Comment from MsHeavens

Excellent

Very appropriate picture and choice of words. A picture says it all and this one definitely describes how some things are overlooked, all in the name of love. Is it the love that goes astray or the person? LOL oh well. Thanks for sharing, nice write.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thank you. It is the love that goes 'astray'.lol

Comment from Cookie333

Excellent

I have given a 5 for an honest attempt at this prompt, you have a wonderful theme/message.
Just a few thoughts
1st line= 5 syllables, perfect!
2nd line=8 syllables, totally fixable if you contract 'it is' to "it's"
3rd line = 9 syllables, a bit tougher but still...do-able if you play with it a bit.

I hope this helps,
thank you for sharing, and for the chuckle,
karen

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thank you very much.

Please teach me how to count correctly.

Comment from emrpoems

Good

Sorry for the four star but this is not a 5-7-5.

They say love is blind
No wonder it is hard to find
It probably keeps going astray --My count 5-8-9

Great theme though

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thanks.

I appreciate, but please teach me how to count.

How would you rather I should have written it instead?

reply by emrpoems on 25-Sep-2013

You must count every syllable in each word eg.
No wonder it is hard to find
no-won-der-it-is-hard-to-find ----8

It probably keeps going astray
It- pro-bab-ly- keeps- go-ing a-stray--- 9

sometimes you can shorten words like it is can be it's
eg No- won-der -it's- hard- to -find --7

It probably keeps going astray -- could be
It prob-a-bly goes -a-stray---7

Hope this helps. Writing this type of poetry is not easy so you did a fairly good job

reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013

Thank you...I tried to restructure it again. How can I get you to see it again.