If Some Could Tell!
If we were learned to tell! A Non-Fiction in 220 words112 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
I love the picture...there is Leonardo Da Vinci in there..
I love this treatise . It reminds me of proverbs ... a wise man is righteous and a fool babbles.
We have to keep our tongue sometimes ...talking to hear yourself talk is not the way
God bless
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I love the picture...there is Leonardo Da Vinci in there..
I love this treatise . It reminds me of proverbs ... a wise man is righteous and a fool babbles.
We have to keep our tongue sometimes ...talking to hear yourself talk is not the way
God bless
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
Comment from dmt1967
This reminds me of some really smart men I know. I used to be in awe until one of them told me, being wise is a state of mind. Wise and smart people don't tend to make people feel inferior to them. Thank you for sharing.
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This reminds me of some really smart men I know. I used to be in awe until one of them told me, being wise is a state of mind. Wise and smart people don't tend to make people feel inferior to them. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You have it so right. I know many people who allow their mouths to run-away with just a little bit of the facts and create havoc. Truth is by far the best way to go if you don't want to be caught out or hurt a fellow human being. Well done! (You must be soooo rich! LOL are you married?) xx :) Sandra
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You have it so right. I know many people who allow their mouths to run-away with just a little bit of the facts and create havoc. Truth is by far the best way to go if you don't want to be caught out or hurt a fellow human being. Well done! (You must be soooo rich! LOL are you married?) xx :) Sandra
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, love the quote from Plato in the picture. Your take on wisdom is interesting, although I don't know to what extent you hide what you would call negativity. To point out errors, in writing for example, could be seen as negative, but without them how are you going to become a better writer, so it is a balancing act really, and after reading your prose, one is reluctant to tell you the truth, which is that this writing has errors, and here's just one:
'An unwise (man/woman/person) commits (a) blunder by telling anything...'
These sort of errors are sprinkled throughout so it is difficult to give it a five-star rating, but if you edit, get back to me and I will change the rating, cheers, Ana.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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Hello, love the quote from Plato in the picture. Your take on wisdom is interesting, although I don't know to what extent you hide what you would call negativity. To point out errors, in writing for example, could be seen as negative, but without them how are you going to become a better writer, so it is a balancing act really, and after reading your prose, one is reluctant to tell you the truth, which is that this writing has errors, and here's just one:
'An unwise (man/woman/person) commits (a) blunder by telling anything...'
These sort of errors are sprinkled throughout so it is difficult to give it a five-star rating, but if you edit, get back to me and I will change the rating, cheers, Ana.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this nice review with suggestions.
Edited.
You may now revisit.
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Thank you so much for letting me know, and it is a pleasure to go and give this the rating it deserves, love, Ana.
Comment from ciliverde
I agree with what you have written here, about telling the truth (although one's true opinion is not truth) but I don't understand the way you use the language. For example the sentence above the picture, you say "Act wise or unwise". It should be "Act wisely or unwisely". But maybe you are writing this way for effect? Well, it is quite interesting, that's for sure. And again, I agree 100% with your comments about not speaking for gain, fame or result. Silence is underrated.
Carol
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I agree with what you have written here, about telling the truth (although one's true opinion is not truth) but I don't understand the way you use the language. For example the sentence above the picture, you say "Act wise or unwise". It should be "Act wisely or unwisely". But maybe you are writing this way for effect? Well, it is quite interesting, that's for sure. And again, I agree 100% with your comments about not speaking for gain, fame or result. Silence is underrated.
Carol
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from ciliverde
I agree with what you have written here, about telling the truth (although one's true opinion is not truth) but I don't understand the way you use the language. For example the sentence above the picture, you say "Act wise or unwise". It should be "Act wisely or unwisely". But maybe you are writing this way for effect? Well, it is quite interesting, that's for sure. And again, I agree 100% with your comments about not speaking for gain, fame or result. Silence is underrated.
Carol
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I agree with what you have written here, about telling the truth (although one's true opinion is not truth) but I don't understand the way you use the language. For example the sentence above the picture, you say "Act wise or unwise". It should be "Act wisely or unwisely". But maybe you are writing this way for effect? Well, it is quite interesting, that's for sure. And again, I agree 100% with your comments about not speaking for gain, fame or result. Silence is underrated.
Carol
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from ciliverde
I agree with what you have written here, about telling the truth (although one's true opinion is not truth) but I don't understand the way you use the language. For example the sentence above the picture, you say "Act wise or unwise". It should be "Act wisely or unwisely". But maybe you are writing this way for effect? Well, it is quite interesting, that's for sure. And again, I agree 100% with your comments about not speaking for gain, fame or result. Silence is underrated.
Carol
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I agree with what you have written here, about telling the truth (although one's true opinion is not truth) but I don't understand the way you use the language. For example the sentence above the picture, you say "Act wise or unwise". It should be "Act wisely or unwisely". But maybe you are writing this way for effect? Well, it is quite interesting, that's for sure. And again, I agree 100% with your comments about not speaking for gain, fame or result. Silence is underrated.
Carol
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from Sally Law
Well done, and you sir, are quite the Philosopher. I agree with you, in that wisdom should come forth from our mouth everytime we open it, benefiting the hearers. I can be having a terrible day, and someone will speak a kind or encouraging word to me, and it seems to turn my day around. What power we have in our tongues, and as you pointed out, wisdom shows us how to use it.
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Well done, and you sir, are quite the Philosopher. I agree with you, in that wisdom should come forth from our mouth everytime we open it, benefiting the hearers. I can be having a terrible day, and someone will speak a kind or encouraging word to me, and it seems to turn my day around. What power we have in our tongues, and as you pointed out, wisdom shows us how to use it.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from meeshu
very wisely spoken DR. AL. (did you see what I did back there?) this a nicely written precise and poignant. above all else, suffer no fools. (I said that).........meeshu
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very wisely spoken DR. AL. (did you see what I did back there?) this a nicely written precise and poignant. above all else, suffer no fools. (I said that).........meeshu
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from judiverse
I will try to give an honest and fair review. I hope you are paying attention to the reviewers who have suggested revisions in your writing. You have a good point to make, but it is obscured by problems with the language. The purpose of revisiting a post is to do revisions to improve. Here are some of the problems I noticed. In the first paragraph, you use the word "wise." It is an adjective, not a noun. Are you talking about a wise man? You'll notice in the quotation in your artwork it is not "wise," but "wise men." In your second paragraph, you need either "a wise man commits "a" blunder or "blunders. I would omit "Par excellence" in the last paragraph. I'm not sure what you mean by "he speaks not for a lip." If you go back over this, I think you'll find several places where you have used some unnecessary words. Try to eliminate them.
May I suggest that you work on some new writing rather than posting so much material from several years ago. That's the only way you can see if you're growing as a writer.
Sincerely, judi
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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I will try to give an honest and fair review. I hope you are paying attention to the reviewers who have suggested revisions in your writing. You have a good point to make, but it is obscured by problems with the language. The purpose of revisiting a post is to do revisions to improve. Here are some of the problems I noticed. In the first paragraph, you use the word "wise." It is an adjective, not a noun. Are you talking about a wise man? You'll notice in the quotation in your artwork it is not "wise," but "wise men." In your second paragraph, you need either "a wise man commits "a" blunder or "blunders. I would omit "Par excellence" in the last paragraph. I'm not sure what you mean by "he speaks not for a lip." If you go back over this, I think you'll find several places where you have used some unnecessary words. Try to eliminate them.
May I suggest that you work on some new writing rather than posting so much material from several years ago. That's the only way you can see if you're growing as a writer.
Sincerely, judi
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this nice review with suggestions.
Please revisit, I have edited the work.
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You're very welcome. Glad to knw you did. I'd hate to see what I might find if I decided to post some old material. judi
