The Bounty Hunter
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Comment from Twilightspire
Intriguing. I like how you explain the history and fantasy if your world smoothly and easy enough to grasp without scratching our heads. The downtime was absolutely necessary to further the plot and introduce several new subplots. This story is fascinating to me because Samuel is rendered as very real and complex. The mix of his internal dialogue and decisions work seamlessly to push the story further and insure we come back to read again. I look forward to more.
-T.J.
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Intriguing. I like how you explain the history and fantasy if your world smoothly and easy enough to grasp without scratching our heads. The downtime was absolutely necessary to further the plot and introduce several new subplots. This story is fascinating to me because Samuel is rendered as very real and complex. The mix of his internal dialogue and decisions work seamlessly to push the story further and insure we come back to read again. I look forward to more.
-T.J.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
Comment from Silent1rose
Great chapter. I've been waiting for more of the bounty hunter LOL when Azazel showed up, I was like uh-oh Samuel's in trouble! My heart start thumping and everything. Loved it! ~ Rose
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Great chapter. I've been waiting for more of the bounty hunter LOL when Azazel showed up, I was like uh-oh Samuel's in trouble! My heart start thumping and everything. Loved it! ~ Rose
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thank you, Rose. I been meaning to write more, but its been long work week.
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You're welcome and don't work too hard! Take care. :)
Comment from judiverse
I'm glad you brought some traces of humor into this, such as the comment about wanted dead or alive. Great dialogue that moves the story along and explains who Jessie is. His target is Durbin, the son of a fallen angel. The Bounty Hunter is ready to take on the task--anything the bewitching Jessie asks. The demon lord is ready with a plan of his own, and he' eyeing the colt. Curious to see where the senator will come in. judi
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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I'm glad you brought some traces of humor into this, such as the comment about wanted dead or alive. Great dialogue that moves the story along and explains who Jessie is. His target is Durbin, the son of a fallen angel. The Bounty Hunter is ready to take on the task--anything the bewitching Jessie asks. The demon lord is ready with a plan of his own, and he' eyeing the colt. Curious to see where the senator will come in. judi
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thank you, Judi. Yes, Jessie has a way with men.
Comment from pbroussard209
Another great chapter. So what is with the Senator? That is an interesting twist. Looking forward to the next chapter to see what happens. I liked that you put Azazel in the room with them. It added a whole other level of creepy.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Another great chapter. So what is with the Senator? That is an interesting twist. Looking forward to the next chapter to see what happens. I liked that you put Azazel in the room with them. It added a whole other level of creepy.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thank you. I was kind of going with the you never know whose watching you thing. It is creepy
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I enjoyed this part of the story. Your characters are cool and it was just sensual enough for me to want to continue reading. I also enjoyed the dialog ... I've heard said that without good dialog a story sins. Yours is believable and keeps the story moving along. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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I enjoyed this part of the story. Your characters are cool and it was just sensual enough for me to want to continue reading. I also enjoyed the dialog ... I've heard said that without good dialog a story sins. Yours is believable and keeps the story moving along. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much.
Comment from lindalcreel
This was a great transition. I loved knowing that she is a Nephylim because most of them were killed off during the great flood. I'm certain that the Nephylim that Jessie wants Samuel to kill isn't favored by Heaven. It will be interesting to see who this half-breed is and what the demon has to gain by his death. Great chapter. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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This was a great transition. I loved knowing that she is a Nephylim because most of them were killed off during the great flood. I'm certain that the Nephylim that Jessie wants Samuel to kill isn't favored by Heaven. It will be interesting to see who this half-breed is and what the demon has to gain by his death. Great chapter. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thank you. I think Azazel will gain what all demons truly want.
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What they want is to wreak havoc. lol
Comment from billscott
The hunters deal cannot be undone.
So cool...
I will back track to your begining chapters.
This is a really cool read.
I like where its going.
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The hunters deal cannot be undone.
So cool...
I will back track to your begining chapters.
This is a really cool read.
I like where its going.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
Comment from Ed_Anderson
This was an interesting read, the plot moves along at a snappy pace and the ending leaves you open to write more if you so choose! Good luck in the contest!!!
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This was an interesting read, the plot moves along at a snappy pace and the ending leaves you open to write more if you so choose! Good luck in the contest!!!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
Comment from denhagan
This was an interesting short story to read, which held my attention all the way through, about Samuel and the Half-angel, Jessie. Nice picture.
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This was an interesting short story to read, which held my attention all the way through, about Samuel and the Half-angel, Jessie. Nice picture.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
Comment from Ric Myworld
Your narrative and descriptive dialog moves the story along smoothly and crisp, giving hints of things to come that peak our interest. Thanks for a great read!
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Your narrative and descriptive dialog moves the story along smoothly and crisp, giving hints of things to come that peak our interest. Thanks for a great read!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013