Weathervane
a 5-7-5 about winter5 total reviews
Comment from krowboom
A salty salacious glee accompanies thee
As a crow says nay and a raven sings
Well thou bring food or a winter's ring
Can the barren frost of freezing friction sing
So it comes to pass winters story
Merry crow fest in all it's glory.
Well versed and it meets the criteria
so the judges won't be filled with hysteria
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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A salty salacious glee accompanies thee
As a crow says nay and a raven sings
Well thou bring food or a winter's ring
Can the barren frost of freezing friction sing
So it comes to pass winters story
Merry crow fest in all it's glory.
Well versed and it meets the criteria
so the judges won't be filled with hysteria
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much, Krowboom, for your witty review.
Comment from Supe
Nice winter wind entry. Good luck in the contest. I enjoyed it. I think you have followed all the rules with no howling involved. tenaciously - good word.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Nice winter wind entry. Good luck in the contest. I enjoyed it. I think you have followed all the rules with no howling involved. tenaciously - good word.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you for your kind words of praise and encouragement.
Comment from RYME4U
Well done. This sets up a really vivid scene. You've captured the essence of an approaching winter wind really well. Good job and good luck in contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Well done. This sets up a really vivid scene. You've captured the essence of an approaching winter wind really well. Good job and good luck in contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for this great review and your encouragement.
Comment from kenni
Wow, that's one tough crow, no wonder he's the sentry, though I don't know what would be stalking them in a gale storm. Very dramatic write for such a limited art form. Good work. Good luck. kenni
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Wow, that's one tough crow, no wonder he's the sentry, though I don't know what would be stalking them in a gale storm. Very dramatic write for such a limited art form. Good work. Good luck. kenni
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much, kenni, for your kind praise, generous stars. and best wishes.
Comment from Domino 2
Thanks for entering and adhering to the rules, mystery writer.
I won't pretend I'm bright enough to understand last line, but it sure is thought-provoking.
I love the first 2 lines of imaginative and vivid imagery with the crow competing with the wind.
Top read, and good luck, Ted
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks for entering and adhering to the rules, mystery writer.
I won't pretend I'm bright enough to understand last line, but it sure is thought-provoking.
I love the first 2 lines of imaginative and vivid imagery with the crow competing with the wind.
Top read, and good luck, Ted
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you, Teddy Bears All, for being my first reviewer and your generous praise. In the third line I am hoping the reader sees the bare tip of the maple tree where the crow is hanging on like a weathervane during this gale.
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Thanks for your interesting explanation, my friend.
Sometimes the meaning has to clearer, but it's a great idea.
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I did take your point seriously and revised the third line. I hope it's clearer now. Thanks for the advice.
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No probs.
That's so much more visual mow, IMHO.
