thoughts and feelings in poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "I want to be a servant too"poems reflecting my thoughts and feelings
11 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery wirter, you did an excellent job writing this monorhyme poem about the life of a servant of Christ. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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this is very well written, mystery wirter, you did an excellent job writing this monorhyme poem about the life of a servant of Christ. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Sweetwoodjax, Thank you for your review and complements I am thankful God bless
Comment from justmarly
Wow you are right. Its worth serving Jesus. The world has no compare with Jesus. He's all in all. He will never let us down. Take the world but give me Jesus. A wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing. JM
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Wow you are right. Its worth serving Jesus. The world has no compare with Jesus. He's all in all. He will never let us down. Take the world but give me Jesus. A wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing. JM
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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JM thanks for your review yes they can have the world I'll take Jesus God bless
Comment from Charlene0513
This is a wonderful poem addressing your humility and the loving to give. But very few will for fear they will end up with nothing when it is the other way around.
Charlene
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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This is a wonderful poem addressing your humility and the loving to give. But very few will for fear they will end up with nothing when it is the other way around.
Charlene
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and yes when you have Jesus you have everything God bless
Comment from MizKat
Hi Poet,
This is a beautiful Mono - rhyme poem. I especially like it because it is inspirational, which is my favorite kind of poetry to write and read.
Kat
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Hi Poet,
This is a beautiful Mono - rhyme poem. I especially like it because it is inspirational, which is my favorite kind of poetry to write and read.
Kat
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Hi MizKat Thank you for your review and I am glad you like my poem I also like to read and write inspirational poetry I would like to friend you so I can read yours God bless
Comment from rouskin
Really you are far ahead from many others
" living to serve,is the
name of the game. " You really found here something,but most of the people would like to play living to rule..
Great poem
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Really you are far ahead from many others
" living to serve,is the
name of the game. " You really found here something,but most of the people would like to play living to rule..
Great poem
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and kind complement God bless
Comment from Thatguypk
This is going to be a tough contest. The Monorhyme is tricky enough, but you've created a very good piece, observing the requirements of the challenge and putting across a message as well. A good write.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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This is going to be a tough contest. The Monorhyme is tricky enough, but you've created a very good piece, observing the requirements of the challenge and putting across a message as well. A good write.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and nice complement Blessings
Comment from CR Delport
I say do what makes you happy, as long as it doesn't hurt anybody else. This is a well written poem with lovely art work. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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I say do what makes you happy, as long as it doesn't hurt anybody else. This is a well written poem with lovely art work. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and complement God bless
Comment from n.rosej.
WONDERFUL poem! Hats off, fellow Christian; it's so nice to see poems dedicated to the Lord. This flowed well, and rhyme, sublime, lol
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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WONDERFUL poem! Hats off, fellow Christian; it's so nice to see poems dedicated to the Lord. This flowed well, and rhyme, sublime, lol
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and kind words. Blessings
Comment from Leineco
What great use you have put this mono-rhyme form to!
But you need to make two changes to meet the prompt
How about changing the last two lines to:
Because living to serve,is the name of the game.
That, and to praise his name with acclaim
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Because living to serve,is the name of the game.
That, and his glory to proclaim.
just suggestions to keep that mono-rhyme through to the end :-)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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What great use you have put this mono-rhyme form to!
But you need to make two changes to meet the prompt
How about changing the last two lines to:
Because living to serve,is the name of the game.
That, and to praise his name with acclaim
-or-
Because living to serve,is the name of the game.
That, and his glory to proclaim.
just suggestions to keep that mono-rhyme through to the end :-)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and suggestions I was not able to make changes before deadline I don't get a chance to get on this computer every day. Blessings
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
How important, destined, God's willing and needed is the service and to be in the service of God, ever in all terms and manner in course of living is righteous, nicely said in inspirational voice. 05/919
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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How important, destined, God's willing and needed is the service and to be in the service of God, ever in all terms and manner in course of living is righteous, nicely said in inspirational voice. 05/919
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review and kind words Blessings