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Comment from 9999pool
As we go through life's junkyard, be prepared to find acid rain that are caused by too much toxins and pollution released into our planet's atmosphere.
All types of man made things can create pollution and threaten the environment.
Preservationa and concervation become more difficult with all the available machines and industries that can wreak nature.
Be prepared for all the consquesnces of man's actions.
Acid rain, mainly form nitrous oxide and carbon monoxide can harm living creatiures including us!
Cheerio, great write and well expressed a mesage to all of us. Ritchie. :)).
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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As we go through life's junkyard, be prepared to find acid rain that are caused by too much toxins and pollution released into our planet's atmosphere.
All types of man made things can create pollution and threaten the environment.
Preservationa and concervation become more difficult with all the available machines and industries that can wreak nature.
Be prepared for all the consquesnces of man's actions.
Acid rain, mainly form nitrous oxide and carbon monoxide can harm living creatiures including us!
Cheerio, great write and well expressed a mesage to all of us. Ritchie. :)).
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Thank you Ritchie. Well said.
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Hi Tom,
I was wondering at the title of iron fish and nothign comes to mind. The author's note abotu acid rain, did bump my muse into writing this review, smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
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That's the picture, made of iron from a junkyard.
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Oic. Thanks for the info. Iron fish rusted by acid rain perhaps, smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment from xotic flotsam
Fishing in a junkyard pond is bound to leave immersed in robotic dreams. Those involved in that kind of work seem unlikely environmentalists. They just don't care, leaving nothing but tainted iron fish. An unusual write. I like the multiple messages and your a/b a/b rhyme format. be well.
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Fishing in a junkyard pond is bound to leave immersed in robotic dreams. Those involved in that kind of work seem unlikely environmentalists. They just don't care, leaving nothing but tainted iron fish. An unusual write. I like the multiple messages and your a/b a/b rhyme format. be well.
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Thank you xotic flotsam.
Comment from RGstar
Very metallic Treischel, I can even smell its surroundings.
A great piece of creative art with this write.
You have industrialized its movement in an environment where your imagery is king.
A great piece of inspiration.
RG
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Very metallic Treischel, I can even smell its surroundings.
A great piece of creative art with this write.
You have industrialized its movement in an environment where your imagery is king.
A great piece of inspiration.
RG
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you RG, I was really only looking for something to say about the photograph and finally came up with something. :0/
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Best wishes, my friend. Good one.
Comment from ravenblack
In acid rain swam an iron fish- really, this sounds like wandering in the soulless, industrial/electronic age. I really think that this poem wants to be longer.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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In acid rain swam an iron fish- really, this sounds like wandering in the soulless, industrial/electronic age. I really think that this poem wants to be longer.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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thanks ravenblack. Nope, that's all my Muse had. I was just happy to finally come up with a poem for that dang picture.
Comment from adewpearl
I love your photo and the overall presentation of your poem
excellent use of abab rhyming
strong social commentary - one wonders what the future holds as we so busily work to destroy our planet including everything that swims
Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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I love your photo and the overall presentation of your poem
excellent use of abab rhyming
strong social commentary - one wonders what the future holds as we so busily work to destroy our planet including everything that swims
Brooke
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you Brooke. I wonder too!
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
Excellent haunting image of a possible world to be and is in some places. Good imagery in "in toxic rain swim iron fish"
Techical perfection as usual.
Preston
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
Excellent haunting image of a possible world to be and is in some places. Good imagery in "in toxic rain swim iron fish"
Techical perfection as usual.
Preston
Comment Written 12-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from Capricorn30
Well stated;
Man's careless, thoughtless actions result in toxic environments, wreaking havoc in our waters;
"iron fish"--scary thoughts resulting from the horrors of man.
A sad state of affairs as increasing pollution threatens both man and wildlife.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Well stated;
Man's careless, thoughtless actions result in toxic environments, wreaking havoc in our waters;
"iron fish"--scary thoughts resulting from the horrors of man.
A sad state of affairs as increasing pollution threatens both man and wildlife.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Thank you Shirley, you got it perfectly.
Comment from trimple
I read this abab poem three times and thoroughly enjoyed its quirkyness. A vision of the modern world devoid of feeling or consideration of others perhaps?
A fabulous picture of a nuts and bolts salmon!
What did you mean "It burns?"
another great write
kind regards
tracey
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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I read this abab poem three times and thoroughly enjoyed its quirkyness. A vision of the modern world devoid of feeling or consideration of others perhaps?
A fabulous picture of a nuts and bolts salmon!
What did you mean "It burns?"
another great write
kind regards
tracey
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Thank you Tracey. The acid rain burns, so imagine catching and eating that fish. :-))
Comment from Joan E.
Your title and entire poem is intriguing and rather surreal. You added the perfect photograph to reinforce the theme. I admired your alternating rhymes in the quatrains and wish you the best in the contest. Hugs and happy Sunday- Joan
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Your title and entire poem is intriguing and rather surreal. You added the perfect photograph to reinforce the theme. I admired your alternating rhymes in the quatrains and wish you the best in the contest. Hugs and happy Sunday- Joan
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
Comment from phoenix13447
That acid rain is scary. Beautifully scripted and visually very real. Thank you for sharing this...I wish you luck with the contest.
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That acid rain is scary. Beautifully scripted and visually very real. Thank you for sharing this...I wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
