhyme and refrain.It has excellent rhythm and excellent unconventional, visually pleasing structure. I believe it characterizes one of life's truths.
Preston
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you Preston. Yes, indeed life can be a roller lasted ride.,
Comment from Capricorn30
Looks like a thrilling ride, Tom!
Indeed, life very much parellels the thrills of amusement park attractions;
Great rewards do not last long;
Heartache seems to last forever.
The Eleven77 format imitates the coaster ride.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Looks like a thrilling ride, Tom!
Indeed, life very much parellels the thrills of amusement park attractions;
Great rewards do not last long;
Heartache seems to last forever.
The Eleven77 format imitates the coaster ride.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you Margaret. It is a fun format to write.
Comment from Dsteiner
Awesome! I had never encountered this type of poetry. You did a fantastic job and have given me a new interest to pursue. The picture you used is most appropriate for this work. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Awesome! I had never encountered this type of poetry. You did a fantastic job and have given me a new interest to pursue. The picture you used is most appropriate for this work. Well done!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you Dsteiner. By all means, pursue the poetic forms.
Comment from ragamuffin
Clever idea for a poetry form and you piece fits the requirements well without sounding awkward or forced. I like how the poem uses something well known to relate life experience.
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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Clever idea for a poetry form and you piece fits the requirements well without sounding awkward or forced. I like how the poem uses something well known to relate life experience.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you ragamuffin. I'm glad you could relate.
