Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "What Is My Love?"My book of poems and stories
58 total reviews
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
A sweet, thought provoking write, and a very good premise for a poem! A very good entry for the contest.
Loved your opening line ... " He is a smile begetting a smile" ... brilliant and so true. One smile just does wonders in bringing about more smiles.
I loved it! Best wishes for the contest!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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A sweet, thought provoking write, and a very good premise for a poem! A very good entry for the contest.
Loved your opening line ... " He is a smile begetting a smile" ... brilliant and so true. One smile just does wonders in bringing about more smiles.
I loved it! Best wishes for the contest!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much for the nice review. I do appreciate your time and effort.
Comment from rouskin
Too recognized. It makes me wonder only if He is real,or expected in the future,because so many qualities in a single man,he should be at lest Superman. Too many demands for a relation.... Great poem.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Too recognized. It makes me wonder only if He is real,or expected in the future,because so many qualities in a single man,he should be at lest Superman. Too many demands for a relation.... Great poem.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your kind review. I really appreciate it.
Comment from emrpoems
I really loved the contrast in the third verse. Such power yet such gentleness.This entire poem is romantic every line speaks to your emotions and the way he is able to fulfill all.
This was beautiful
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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I really loved the contrast in the third verse. Such power yet such gentleness.This entire poem is romantic every line speaks to your emotions and the way he is able to fulfill all.
This was beautiful
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your kind review. I really appreciate it.
Comment from c_lucas
The lover is the jailer
Holding one's safe
The Father Confessor
Protecting secrets
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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The lover is the jailer
Holding one's safe
The Father Confessor
Protecting secrets
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for a very welcome review.
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You're welcome, Annie. Charlie
Comment from pbrprasad
I experience poetic quality which displayed here.The lines which is highly appreciable are last xis lines .Lines realy express inner feeling of women
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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I experience poetic quality which displayed here.The lines which is highly appreciable are last xis lines .Lines realy express inner feeling of women
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your time.
Comment from Nuad1
A very nice work about love that COULD BE anyone, actually, which gives the poem broad appeal. A man, perhaps? For me, a son who is ever so special. For others, a father maybe . . I liked this poem because it could be interpreted to be so many different people, NOT just a romantic type of love.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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A very nice work about love that COULD BE anyone, actually, which gives the poem broad appeal. A man, perhaps? For me, a son who is ever so special. For others, a father maybe . . I liked this poem because it could be interpreted to be so many different people, NOT just a romantic type of love.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your review of my poem. I was very interested in your view of the different interpretation you voiced. I had never thought of it that way. You have a very good sense of interpretation and I liked that. Good luck on your contests.
Comment from FrannyG
This is quite a lovely poem expressing authentic sentiments using simple language to create appealing images. Some of your phrases border on cliches like 'softness like a summer breeze' and 'stirs my inner being'. The constant challenge of writing good poetry is to find fresh and original ways to say things. Avoiding the cliches would strengthen this poem but well done.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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This is quite a lovely poem expressing authentic sentiments using simple language to create appealing images. Some of your phrases border on cliches like 'softness like a summer breeze' and 'stirs my inner being'. The constant challenge of writing good poetry is to find fresh and original ways to say things. Avoiding the cliches would strengthen this poem but well done.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your very welcome review.
Comment from Steve Pantazis
Very sweet piece about love. I particularly like the reference to smoothing away the marks of travelers--it's quite visual. I would suggest "Who is he?" rather than "What is he?", since we're talking about a person, not an object. Other than that, no issues.
Steve
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Very sweet piece about love. I particularly like the reference to smoothing away the marks of travelers--it's quite visual. I would suggest "Who is he?" rather than "What is he?", since we're talking about a person, not an object. Other than that, no issues.
Steve
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you Steve for your nice review. I will consider your suggestions and I do appreciate your taking the time to give some criticism.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
So soft, sweetly, symbolically described and pointed out the essence-grace-gravity and governance of love, nice feeling and emotion and inspiration and glow of love is visually worded, fantastic. 16/920
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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So soft, sweetly, symbolically described and pointed out the essence-grace-gravity and governance of love, nice feeling and emotion and inspiration and glow of love is visually worded, fantastic. 16/920
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for your nice review.
Comment from rjuselius
my sister-in-law is so delightful that when she enters the room, the room lights up by her smile! she has so much natural charisma that you cannot but love her:)
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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my sister-in-law is so delightful that when she enters the room, the room lights up by her smile! she has so much natural charisma that you cannot but love her:)
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much for your nice review.
