Stories of the Dreamtime
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Rainbow Bower Bird."Aboriginal myths and legends.
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
******************************** and I only have a 5. What an amazing story, Kay, I am going to enjoy this series, I hope you have lots of them. Some of the stories handed down through the tribes are so easy to believe. It is like the native Africans, their ancestry was repeated from chief to chief down the centuries. But, as with your tribes, none of us really learn the lessons of bygone times. We still expect the best and still fight our neighbours. Sad world isn't it. Well written story, Kay and such a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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******************************** and I only have a 5. What an amazing story, Kay, I am going to enjoy this series, I hope you have lots of them. Some of the stories handed down through the tribes are so easy to believe. It is like the native Africans, their ancestry was repeated from chief to chief down the centuries. But, as with your tribes, none of us really learn the lessons of bygone times. We still expect the best and still fight our neighbours. Sad world isn't it. Well written story, Kay and such a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Hello my friend; thanks so much for reading (30 more stories to go!) All nations have parallel stories, ours were not written down except cave drawings and by legends passed down word of mouth. Like the Bible, many have changed over time. Love, Kay.
Comment from country ranch writer
AND SPEAK THEY DID IS TRUE YOU HAVE TO TAKE THE CONSEQUENCES WHEN THINGS DO NOT WORK OUT,IT IS THE WAY OF THE WORLD AND WE ARE IN IT
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AND SPEAK THEY DID IS TRUE YOU HAVE TO TAKE THE CONSEQUENCES WHEN THINGS DO NOT WORK OUT,IT IS THE WAY OF THE WORLD AND WE ARE IN IT
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thank you my friend, we all have lessons to learn, that is why we are here. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Kay
I loved your story, it has a great moral lesson in it that is good for the children who will read it.
The colorful bird is a messenger to get the different tribes to stop being selfish and to help each other to live in a much more pleasant and productive environment. We all can learn to be more aware of others needs and less of our own selfishness.
Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Hi Kay
I loved your story, it has a great moral lesson in it that is good for the children who will read it.
The colorful bird is a messenger to get the different tribes to stop being selfish and to help each other to live in a much more pleasant and productive environment. We all can learn to be more aware of others needs and less of our own selfishness.
Well done. Mary
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Hello Mary, Thanks so much for reading; glad you enjoyed (I have 3o more stories to write! LOL - love, Kay.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
This is very interesting and I know several little guys that would really enjoy this story. This is a real bird that comes in different colors? How interesting. Loved the sotry. God loves you and we do too.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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This is very interesting and I know several little guys that would really enjoy this story. This is a real bird that comes in different colors? How interesting. Loved the sotry. God loves you and we do too.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Hello my friends, Yes, the Bower Birds come in different colors, they build a bower on the ground, fill it with colored bits of glass (especially blue) to attract the female - 30 more legends to write! Love, Kay (hope you are well)
Comment from lancellot
It is an interesting fable, I think it has a message that is simple and easy enough for young children to understand. Do take the good you've been for granted. Nice work.
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It is an interesting fable, I think it has a message that is simple and easy enough for young children to understand. Do take the good you've been for granted. Nice work.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thank you friend - I have 30 more legends to write about the animals. Glad you liked it. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from mumsyone
Hi Kay,
A great story, and very informative. I'm not sure if we saw a bower bird when we were in Australia, but you have so many special bird!
Hugs,
Lois
Rushes growing around the billabongs' (billabongs - no apostrophe) gave the women reeds to make baskets for carrying food
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Hi Kay,
A great story, and very informative. I'm not sure if we saw a bower bird when we were in Australia, but you have so many special bird!
Hugs,
Lois
Rushes growing around the billabongs' (billabongs - no apostrophe) gave the women reeds to make baskets for carrying food
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Hello Lois, They are shy creatures that build a bower on the ground - they collect any colored objects, especially bright blue to attract the female. Thanks so much for reviewing. Love, Kay.
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent detail of setting - you set the stage well
Rushes growing around the billabongs' - drop the apostrophe
couldn't get along with each other; - I would make that a comma
a good life, and they never smiled - add comma
everything the tribes would ever need, was - add the comma
Baiame lost patience, and - I would add that comma
frightened by the Weedah, - I would make that a semicolon
have a happy life, and yet - add comma
taking away the lush greens and browns, - add comma
he has been very patient with you, but - add comma
where they can't find food," they huddled - make that a period
You must learn a lesson," - make that a period
I absolutely love the lesson the bird teaches and the explanation of how it got its colors and the land became brown and not lush :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Excellent detail of setting - you set the stage well
Rushes growing around the billabongs' - drop the apostrophe
couldn't get along with each other; - I would make that a comma
a good life, and they never smiled - add comma
everything the tribes would ever need, was - add the comma
Baiame lost patience, and - I would add that comma
frightened by the Weedah, - I would make that a semicolon
have a happy life, and yet - add comma
taking away the lush greens and browns, - add comma
he has been very patient with you, but - add comma
where they can't find food," they huddled - make that a period
You must learn a lesson," - make that a period
I absolutely love the lesson the bird teaches and the explanation of how it got its colors and the land became brown and not lush :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Bless you my dear friend - this is my first attempt at a little book. I hope Americans will understand it; tried to make it simple. Hugs, Kay.
Comment from Tessa Kay
I very much enjoyed reading your story. I like the way the colour moves from the land into the bird and the lesson.
We do take way too much for granted.
A couple things you may want to correct:
...where they can find food.(full stop)" They huddled together, (comma)waiting for an answer.
...given you, must learn a lesson.(full stop)"
"You (capitol letter) must learn to get along..."
Baiame taught your elders how to to (omit a 'to')
It's a sweet story with a good moral at the end.
Nice work.
:) Tessa
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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I very much enjoyed reading your story. I like the way the colour moves from the land into the bird and the lesson.
We do take way too much for granted.
A couple things you may want to correct:
...where they can find food.(full stop)" They huddled together, (comma)waiting for an answer.
...given you, must learn a lesson.(full stop)"
"You (capitol letter) must learn to get along..."
Baiame taught your elders how to to (omit a 'to')
It's a sweet story with a good moral at the end.
Nice work.
:) Tessa
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Hello Tessa, Thanks so much for reading and I will edit. Blessings, Kay.
