Free Verse Collection 2
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Comment from Spitfire
What a unique and beautiful love poem. Many phrases reminded me of works from Wordsworth and other Romantic poets: It is not my fellows that I seek
for they are wrapped in their own longings
I am too weary to appreciate intention -love the truth of this.
Great connection of your feeling with sounds and sights.
Many awesome lines but if I had to pick a favorite:
It is in a train whistle then that I find an empathy,
the relentless churning of a steel wheels mechanism
Definitely a poem worthy of a literary magazine. Sorry I have no sixes left. :(
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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What a unique and beautiful love poem. Many phrases reminded me of works from Wordsworth and other Romantic poets: It is not my fellows that I seek
for they are wrapped in their own longings
I am too weary to appreciate intention -love the truth of this.
Great connection of your feeling with sounds and sights.
Many awesome lines but if I had to pick a favorite:
It is in a train whistle then that I find an empathy,
the relentless churning of a steel wheels mechanism
Definitely a poem worthy of a literary magazine. Sorry I have no sixes left. :(
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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what a lovely complimentary review. I will take your approval over a six any day. thank you so very much. smiles! mikr
Comment from pattipac
You have penned a confessional of inner yearning for solitude, from those who would try to understand the unseeable you. Your deep longing for a lost love can only be soothed, by the darkness of night and the gentle rain that sheds tears for you.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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You have penned a confessional of inner yearning for solitude, from those who would try to understand the unseeable you. Your deep longing for a lost love can only be soothed, by the darkness of night and the gentle rain that sheds tears for you.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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what a wonderful uplifting review to hear. thank you for these words of praise. they are greatly appreciated as is your amazing gift of stars. big smiles, mike
Comment from ravenblack
Really like your solo journey into a haunted solitude. Been there/done that where the only thing that makes sense is to rush headlong into that darkness and embrace it for all it is worth. It is there that you will find a name whispered from a lone tree, a star fiercely bright not part of a picture. Experience these nights of the soul- break through them- and the rain is truly for you. Beautiful write and once again completely out of sixes.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Really like your solo journey into a haunted solitude. Been there/done that where the only thing that makes sense is to rush headlong into that darkness and embrace it for all it is worth. It is there that you will find a name whispered from a lone tree, a star fiercely bright not part of a picture. Experience these nights of the soul- break through them- and the rain is truly for you. Beautiful write and once again completely out of sixes.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you kindly my friend. Save me a six for some total nonsense I write in the future! That will throw them off. I almost want to thank every woman that broke my heart. It makes for good writing. I don't know what is wrong with my wife. Loyal loving and supportive, all boring topics for a poem. Get angry at me honey! I need inspiration. I really go off on tangents. Much appreciated comments. Once again you understand perfectly. It always makes up for those that don't and confirms their place in the scheme of things. mike
Comment from w.j.debi
Such a touching and heartfelt poem. Sometimes only solitude can give the peace that is needed, the space to contemplate and the time to reflect on what the heart needs to requite itself. This flows nicely. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Such a touching and heartfelt poem. Sometimes only solitude can give the peace that is needed, the space to contemplate and the time to reflect on what the heart needs to requite itself. This flows nicely. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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wonderful words to hear. a nice thoughtful take also; poetic indeed in its own rite. thank you kindly. mike
Comment from Nichola
Powerful poem, reminiscent of the Who song "Love, rain o'er me."
console to comfort
coldness create carefreeness
cool crescent calmness
Nichola
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Powerful poem, reminiscent of the Who song "Love, rain o'er me."
console to comfort
coldness create carefreeness
cool crescent calmness
Nichola
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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thank you very much. interesting comparison. I can't count the number of times I have performed that song. one of my favorites. I love your little poem. very thoughtful and interesting. ties in nicely. very encouraging. thank you, mike
Comment from kiwijenny
I may not have her
The darkness may not have the sun
And she is indeed that......
I feel the sadness coming through your words.......we are indeed singular creatures.............
God bless
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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I may not have her
The darkness may not have the sun
And she is indeed that......
I feel the sadness coming through your words.......we are indeed singular creatures.............
God bless
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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thank you so much. what more can one ask than to be heard and understood. blessings to you for your kind words. mike
Comment from Darkhorse555
well it looks from the pictured piece you are soaking it the darkness creeps around oh dear friend your catching on good free style ha ha amazing beautiful piece if i had a six left i would give it to this
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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well it looks from the pictured piece you are soaking it the darkness creeps around oh dear friend your catching on good free style ha ha amazing beautiful piece if i had a six left i would give it to this
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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glad you liked it my friend. back at home with my free verse. rambling away. freedom. ha! thank you. appreciate the thought of a six. but, the praise means more. mike
Comment from cinderbella
All out of sixes, I'm sorry. I do think this one deserves at least a seven-star rating. The artwork you chose is fabulous. I love the second and third stanza, how one can find solace and comfort in mechanical things, rather than in another person. I totally hear you. Loved this. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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All out of sixes, I'm sorry. I do think this one deserves at least a seven-star rating. The artwork you chose is fabulous. I love the second and third stanza, how one can find solace and comfort in mechanical things, rather than in another person. I totally hear you. Loved this. :) Sandra
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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I will take a virtual 7 any day!! I am so happy you fully understood and enjoyed my piece. big smiles and silly dances! thank you very kindly, mike
Comment from ann marie mazz
hello michael
wow
first
something told me to save one six star just in case I needed it
well I needed it today for your entry before us
second
please allow me to let the masterpiece stand
there is nothing I could add or change
I see perfection and marvelous poetry and writing
I see much attention to detail starting with the title
never did you stray by the way
third but never least
an entry such as this should be read out loud with emphasis
truly
and yes
entries such as this is why we read
what a dark world it must be for those who do not read
thank you for sharing your talent
it was an honor to read and see
ann marie
e x c e l l e n t
w r i t i n g
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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hello michael
wow
first
something told me to save one six star just in case I needed it
well I needed it today for your entry before us
second
please allow me to let the masterpiece stand
there is nothing I could add or change
I see perfection and marvelous poetry and writing
I see much attention to detail starting with the title
never did you stray by the way
third but never least
an entry such as this should be read out loud with emphasis
truly
and yes
entries such as this is why we read
what a dark world it must be for those who do not read
thank you for sharing your talent
it was an honor to read and see
ann marie
e x c e l l e n t
w r i t i n g
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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lovely words and thoughts. I am happy to be back in my little free verse world. the sonnets were driving me crazy and so difficult to master. I so agree when you say "what a dark world it must be for those who do not read." perfectly said. I might add, and for those that read but, do not understand. We have run into a few of those, yes? it is my pleasure and honor to have written something that you enjoyed. very satisfying feeling. smiles and warm little fuzzies everywhere. not very manly but, I won't let my poker buddies in on it. thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Cookie333
Boy, what a thought-provoking piece you have here Mike!
Definite thought bender:
"No one could fully understand my mind and my heart
and I am too weary to appreciate intention"
I have had these moments when I am too tired to even be polite when someone offers to help.
thank you
karen
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Boy, what a thought-provoking piece you have here Mike!
Definite thought bender:
"No one could fully understand my mind and my heart
and I am too weary to appreciate intention"
I have had these moments when I am too tired to even be polite when someone offers to help.
thank you
karen
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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glad you liked this. after a few weeks of sonetteering I was ready to ramble. I can hear the boxing announcer now; "Lets get ready to raaaaaaammmmmmmmble!" haha. glad you liked this. thank you kindly, mike