Comment from Sueellen11

Excellent

Oh how sad, poor lonely bumble bee, all alone, but so wants a new friend, great entry into the contest, good luck, blessings, sueellen

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2013

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Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good use of envelope rhyming
good alliteration in phrases like fly among flowers
delightful use of personification as the speaker and the bee converse :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2013

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Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Thanks very much for entering my contest, Magic Dragon.

Maybe 'beneath rain showers', rather than 'upon rain showers', though I realise what you're saying?

Very cute personification of the bee which I'm sure will help kids like them a lot.

Good luck, Ted

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2013

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Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

I just had to call my grandson who loves poems and read your sweet poetry to him. He is eight years old and loves to read. I really enjoyed the poem. It made me smile.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2013

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Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

This rhymes nicely and tells a story of friendship between a Bumble Bee and a little boy. The bee is lonely for his family who left.
Your poem rhymes nicely and children should enjoy the story.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2013

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Comment from SteveY

Excellent

A nicely written childern's story told in a poetic fashion. Very good rhythm and has some good rhyming as well. Overall a very good work.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2013

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