Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, girl (What is your name btw?) LOL. I think you have a wonderful poem here. I especially liked the ending styanza:

"you ready to bear witness to it all
and depart the encounter
with a single smile"

A tip.. You will be much better off on the site and get many more reviewers if you offer more than 2 cents for the review. If you simply review all of the poems on the front pager, you can raise enough to work with each time...(wink) Bob

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013

Hi Bob,

I am delighted that you enjoyed this little poem.

"a wonderful poem"
feels even better than it sounds"!

Thanks for the reviewing tip.

Peace, hugs and lots of smiles,
Jill
:-)

Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a very interesting piece. I like the tone of this poem. I think you expressed your theme well. The picture is a nice touch.
Barbara

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2013

Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

very good, Jill. She has many smiles - allurement, hope, disguising the pain ... he has only one. The smile of selfish gratification.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013

You got it mike!
A perfectly on target interpretation

I haven't a clue where this poem came from but I was pleased with the end result .
Thank you my friend for understanding all the smiles....

Peace, hugs and lots of smiles,
Jill
:-)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Beautiful and neat....beautiful artwork....well done...
Confident words affixed like a mask in place........
We play such games .......
Well done
God bless

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

Comment from Starlit Ink

Excellent

This is an interesting free verse, and a good use of non-verbal situations. Smiles can sometimes say much more than words. As you describe, confident masklike words are not as real and honest, as what is behind them. This is a good use of the free verse form. Nice touches of alliteration also.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

Comment from Christof McTarnahan

Excellent

Engaging and seductive, you led me through your words without a hitch. Top notch on all fronts, I am glad you are posting stuff again.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

uptowngirlchef, you have captured the actions behind the mask of deception. How easily we are beguiled by the superficial never looking at the unsmiling eyes that do not match. Well penned. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2013

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Lovely photograph. And this is a great poem. The smile can be deceiving. It is the eyes we must look into to see the soul. Or so I have heard. Creative with great visual imagery. Nice work.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2013

Comment from mystery poet

Exceptional

I think this is so good...The mystery, aloofness,
such a fake performance...Fake smile...The mask
in place. Another pretend encounter that will
happen again and again...Great writing! I think
the art is intriquing. Thanks for the read.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2013

Comment from AudreyRose

Excellent

Great job, entertaining and told a small risqu© story. The imagery was great, the details enough to bring it to life. You did a great job.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2013