Free Style-Wishing Upon A Star
Every girl dreams of this2 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
This is a wish shared by thousands of young Australian girls in Sydney this weekend with the official visit of Prince Harry to inspect the Fleet! He looks very eligible in his neat white dress uniform! A pity he's already taken! Never mind! Back to your poem. Your nonet works beautifully in all respects apart from the fact that it is under 50 words and the writing prompt specifies 100-300. However, what you lack in quantity, you make up for in quality! There is an intensity in 'serene silence, concentrating on my one solitary wish' that must surely invoke your Fairy Godmother if she's on her toes! In anticipation, may I offer you my congratulations, Your Royal Highness-to-be!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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This is a wish shared by thousands of young Australian girls in Sydney this weekend with the official visit of Prince Harry to inspect the Fleet! He looks very eligible in his neat white dress uniform! A pity he's already taken! Never mind! Back to your poem. Your nonet works beautifully in all respects apart from the fact that it is under 50 words and the writing prompt specifies 100-300. However, what you lack in quantity, you make up for in quality! There is an intensity in 'serene silence, concentrating on my one solitary wish' that must surely invoke your Fairy Godmother if she's on her toes! In anticipation, may I offer you my congratulations, Your Royal Highness-to-be!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thank you for your review-I'm sorry I forgot the rules stated 100 words-I disabled my poem and did a re-edit. If you wish you may like to read it again. I'm very sorry.
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Thank you for your review-I'm sorry I forgot the rules stated 100 words-I disabled my poem and did a re-edit. If you wish you may like to read it again. I'm very sorry.
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Wow! That was quick! I'm most impressed. Definitely princess material if you can dash them off at that rate! I need to meet your muse! No need to be sorry - just meant that I had the pleasure of reading two of your poems instead of just one!
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Thank you
Comment from Rondeno
Your syllable count is 12-16-7-7-8-8-3-3-2. I don't know what poetic form that is, but it isn't a nonet. Are you sure you've grasped the concept of syllables?
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Your syllable count is 12-16-7-7-8-8-3-3-2. I don't know what poetic form that is, but it isn't a nonet. Are you sure you've grasped the concept of syllables?
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Hi Thanks for your review-I made a terrible mistake - I forgot the rules stated 100 words. I disabled my poem then re-edited to apply to the rules. Please if you wish re-read my poem. I'm very sorry.
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Please don't be sorry.