The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 " In laws & Outlaws More Mongrels "Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
28 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Oh yes, Geoff, I do remember that very well. Children should be seen but certainly not heard. How things have changed since then. It's interesting how all the religious stuff intervene. Something that was alien to us all in Denmark during my upbringing there. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Oh yes, Geoff, I do remember that very well. Children should be seen but certainly not heard. How things have changed since then. It's interesting how all the religious stuff intervene. Something that was alien to us all in Denmark during my upbringing there. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2022
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Yeah, so you agree the lack of affection could be connected to the "Children should be seen and not heard?" Thanks so much for the lovely review.
Comment from Sally Law
This is delightful and so full of many of the things I have experienced living for three years with my grands. They had the attitude that "children should be seen not heard." A funny quirk about them, but they were kind and generous nonetheless. Inoperable your Dad reappears in the coming posts. Mine never did. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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This is delightful and so full of many of the things I have experienced living for three years with my grands. They had the attitude that "children should be seen not heard." A funny quirk about them, but they were kind and generous nonetheless. Inoperable your Dad reappears in the coming posts. Mine never did. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Hi Sally. I also think the "children should be seen and not heard" is connected with the lack of affection of grandparents etc as well. Thanks.Maybe I mentioed about LOuise's Niece wanting to be affectionate with Nan (Louise's Mum and Nan rejecting it?
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Yes, we have had similar experiences. Blessings, my brother.
Sal XOs
Comment from Judy Lawless
It sounds like you had an interesting life, Sankey. There are some things I'm not familiar with, like putting stewed apples in with the stewed rhubarb to keep it from getting too sweet. That doesn't make sense to me. lol Thanks for sharing these stories with us.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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It sounds like you had an interesting life, Sankey. There are some things I'm not familiar with, like putting stewed apples in with the stewed rhubarb to keep it from getting too sweet. That doesn't make sense to me. lol Thanks for sharing these stories with us.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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You cut up the rhubarb(not the leaves!! HEHE!! POISON!!) and the apples preferably the green kind(we call them Granny Smith Apples) add some sugar and not too much water as it creates its own in the boiling up. Now talking about it I need to do it again...been ages since I had some...Louise does not like it.
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Thanks. I cook rhubarb with a little sugar or maple syrup, but no apples. :)
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Maple Syrup sounds interesting. Queen Brand does a range of Maple Syrups including a sugar-free variety. I reckon that maple syrup with the rhubarb must make it SWEET! (Like my nanna's minus the apple hehe)! The Rhubarb and apple is nice with custard or when it cools, with icecream. Yummo!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Nothing bad, your wish of comparing your father to Moses, learning more of grandfather and aunty, why your father wanted to carry you and your brother; your grandmother's decision about your schooling was right then; you want to let us more about in laws; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Nothing bad, your wish of comparing your father to Moses, learning more of grandfather and aunty, why your father wanted to carry you and your brother; your grandmother's decision about your schooling was right then; you want to let us more about in laws; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Bro, appreciate the wonderful review.
Comment from Sanku
Very interesting childhood memories you have ..I an empathise with the 'boy person 'and 'girl person'.I can also identify a few of my relatives like that .
I wonder our future generations will have such memories..Their memories will be mostly about 'whatsapp messages''and ''facebook''posts.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Very interesting childhood memories you have ..I an empathise with the 'boy person 'and 'girl person'.I can also identify a few of my relatives like that .
I wonder our future generations will have such memories..Their memories will be mostly about 'whatsapp messages''and ''facebook''posts.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Hi old friend. Don't think I have seen you for ages. Thanks so much for the great review. Check around there are still some paying old posts that have been put up again.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was rather lengthy but it was a great history family history.
I didn't like the part of how your father left you for 6 years because as a young child you might have think he had died.
But I really like the part about your grandparents and the many places you were allowed to visit.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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This was rather lengthy but it was a great history family history.
I didn't like the part of how your father left you for 6 years because as a young child you might have think he had died.
But I really like the part about your grandparents and the many places you were allowed to visit.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 06-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2022
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Thanks Dr Ricky. I knew he had not died, Mum and I cried night after night over it. After this, I think I posted about them getting back to gether again 20 years later.Make sure you look around real quick as promotions of these old chapters is running out, again. More to come.
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Actually it is chapter 25.
Comment from Gail Denham
My stars - how do you keep up with all this - and keep everyone straight. An amazing thing is family - they sure are.Full of unusual twists and turns, the relationships often suffer - but we pray we can always have some good relationships with some of them.
You have an amazing memory.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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My stars - how do you keep up with all this - and keep everyone straight. An amazing thing is family - they sure are.Full of unusual twists and turns, the relationships often suffer - but we pray we can always have some good relationships with some of them.
You have an amazing memory.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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Thanks very much for this lovely review. So encouraging a bit down atm with Summer in USA and a lot of my favourites on Vacation. Cheers.
Comment from Sarah B Tutun
this was an incredible piece of writing. A witty but not fine piece of work. I loved your dry sense of humor. this piece deserves to get rounds and rounds of applause.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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this was an incredible piece of writing. A witty but not fine piece of work. I loved your dry sense of humor. this piece deserves to get rounds and rounds of applause.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thanks Sarah this is a further edit to an almost ready for publishing Autobiography. Hope to see you again will check your stuff if I have not already.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this bit of family history. It is very freeing to go back and organize these thoughts into a coherent story format. It allows you to sift through the information you have, and present it for others to see.
~patty~
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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thank you for sharing this bit of family history. It is very freeing to go back and organize these thoughts into a coherent story format. It allows you to sift through the information you have, and present it for others to see.
~patty~
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Thanks, my new Sis in the Lord. Some find my style a bit boring but I love learning about other people's lives and battles and victories in the Lord. Love you in Him Thanks for this lovely review.
Comment from Thal1959
Geoff, we have a problem here. The overall sentiment of the writing is fine, and always remember that I might struggle at times with the difference between Aussie and American grammar. But this piece is chock full of unnecessary commas which creates fragmented sentences. It would take hours for me to go through the whole thing, so allow me to offer a few examples...
"During the visit, it came to my mind, while we talked, how Dad, many years before, had asked my Mum to bring my brother and me, up to Queensland to live."
Geoff, there are six commas in this single sentence! Now you know I am not going to BS you, but the truth is that when a person uses so many commas, it is an indication the sentence is the product of disjointed thinking. It really is not enough to just delete a comma or two, although that would constitute and improvement. What is really called for is for the sentence to be re-written. First, you can delete three of the commas in parenthesis.
"During the visit, it came to my mind(,) while we talked(,) how Dad, many years before, had asked my Mum to bring my brother and me(,) up to Queensland to live"
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"During the visit, it came to my mind while we talked how Dad, many years before, had asked my Mum to bring my brother and me up to Queensland to live."
---or--- a slight rewrite, such as-
"During the visit, it occurred to me as we were talking about how Dad, many years before, had asked my Mum to bring my brother and me up to Queensland to live."
"Of course, I still remember, as well, the return home, and being very emotional with Mum - a kind of "reality check," I guess." Could be re-written as -
"Of course, I still remember on the return trip home being very emotional with Mum - a kind of "reality check," I guess."
"After they were married, and over time, Granddad would sneak off to Mass, occasionally." Geoff, one doesn't need a comma before every use of the conjunction "and." There is also no reason to express a thought and then finish it off with a single word after a comma - as if the last word was thrown in at the lasts second. This is remedied by moving "occasionally" between "would" and "sneak." i.e. "After they were married, and over time, Granddad would occasionally sneak off to Mass."
Geoff, when I first started writing, I found I would write sentences out of order. Instead of something like, "Whenever a person needs to resort to the rules again, they should take a "time-out," rather than rush through their dilemma." I would write something like, "Rather than rush through the problem, a person should take a "time-out," to resort to the rules, whenever they felt they needed to, if they had a problem."
I always seemed to start the sentence at the wrong place. If you are using so many commas, it means you are "thinking out of joint" and are expressing the sentence in clipped clauses rather than in a single, fluent expression. All I can do for you here is suggest you reread this chapter and try to remove as many commas as you feel comfortable with. Now, imagine if I rendered that last line like this...
All I can do, for you here, is suggest, you reread this chapter, and try to remove, as many commas, as you feel comfortable with.
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Geoff, we have a problem here. The overall sentiment of the writing is fine, and always remember that I might struggle at times with the difference between Aussie and American grammar. But this piece is chock full of unnecessary commas which creates fragmented sentences. It would take hours for me to go through the whole thing, so allow me to offer a few examples...
"During the visit, it came to my mind, while we talked, how Dad, many years before, had asked my Mum to bring my brother and me, up to Queensland to live."
Geoff, there are six commas in this single sentence! Now you know I am not going to BS you, but the truth is that when a person uses so many commas, it is an indication the sentence is the product of disjointed thinking. It really is not enough to just delete a comma or two, although that would constitute and improvement. What is really called for is for the sentence to be re-written. First, you can delete three of the commas in parenthesis.
"During the visit, it came to my mind(,) while we talked(,) how Dad, many years before, had asked my Mum to bring my brother and me(,) up to Queensland to live"
---or---
"During the visit, it came to my mind while we talked how Dad, many years before, had asked my Mum to bring my brother and me up to Queensland to live."
---or--- a slight rewrite, such as-
"During the visit, it occurred to me as we were talking about how Dad, many years before, had asked my Mum to bring my brother and me up to Queensland to live."
"Of course, I still remember, as well, the return home, and being very emotional with Mum - a kind of "reality check," I guess." Could be re-written as -
"Of course, I still remember on the return trip home being very emotional with Mum - a kind of "reality check," I guess."
"After they were married, and over time, Granddad would sneak off to Mass, occasionally." Geoff, one doesn't need a comma before every use of the conjunction "and." There is also no reason to express a thought and then finish it off with a single word after a comma - as if the last word was thrown in at the lasts second. This is remedied by moving "occasionally" between "would" and "sneak." i.e. "After they were married, and over time, Granddad would occasionally sneak off to Mass."
Geoff, when I first started writing, I found I would write sentences out of order. Instead of something like, "Whenever a person needs to resort to the rules again, they should take a "time-out," rather than rush through their dilemma." I would write something like, "Rather than rush through the problem, a person should take a "time-out," to resort to the rules, whenever they felt they needed to, if they had a problem."
I always seemed to start the sentence at the wrong place. If you are using so many commas, it means you are "thinking out of joint" and are expressing the sentence in clipped clauses rather than in a single, fluent expression. All I can do for you here is suggest you reread this chapter and try to remove as many commas as you feel comfortable with. Now, imagine if I rendered that last line like this...
All I can do, for you here, is suggest, you reread this chapter, and try to remove, as many commas, as you feel comfortable with.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Thanks, mate. You have to blame that damn Grammarly. I tried to re-do these so many times as Grammarly is a shocking editor. I think we have to go with the flow on there and you are most assuredly right on too many commas. Grammarly as I have said before also does not abide by its own rules as to being set for British English and still correcting me for spelling in British English. Thanks, mate I asked for it. Will work on it and ask you to look again. Love your dedication.
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I presume "Grammarly" is a grammar editor. But I don't know of any legitimate grammar editor out there. Vahnces are, if you type something like, "Form one dye to thee next, you will fiend that went in the coarse of human events, won is likely to receive better than to badly give."
On other words, I know of no editor that will catch the spelling errors or the bad grammar.
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Hey mate hope this gets you I finally did the big comma removal through here and some changes. Let me know ok! Sorry took so long.
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I scanned through it, and it seems OK. The important part, Geoff, is that your latter work is better from the beginning. You seem to have conquered the overuse of commas and the use of single quote marks. Those two things were the most notable flaws. Most anything else comes in the form of the difference between Aussie and American grammar, which I tend to avoid since I am not schooled in Aussie grammar or colloquial expressions.
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Well, once again friend, I am totally indebted to you for all your wonderful help. I will have to keep all this in mind for my other stuff coming up for Revive Certificates etc. Cheers.
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Keep at it, Geoff... you're doing good.
