Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Holiday Drama"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
30 total reviews
Comment from Shirley McLain
Family dynamics is something we all have to deal with. You did an excellent job with your story, and I didn't find any mistakes. I hope you have a wonderful evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Family dynamics is something we all have to deal with. You did an excellent job with your story, and I didn't find any mistakes. I hope you have a wonderful evening. Shirley
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Thank you Shirley, I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Jeff Flaig
I listened to this on TTS. I have a great one that sounds so natural, but it doesn't if the writing isn't natural. This flowed nicely and was very natural soundings. That comes from good writing. You can have a great story, but if it doesn't sound natural, it's no longer a great story.. In this case Chapter.
Again, I thought this was well written and flowed very naturally.
Keep Writing.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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I listened to this on TTS. I have a great one that sounds so natural, but it doesn't if the writing isn't natural. This flowed nicely and was very natural soundings. That comes from good writing. You can have a great story, but if it doesn't sound natural, it's no longer a great story.. In this case Chapter.
Again, I thought this was well written and flowed very naturally.
Keep Writing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the review and comments. I'm confused. What is TTS and what did you listen to? You couldn't have listed to this story, because it is my personal family story and I'm telling it as it happened. I think you saying the dialogue sounds natural and I appreciate that.
Beth
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I copied it into a tts, and then listened to it. If you like I could copy it again and send an mp3 to you of your story..
My email, saturnn77@yahoo.com
send it and I'll send it back.
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OH. TTS is text to speech..
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Send it means: send your email.
Comment from Ulla
Deare me, Beth, I've never come across a family who didn't have one problem or other. I don't think it would be a normal family otherwise. I loved this chapter and the many names were not difficult to keep up with. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Deare me, Beth, I've never come across a family who didn't have one problem or other. I don't think it would be a normal family otherwise. I loved this chapter and the many names were not difficult to keep up with. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you, I really appreciate your comments. This isn't only time that someone almost ruined the holiday by being difficult, but it was only time we saw two of our group come to physical blows and a plate of food thrown against the wall.
Beth
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I know what you're saying. I do realise it wasn't pleasant at all, Ulla':))
Comment from Judy Lawless
There are often conflicts in most families, Beth, even small ones like mine. You are right, we do need to pick our battles and try to be more tolerant. You and Even seemed to understand that when you got to know Richard. Thanks for sharing. We can all learn from it.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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There are often conflicts in most families, Beth, even small ones like mine. You are right, we do need to pick our battles and try to be more tolerant. You and Even seemed to understand that when you got to know Richard. Thanks for sharing. We can all learn from it.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you Judy, I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
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You're most welcome, Beth.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I apologize in advance for my quick and meaningless reviews over the next few days. I'm out of stars and just trying to keep up, close as I can, so that I don't miss out on reviewing some of my favorite writer's posts. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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I apologize in advance for my quick and meaningless reviews over the next few days. I'm out of stars and just trying to keep up, close as I can, so that I don't miss out on reviewing some of my favorite writer's posts. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Ric, I understand. I keep getting behind to. I'm thrilled with any kind of review. I'm more than pleased that you consider me one of your favorite writers.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Ugly scene. I'm impressed you describe it so well, considering you weren't there--it reads as if you were an eyewitness. No winners here for sure. Sad aftermath.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Ugly scene. I'm impressed you describe it so well, considering you weren't there--it reads as if you were an eyewitness. No winners here for sure. Sad aftermath.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you Elizabeth, When you use dialogue you never get it totally accurate. I went by what I was told, and the fact I knew these people well enough I could guess how they likely reacted. I love your review.
Beth
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Fine work!
Comment from Ben Colder
Yea, I hate it when people have problems getting alone at family gatherings. Mostly jealousy over something less important to all.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Yea, I hate it when people have problems getting alone at family gatherings. Mostly jealousy over something less important to all.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you Chuck. This was bad scene but family members often show their worse sides on holidays.
Beth
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Not all do. Sorry about you guys having to experience such.
Comment from lyenochka
You were wise not to get involved and choose sides. It's interesting that both the brothers-in-law were diabetic and having a low sugar moment. It's awful that kind of thing happens.
On suggestion:
walked into Evan's parent's (parents') Seems like they were both alive then.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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You were wise not to get involved and choose sides. It's interesting that both the brothers-in-law were diabetic and having a low sugar moment. It's awful that kind of thing happens.
On suggestion:
walked into Evan's parent's (parents') Seems like they were both alive then.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Thank you Helen> This story took place about forty-eight years ago. They are gone now, but everyone was still alive then. The children were young and Connie wasn't even born.
Beth
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You mentioned it more briefly in your Remembering Yesterday book. This one gave us more details.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Great story. terrible story.
Very well told/written.
Too bad that Evan didn't know Richard well enough to recognize his condition and either bring him something to nibble on, or at least encourage him to do it himself.
But then you wouldn't have a story, either great, or terrible.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Great story. terrible story.
Very well told/written.
Too bad that Evan didn't know Richard well enough to recognize his condition and either bring him something to nibble on, or at least encourage him to do it himself.
But then you wouldn't have a story, either great, or terrible.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the review and excellent comments. Yes people who have blood sugar problems should always have some with them for moments like that. When there are two of them, already at odds, It was like a power keg about to explode.
Beth
Comment from royowen
How fascinating, yes there are problems in clashing personalities, they say one can choose their friends but not their family. We've had similar things in our family, but not coming to blows fortunately. And excellent post Beth, thanks for sharing, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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How fascinating, yes there are problems in clashing personalities, they say one can choose their friends but not their family. We've had similar things in our family, but not coming to blows fortunately. And excellent post Beth, thanks for sharing, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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Thank you Roy, It wasn't our best Christmas, but it was certainly memorable. Now there are very few left of that group except for the younger generation. That happened around forty-eight years ago.
Beth
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That?s a long time ago
