The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Big Day Getting Closer"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Even in the Methodist Church the pastor strongly suggest pre-marriage counseling. Once again I enjoyed reading your post.
Some time later we heard that Louise's mum had called my mum in a real panic!
"Margaret!" She cried, "They're talking about getting married!" Mum-in-law-to-be expecting my mum to be horrified and to be aghast, shocked and all the other terms of horror, my mum just replied...
"Isn't that terrific!" (each person's dialogue deserves their own pargraph)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Even in the Methodist Church the pastor strongly suggest pre-marriage counseling. Once again I enjoyed reading your post.
Some time later we heard that Louise's mum had called my mum in a real panic!
"Margaret!" She cried, "They're talking about getting married!" Mum-in-law-to-be expecting my mum to be horrified and to be aghast, shocked and all the other terms of horror, my mum just replied...
"Isn't that terrific!" (each person's dialogue deserves their own pargraph)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Barbara. I have actually reviewed some others and they don't even allow new lines for the speaking parts. I will work on this, much appreciated. I never sent this letter but boy. I felt better after I wrote it.
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Hi Barbara I corrected the speaking lines and thanks. More for you to read, ahead. Maybe been there befiore but edits have been made.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'Big Day Getting Closer' is good read.
Well-written chapter.
Great artwork: The image shown is good match for this story.
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Check for capitalization: 'it was a lovely night...'
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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'Big Day Getting Closer' is good read.
Well-written chapter.
Great artwork: The image shown is good match for this story.
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Check for capitalization: 'it was a lovely night...'
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks Nicole. I have heaps of other stuff in my Portfolio if interested including Spiritual Poems; My Book of Poultry (funny poems) the Really Truly Christmas Carols; Geoff's Musings a bunch of serious poems Compositions and Essays about different things. Can't afford to get them all out with rewards of course.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing the story of your engagement and the families' reactions. It is so hard to realize that other people seem to think they have some sort of say in our lives. Marriage in the church often occurs because of family, and not for the right reasons.
~patty~
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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thank you for sharing the story of your engagement and the families' reactions. It is so hard to realize that other people seem to think they have some sort of say in our lives. Marriage in the church often occurs because of family, and not for the right reasons.
~patty~
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Yeah well the wedding is coming (been 30 years ago now hehe) so stick around and thanks for the review. I just last night (our time in Australia) picked up a new Youtube of a Choir singing the song that is a part of the next chapter so glad to get it. SDA which we are not but a much better version than one I had before I moved the chapters.
Comment from MelB
My Mum, us and Louise's family were all present. - My Mum, Louise, her family, and I
Oh sheesh! My Baptist MIL tried to break up my marriage too. So helpful that way, aren't they? Obviously, yours didn't succeed either. I love it when the devil loses! I'm sorry you couldn't have children. That had to be a difficult thing to find out. The place you started out at sounds like it will not be dull.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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My Mum, us and Louise's family were all present. - My Mum, Louise, her family, and I
Oh sheesh! My Baptist MIL tried to break up my marriage too. So helpful that way, aren't they? Obviously, yours didn't succeed either. I love it when the devil loses! I'm sorry you couldn't have children. That had to be a difficult thing to find out. The place you started out at sounds like it will not be dull.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the correction. I did figure it was a bit off the way I put it. Appreciate you coming through. Gets more exciting from here on, I think.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Thal1959
Very well constructed - keeping you Aussie vernacular in mind. Naturally, I would be falling down on the job if I didn't catch a few minor erros...
"Well! Everything 'hit the fan' as they say! Louise's mother burst out with:
"Who's going to look after the children?!" (Single quotes again, Geoff. You've got to break yourself of that habit. Also, I know it can be popular for some writers to add emphasis to a line by using both a question mark and an exclamation point together - but in a professional piece of writing, it should be avoided.)
"Margaret!" She cried, "They're talking about getting married!" Expecting my mum to be horrified and to be aghast, shocked and all the other terms of horror. My Mum just replied... "Isn't that terrific!" (Starting with "Expecting," and ending with "horror" we have an incomplete sentence. But this seems to be caused by the accidental use of a period after horror. Please replace it with a comma and use a lower case "m" for "my." Those two sentences are connected.)
That was a 'fizzer' as Barry (the priest's name)... (Single quotes again.)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Very well constructed - keeping you Aussie vernacular in mind. Naturally, I would be falling down on the job if I didn't catch a few minor erros...
"Well! Everything 'hit the fan' as they say! Louise's mother burst out with:
"Who's going to look after the children?!" (Single quotes again, Geoff. You've got to break yourself of that habit. Also, I know it can be popular for some writers to add emphasis to a line by using both a question mark and an exclamation point together - but in a professional piece of writing, it should be avoided.)
"Margaret!" She cried, "They're talking about getting married!" Expecting my mum to be horrified and to be aghast, shocked and all the other terms of horror. My Mum just replied... "Isn't that terrific!" (Starting with "Expecting," and ending with "horror" we have an incomplete sentence. But this seems to be caused by the accidental use of a period after horror. Please replace it with a comma and use a lower case "m" for "my." Those two sentences are connected.)
That was a 'fizzer' as Barry (the priest's name)... (Single quotes again.)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks mate, but you gotta admit I am improving what? Appreciate the steering, will get on it.
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Thanks Good buddy all fixed now as well as another bit one of the ladies picked up, if you care to go by again. We are getting there, ok!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Another very good chapter. You should think about calling this series The Many Faces of Sanky. In every picture you look different.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Another very good chapter. You should think about calling this series The Many Faces of Sanky. In every picture you look different.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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hehe thanks interesting suggestion. I don't have much hair now neither hehe.
Comment from judiverse
Isn't it something that parents have a hard time realizing that their children are grown up and can make decisions for themselves? Interesting that your mother and Louise's had different thoughts about your marriage. I liked you comment about what do nuns and priests know about marriage. Good point. Sounds like you didn't find a very good apartment to start out. Hope you didn't have to live their long. Great details in this. judi
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Isn't it something that parents have a hard time realizing that their children are grown up and can make decisions for themselves? Interesting that your mother and Louise's had different thoughts about your marriage. I liked you comment about what do nuns and priests know about marriage. Good point. Sounds like you didn't find a very good apartment to start out. Hope you didn't have to live their long. Great details in this. judi
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Sis we were there for 6 months. Fortunately the drama happened before we were married so Louise never suffered. We got a nice couple moved in behind us from Ireland we were friends for a while even after we moved out and they moved into our flat as we had more carpet . probably should add some of that. Thanks for getting me thinking.
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You're very welcome. I think we can always find things we would like to add. judi
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I did the addition in the next chapter as more relevant after our wedding day. Trying to get rid of a MP3 file I had in there from a previous chapter in that spot but just ignore it when it comes. I am moving it to the chapter after.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Geoff. This style is so much better. You don't sound so "aloof" and are showing the story more. I have a question. The way you have phrased this would have one believe you and your bride are deaf: "Finally, we learned there was a Catholic priest who did some work with the Deaf, as were we, both."
I didn't know you were and if you are not you need to change the ohrasing of this line.
Good way to start out with a fight next door. LOL... Good job, Geoff. Much better. Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi, Geoff. This style is so much better. You don't sound so "aloof" and are showing the story more. I have a question. The way you have phrased this would have one believe you and your bride are deaf: "Finally, we learned there was a Catholic priest who did some work with the Deaf, as were we, both."
I didn't know you were and if you are not you need to change the ohrasing of this line.
Good way to start out with a fight next door. LOL... Good job, Geoff. Much better. Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks mate I thought I mentioned we were both deaf. Actually I used to hear better than Louise. Now that has gone in reverse ha. This was the first chapter I referred back to the previous as you suggested same as Barbara Wilkey. I will go back and do same with earlier chapters. I misunderstood your idea of referring back in background before that was why I did it that way. Glad we got that sorted, thanks mate.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh wow what obsticles but then you both were religious and did realize God had control? Very well written and I understand the mother in law thing, my ex was world renown at keeping her son, I should have listened.lol
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Oh wow what obsticles but then you both were religious and did realize God had control? Very well written and I understand the mother in law thing, my ex was world renown at keeping her son, I should have listened.lol
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks Barb. The scripture says 'leaving Father and Mother and Cleaving unto your wife/husband. I may have mentioned it elsewhere...we told our pastor about the problems we had with Louise's Mum his comment was "She has not had 'the leaving'" HEHE!
Comment from Sasha
Nice work with this one. I agree, what to priests and nuns know about marriage; remember this comment comes from a lapsed Catholic and a divorced woman. I hope the problems with your new flat were resolved before your bride moved in. I look forward to the next chapter. I think this is where I originally started reading your book.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Nice work with this one. I agree, what to priests and nuns know about marriage; remember this comment comes from a lapsed Catholic and a divorced woman. I hope the problems with your new flat were resolved before your bride moved in. I look forward to the next chapter. I think this is where I originally started reading your book.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Sasha. Glad you have been back with me earlier now, then. Yes, that problem I had with the neighbours, fortunately, was
over before we married and Louise moved in with me. I have had a memory come back I need to add in here re our lovely neighbours that we became friends with after the other lot moved out, will add.