The Many Smiles Of A Courtesan
Free verse38 total reviews
Comment from boxergirl
This poem flows effortlessly from top to bottom. I like your use of pronouns and the way they are spread out starting with I and then switching to me and back to you. Good job!
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This poem flows effortlessly from top to bottom. I like your use of pronouns and the way they are spread out starting with I and then switching to me and back to you. Good job!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
A well balanced circling of smiles, from the polished ones of the courtesan to that of a client (?) to my own at the symmetry of it all.
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A well balanced circling of smiles, from the polished ones of the courtesan to that of a client (?) to my own at the symmetry of it all.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
Comment from Glasstruth
Yes, indeed the smile is well rehearsed. Sort of a mask as you implied; and of course what we say before and after that well practiced smile adds to it. Overall presentation is just wonderful. Les
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Yes, indeed the smile is well rehearsed. Sort of a mask as you implied; and of course what we say before and after that well practiced smile adds to it. Overall presentation is just wonderful. Les
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
Comment from emrpoems
Loved the way you used your words. Effortless
and near-perfect. Also you told the story with ease. This story is truly well carved and portrays the underlying character very well
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Loved the way you used your words. Effortless
and near-perfect. Also you told the story with ease. This story is truly well carved and portrays the underlying character very well
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
Comment from Kingsrookviii
I like this better each time I reread it. This is so smooth, subtle and well done. I love the shift from a recollection to the use of me then you. This has several interpretations and I like them all. Your picture is a nice bit of mystery, but the true mystery is with the author. Heck of a great job on this gem.
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I like this better each time I reread it. This is so smooth, subtle and well done. I love the shift from a recollection to the use of me then you. This has several interpretations and I like them all. Your picture is a nice bit of mystery, but the true mystery is with the author. Heck of a great job on this gem.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
Comment from Supe
I love the second stanza in this piece. I love the flow and pace from start to finish, but the 2nd stanza stands out for me. The picture you chose to complement your words works well. coifed and garbed to entice and engage - nice imagery. Good job.
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I love the second stanza in this piece. I love the flow and pace from start to finish, but the 2nd stanza stands out for me. The picture you chose to complement your words works well. coifed and garbed to entice and engage - nice imagery. Good job.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
Comment from Benny Beeharry
I am attracted by the cute wy of setting out your poem in the first place,
Having said this I like the tone and the slow drifting to the end",an ironic piece of smile.
Well manoeuvred
Or engineered, shall I say?
Benny Beharry
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I am attracted by the cute wy of setting out your poem in the first place,
Having said this I like the tone and the slow drifting to the end",an ironic piece of smile.
Well manoeuvred
Or engineered, shall I say?
Benny Beharry
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
Comment from harmony13
An interesting poem! The poem was deep and thought provoking. The author was creative and descriptive in this poem. The artwork was perfect and complimented the read.
Thank you, harmony13
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An interesting poem! The poem was deep and thought provoking. The author was creative and descriptive in this poem. The artwork was perfect and complimented the read.
Thank you, harmony13
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
