Fortress Walls
ABC Poetry Contest I made into a song.40 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
Wow! You went the extra mile with this one. I thought it was to be five lines but yours is longer. I love how you repeated yet at the end of each stanza. This is a lovely theme. I found it easy to read and follow what you were trying to say. Congratulations on winning this contest!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Wow! You went the extra mile with this one. I thought it was to be five lines but yours is longer. I love how you repeated yet at the end of each stanza. This is a lovely theme. I found it easy to read and follow what you were trying to say. Congratulations on winning this contest!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review and congrats, Joy. Yeah, I figured I'd try a few extra lines then just kept going from there, lol. I'm glad you liked the piece, Joy. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 14-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review and gracious rating. I'm glad you all liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from rouskin
Very attractive artwork and perfect poem
It really deserves All Time Best
My favorite lines:
Made clear are dreams that love will last
Neath nurtured care not known before
Once memories unchain my past
Perhaps we'd love forever more
Yet fortress walls still guard my heart
Good luck and be blessed.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Very attractive artwork and perfect poem
It really deserves All Time Best
My favorite lines:
Made clear are dreams that love will last
Neath nurtured care not known before
Once memories unchain my past
Perhaps we'd love forever more
Yet fortress walls still guard my heart
Good luck and be blessed.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review, rouskin. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece, friend.
Ron
Comment from Rondeno
I'm sorry, this one doesn't work for me. The "love" terminology doesn't ring true. Why should an "autumn rose" be a paragon of "tenderness"? Can "symphonies" be "dear"?
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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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I'm sorry, this one doesn't work for me. The "love" terminology doesn't ring true. Why should an "autumn rose" be a paragon of "tenderness"? Can "symphonies" be "dear"?
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Wow. Thanks.
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Because roses are soft like her touch was and anything you hold close to your heart is dear. Figured I'd just clear that up. Thanks again for the 3.
Comment from w.j.debi
How tender and sorrowful. Your mind knows what a wonderful treasure you have found and yet your heart cannot accept it because of the walls you have built. I kept hoping she could convince you.....
Beautiful rhymes and rhythm. Well told.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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How tender and sorrowful. Your mind knows what a wonderful treasure you have found and yet your heart cannot accept it because of the walls you have built. I kept hoping she could convince you.....
Beautiful rhymes and rhythm. Well told.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review, WJD. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from amada
Wow! Great deliverance of a ABC poem. What a treat for the eyes and the senses..."yet fortress walls guard my heart." Magnificent repetition that work so well...
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Wow! Great deliverance of a ABC poem. What a treat for the eyes and the senses..."yet fortress walls guard my heart." Magnificent repetition that work so well...
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review. amamda. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from ravenblack
I really like your song. Until we let go of the past, of whatever memories cause us pain, fortress walls will remain. Impeccable rhythm and rhyme. I tried to play the song, but am getting barely a whisper of sound.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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I really like your song. Until we let go of the past, of whatever memories cause us pain, fortress walls will remain. Impeccable rhythm and rhyme. I tried to play the song, but am getting barely a whisper of sound.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Hey, RB, hi. Thank you for the excellent review, friend. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm not real sure what's up with the volume on your end. I just played it again and it seems to be working alright. Maybe there's some glitch not letting it work or something. I'm glad you liked the piece, RB. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from ragamuffin
An impressive write for sure. The repeated line is strong and one that I'm sure many can relate to something in their own lives. Beautifully worded flow that conveys a love with a yearning still present because of insecurities. Enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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An impressive write for sure. The repeated line is strong and one that I'm sure many can relate to something in their own lives. Beautifully worded flow that conveys a love with a yearning still present because of insecurities. Enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review, ragamuffin. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from misscookie
You capture my attention from the start when I saw your interesting photo. where is place?
Your poem is filled with some much emotions
I could feel; it within your every word.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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You capture my attention from the start when I saw your interesting photo. where is place?
Your poem is filled with some much emotions
I could feel; it within your every word.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review, misscookie. I really think the picture is just digital art and not a real place. It's just that he artist is fantastic, lol. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Ron
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Your very welcome, have a blessed day, until next time.
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend and presented so well in fact it is beautiful good luck in the contest I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend and presented so well in fact it is beautiful good luck in the contest I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the kind review, Jill. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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Ron
