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Geoffrey's Musings.

Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Government Grief"
A book of Stories, Essays and Poetry.

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Comment from adewpearl
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I just sang this to "Johnny" and it works quite well!
lost it's rudder - drop the apostrophe
love the alliteration, humor and imagery in bursting like old Bessie's udder
and alliteration in better/bureaucrats/boot
excellent use of satire in making a serious political point
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Thanks sorry about the apostrophe...bad habit. Appreciate the great review. I believe this works for all countries as well.Could you play the midi file?
reply by adewpearl on 11-Oct-2013
    I got a notice that there was no plug in available to play it. That could well be my computer :-)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Aw sorry. Window Media player should it are you on PC or Apple? There is a Media player for Apple Mac. Can't think of it just now.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Aw sorry. Window Media player should it are you on PC or Apple? There is a Media player for Apple Mac. Can't think of it just now.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Hi I went in and did another editif ya wanna look again someone pointed out the buns 'n' and the udder 'n' error.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
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This is a very topical poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. These politicians should put party politics aside and work for the good of the nation. This does not look good on the world stage.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Thanks mate glad you dropped by. I believe it works for all our countries as well.
reply by Tomes Johnston on 11-Oct-2013
    Yes indeed.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    hope you caught the midi file I just went in and edited some word spags that were pointed out.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, sankey, you did an excellent job writing this song about politics as usual. i enjoyed reading it and have always loved when johnny comes marching home.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Yeah I need to re-do the Midi again timing is a bit rough. I figure the tune is probably a National Treasure, apparently used during the Civil War in America and then later in the WW's. Not sure about Copyright. My arrangement anyway hehe. Thanks for the great review. I think it is relevant on either side of the Pacific or wherever.
Comment from kiwisteveh
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Ah, how hard it must be to live in one of those countries where you can't publically poke fun at your political 'leaders'!

I enjoyed the sense of fun and the relevance to the current stalemate - not that I understand it from this distance.
Favourite line, the one about Old Bessie's udder....

Steve

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Hi Steve where are you? I feel like it is relevant to all Beauraucracies meself. Thanks for the review hope you got there after the music went on. I am on the East Coast of Australia.
reply by kiwisteveh on 11-Oct-2013
    That's an awful big coast. I am recently returned to NZ after 10 years in Cairns...

    yes, our politicians can be much the same, although I did think Aussie ones were somehow more 'political' than kiwi ones.

    Steve
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Hi Steve we are 54 klm west of Sydney. Check my Chapter on Friends I had a bit of a go at the Kiwi's. "With friends like you who needs 'enema's ie you give me the .....
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Hi Steve we are 54 klm west of Sydney. Check my Chapter on Friends I had a bit of a go at the Kiwi's. "With friends like you who needs 'enema's ie you give me the .....
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Hi Steve we are 54 klm west of Sydney. Check my Chapter on Friends I had a bit of a go at the Kiwi's. "With friends like you who needs 'enema's ie you give me the .....
Comment from l.raven
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LOL...This is so funny, but oh so true...I love the way you made a song out of it....I wish they would get the boot...so very well written...xxoo

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 Comment Written 11-Oct-2013

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    I just got the Midi file on a bit rough as I played it my self.
    Thanks for the review and it probably applies to all Governments of all countries huh! I am in Australia. have a look again.
reply by l.raven on 11-Oct-2013
    your so welcome...xxoo
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    The Midi file is on now!