Comment from donette1914

Exceptional

what a beautiful photo of your grand daughter and the Bible saids you will see her back on on the earth real soon and i am so sorry for your loss

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thank you so so much for the wonderful comment and 6 stars. It means a great deal to me....xoxo

Comment from Amsterdam

Excellent

No words...

No words, could fill the thoughts.






Life~

When its lost

Young......

Meet the boss.....

I have to believe, It was the plan.

I have to believe, someone else needed them more.

I have to believe, The "best" die young...

I have to believe.....

BTW) other writers...

This is how to write....
TRUTH

am

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Thank you so very, very much. It truly means a lot. This pain is far worse than anything I've ever experienced in all my life. ;( TRUE PAIN....xoxo

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

My condolence over your lost. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very emotional read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Thank you so much my friend....this pain is by far the worst I've ever felt!! ;(

reply by c_lucas on 28-Sep-2013

I can well imagine. You're welcome, Heidi. Charlie

Comment from Sefiros

Good

There's a lot of needless words in the verses.
"You can't cross you'll legs because you're so low?" Seems like you got caught in the corner with your writing.

Get rid of the Oma. Just "proud to call you mine."
Get rid of "to me." Just "princess since birth."
Get rid of "my lovey." Just unneeded.
Good luck with the revision.

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Thank you. However I wasn't to concerned over the little things since my grand baby just passed away. I appreciate your comment tho.

reply by Sefiros on 29-Sep-2013

Well now i just feel stupid. sorry for your loss.

Comment from Sarah Butterfly

Excellent

Very touching poem. It is so sad to read she passed away in her nap. I am very sorry for your and your daughter's loss. I am sure Sophia knew how much she was loved. I wish you and your daughter a lot of courage.

Kind regards

Sarah

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

ThAnk you deeply Sarah!! I have never experienced pain in this magnitude. I appreciate your kind words and comment. xoxo