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Leander

poem

204 total reviews 
Comment from nancyjam
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Delightful list of bad-boy pranks - quite
imaginative and fun. I especially liked

"he pilfered spots from butterflies,
their wings now drab and dreary."

Cute picture of Sawyer - hardly recognized him though without his smile!

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    He is having a bit of a "naughty" patch, throwing food at Mommy. LOL Thanks so much, Nancy :-) Brooke
Comment from visionary1234
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oh you gorgeous thing - your little guy seems to give you an inexhaustible supply of wise, bubbly yarns to spin, Brooke! The accompanying photo is, of course, priceless! :)S

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Sharyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
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What a wicked grandmother you are to identify poor, innocent sawyer with this evil fellow, leander!

Seriously, your poem is a lot of fun and I enjoyed the lengthy list of Leander's misdeeds - stealing the hop and the tickles were my favourites.

Steve

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Thanks so much, Steve. Sawyer has been naughty lately, throwing food at Mommy, so I figured I'd make her laugh with this one :-) Brooke
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
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Oh wow he has to be thinking about something very seriously from the look on his adorable little face. We love the profile picture too but then we just love this little guy. By the way the poem was great too. (Haha) God loves you and so do I.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    He has been having a battle of wills with Mommy lately at meal time LOL. Thank you so much, Evelyn and Janie :-) Brooke
Comment from pattipac
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Your well penned narrative poem could evolve into a child's
story book. Lenander seems to have had a huge melt-down, allowing his evil side to run ramped, until his mother put and end to it by putting him in bed.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Patti, thank you so very much. I so appreciate your thoughtful comments and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from words
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Oh, I love the expression that Miranda caught on Sawyer's face.

He does,,indeed, look a bit villainous. LOL

Such a charming story.

Yes, being tucked in Mother' s bed cures most things.

Hugs,d

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    I just love the look, like a villain in a melodrama right before he ties the girl onto the train tracks. LOL Thank you, Diane :-) Your twins will get around to the evil eye soon enough ;-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
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I am so glad that rules have changed a bit on this site and that I am able to give this fantastic poem the six star rating it deserves. I know I will run out them soon, but still, it's nice to be able to reward THIS poem as it so richly deserves.

Leander, Sawyer's evil twin, is diabolically sweet, and has enormous appeal despite his pilfering ways. Loved the story and the poem - Bravo, my friend. This one is 'outta the park.' Rose.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Rose, thank you so very much :-) I am thrilled with your reaction to this poem. It is a favorite of mine :-) I truly appreciate your sixth star. Brooke
Comment from allborn66
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This is a delightful poem. I love the tone. It has a delightful flow. I had just one hiccup - "their honey", I think it would flow better if it was "the honey."
Barbara

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Barbara, thank you for your review :-) I will look at that line again :-) Brooke
Comment from teafor2
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adewpearl--The return of the impish sprite, Leander. :)
If looks were death rays...someone in the path of this look
would be toasted. A whimsical and hyperbolic list of no-
good-deeds employed by scribe's antagonist. Apt penalty for
shenanigans. Witty humored piece. teafor2

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
    His mom has the best death stare on the planet - I think he has inherited it. LOL Thanks so much, teafor2 :-) Brooke
reply by teafor2 on 16-Sep-2013
    U R welcome.
Comment from Leineco
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Leander seems to be a trial
bent on stealing everything
that makes our life worthwhile
even hatchling's promise to sing.

I wonder what it is he did
with all those things he stole-
this thieving little kid,
did he give them to a troll?

They do not seem to have reached in
and brightened up his soul
or caused his tilt to spin
into a pleasant role.

But mom has put a stop to this
said "Leave the star light whole,
your greed has gotten ridiculous-
It's time I took control!"

She tucked him in
and kissed his head
then sadly thought "I only win,
when Leander is snuggled in his bed."


LOL - I'm sure Leander is a lovely child - but I couldn't resist this rejoinder :-)

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
    Leineco, thank you so very much for this wonderfully poetic rejoinder to my poem :-) Brooke