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Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "50 years of wedded bliss"Words to pass on to my children
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Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
each other's arms - add the hyphen
This is definitely a light and sweet poem
How wonderful that after fifty years you still feel this way and that he still makes you feel this way :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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solid use of rhyming couplets
each other's arms - add the hyphen
This is definitely a light and sweet poem
How wonderful that after fifty years you still feel this way and that he still makes you feel this way :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thanks Brooke for the great review on my poem. we will be 50 years married next August, Mary
Comment from Gungalo
I knew then I would want to belong
I am very happy I was not wrong.
Fifty years of wedded bliss,
It all started with just one kiss.
Oh Mary is this really you? WOnderful news. Happy Anniversary and many many more too. A beautiful write. girlie.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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I knew then I would want to belong
I am very happy I was not wrong.
Fifty years of wedded bliss,
It all started with just one kiss.
Oh Mary is this really you? WOnderful news. Happy Anniversary and many many more too. A beautiful write. girlie.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Yes PAM but the celebrations is a little premature as we do celebrate next August our 50th anniversary. Thanks for the great review.
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LOL well celebrate for the whole year then. LOL
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Mary:}
You certainly wrote a sweet and lighthearted romance poem as required by the prompt. This almost tells the story of my own romance. I met Marilyn fifty-two years ago when we both baled out of a boring and inept creative writing workshop. We went on to coffee (Well that's what I remember, but Marilyn claims that coffee has never crossed her lips.) Next night, a movie. Next week at our parents homes.
We met on December 29,1960, were engaged on Valentine's Day and married on St. Patrick's Bay. Now we are approaching the end of our fifty-two years of wedded bliss.
The timing of your poem is perfect so more love and Irish Hugs. I somehow ran out of stars. Wish I had six for you.
Roger
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Hi Mary:}
You certainly wrote a sweet and lighthearted romance poem as required by the prompt. This almost tells the story of my own romance. I met Marilyn fifty-two years ago when we both baled out of a boring and inept creative writing workshop. We went on to coffee (Well that's what I remember, but Marilyn claims that coffee has never crossed her lips.) Next night, a movie. Next week at our parents homes.
We met on December 29,1960, were engaged on Valentine's Day and married on St. Patrick's Bay. Now we are approaching the end of our fifty-two years of wedded bliss.
The timing of your poem is perfect so more love and Irish Hugs. I somehow ran out of stars. Wish I had six for you.
Roger
Comment Written 21-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Thanks roger, I am so pleased that you enjoyed the poem, and to hear about your 52 years of wedded bliss. We will be 50 years married next August. I guess my poem was a bit premature, but only months. Regards to Marilyn, Mary
Comment from SaluteDobby
I love "Boy meets girl" stories! This was well written. Like the happy ending - how the first kiss was the beginning of 50 years of marital bliss!
All the best with teh contest!
Regards,
Namratha
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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I love "Boy meets girl" stories! This was well written. Like the happy ending - how the first kiss was the beginning of 50 years of marital bliss!
All the best with teh contest!
Regards,
Namratha
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you do much for the wonderful review.
Comment from Charlene0513
Matrimonial bliss cannot be matched esp. when the reign of years spans over decades.
Nice metaphor:Happy to be in each others arms,
drinking in loves magic charms.
Charlene
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Matrimonial bliss cannot be matched esp. when the reign of years spans over decades.
Nice metaphor:Happy to be in each others arms,
drinking in loves magic charms.
Charlene
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you Charlene for the wonderful review.
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. I has a light and sweet tone. It is a lovey theme, and you communicate it well. The picture is enchanting.
Barbara
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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This is a wonderful poem. I has a light and sweet tone. It is a lovey theme, and you communicate it well. The picture is enchanting.
Barbara
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Thanks Barbara for the great view and the compliment on my painting.
Comment from MarjorieAnne
Definitely romantic, with light and sweet moments on every line. No comma needed between "spell" and "met". Switch from past to present tense in line five breaks the flow. Comma needed between " sight" and "hearts". "Others" and "loves" need apostrophes. Too many of the word "I" in lines nine and ten.
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Definitely romantic, with light and sweet moments on every line. No comma needed between "spell" and "met". Switch from past to present tense in line five breaks the flow. Comma needed between " sight" and "hearts". "Others" and "loves" need apostrophes. Too many of the word "I" in lines nine and ten.
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you for your review on my poem.
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You're welcome
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is beautiful, mystery writer, and the picture that you did was gorgeous, excellent imagery presented in your words. i wish you the best of luck in the contest..
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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this is beautiful, mystery writer, and the picture that you did was gorgeous, excellent imagery presented in your words. i wish you the best of luck in the contest..
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the great review I appreciate it.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
very, very sweet. I am sure your wife loved this one.
Fifty years of wedded bliss.... It all started
with just one kiss.
Good luck in the contest, well done, :-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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very, very sweet. I am sure your wife loved this one.
Fifty years of wedded bliss.... It all started
with just one kiss.
Good luck in the contest, well done, :-) Carolyn
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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This was written for my husband and I. Thanks for the great review.
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Then I am sure your 'husband' enjoyed it, have a great day. :-)
Comment from michaelcahill
So perfectly put. This is the romance that we all dream about. Yet, it is so elusive and rare. It takes work but, you show that dreams are indeed possible. well done on the poem and more importantly, in life. mikey
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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So perfectly put. This is the romance that we all dream about. Yet, it is so elusive and rare. It takes work but, you show that dreams are indeed possible. well done on the poem and more importantly, in life. mikey
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you Mikey for the great review on my poem