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Mike Radshaw and the Black Dawn

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The grim reaper casts his pall over London

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Comment from Cindy Warren
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That's got to be the creepiest thing I've ever read. You have given Stephen King a run for his money, and he's very good at creeping me out. Radshaw must survive somehow, because he's telling the story. I'm guessing the Angwrath will help him.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
    Thanks so much, Cindy :-). You've consistently been the one who sees the way things are going in this story. I've really appreciated the insight!

    Mike
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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I can't say this humor/horror is my cup of tea, but I did enjoy nearly all your analogies. Shows like Star Trek work but the ones of real people were either people I didn't know or ones I did recognize, and it jerked me out of the imaginative story. Your constant flow of analogies is very impressive, and I think most readers would love them. There was only one thing you might want to change: There I was think(ing) it was fear . . . I'm looking forward to the next installment.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
    Thank you, Carol :-). Indeed, this is a pretty extreme slant on the genre, and admittedly a lot of my references are quite English and won't make sense to everyone. I'm glad you're still looking forward to the last chapter though :-).

    Mike
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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What a wonderful fight, between evil (yes), and perhaps determination perhaps sheer cussedness. The absence of real fear must have been so frustrating for the evil. Fantastic! Kate xx

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
    Thank you, Kate :-). It's a beast of a chapter, this one, but I didn't feel I could split the final showdown! I love the idea of that place one can get to beyond fear, where things are so extreme they almost don't matter any more, and how that can be almost empowering.

    Mike
Comment from John Ciarmello
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I love when I feel something as the reader, Mike. I lived this as I read, and I was humored, riddled with pain, and scared to death, along with the characters in this chapter. I love sensational descriptive, and you are my favorite. There is always a risk of going over the top, but there is no chance that happened here or in any of your pieces, for that matter. I'm sorry; I get excited when I see passion in a piece of writing. Sensational, my friend. I wish I had a six! Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
    Thanks so much, John, and thanks especially for sticking it through this monster chapter. I was worried this story was a bit over-written, but in checking through before reviving, I barely removed anything. This is definitely my style of story, lol. I hope you enjoy the concluding chapter.

    Mike
Comment from Jay Squires
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I am in fact sweating, Michael. Your writing is that intense, that dark, that evil and it is all sustained for the longest chapter I've read here at FanStory. How? How? Dang, I keep asking myself how chapter can go that long without flabbing out in the middle. I think it's the humor, Radshaw's dank, hopeless, humor in the face of extinction. I'll be thinking about this for a good long time! I need a shower.

I snorted. "And there I was think it was fear that'd make me piss myself. ["And there I was THINKING it was..."]

But that's all, my friend. On top of all, it is so well edited! Kudos to you, Sir!

Jay


 Comment Written 20-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 22-Oct-2022
    Thank you, Jay :-). When reviving this chapter, I came very close to cutting it in half, but that would have meant presenting half of it as a new chapter, and that seemed wrong. Also, it's the big confrontation with evil, so cutting it in the middle felt wrong! I'm so glad you weren't put off by it. I know this is a wordy story, but hopefully always with a purpose, even when that purpose is just poking fun at something :-).

    Mike
Comment from lyenochka
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Well, it was a battle unlike anything I've read or seen in a film! I liked your revision of the four horsemen of Revelation to "War, Famine, Pestilence and Snuggles." Each time I think I know what's going to happen next, I see you pull the rug from under me and an unexpected thing happens like the giant Teddy Bear and that the gun shots would work at all on those creatures. I kept hoping that the Angwrath was going help Radshaw but alas, it seems to go on to fulfill some evil mission...?

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2022
    Thank you, Helen :-). I guess in a roundabout way, the Angwrath did help, because without him (and Abaddon's hubris), the gunshots would indeed have been useless. I love to be a little unexpected! Let's hope Mike still has a chance at getting through to the young Angwrath before anything too awful happens!

    Mike
Comment from royowen
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Our old friend Mike Radshaw had an encounter and struggle he probably did sign up for, nor did he envision that this struggle against the physical form of mr. Black sees to resulted in a victory of sorts. But only God can truly defeat spiritual, I seemed to remember that Stephen King wrote God into his horror stories. Beautifully written Mike, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
    Thank you, Roy :-). I appreciate the read - I know this is a beast of a chapter but I couldn't break up the climactic confrontation. Indeed, all he's really managed is to create an opportunity to escape, and only because the Angwrath was there to help (albeit unwittingly).

    Mike
reply by royowen on 19-Oct-2022
    Well done
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Holy moly this is a long one, like Genesis in the Bible. Having said that, it is interesting and full of creativity. You will get more reviews if you break it into two posts as an A & B.

Good job, keep spewing out that entertaining flow from that big brain.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2022
    Thanks Douglas :-). If I was posting it now, I'd do it in two parts, but since I'm reviving the original post, I didn't want to break it up (and there's no comfortable place to break what is essentially the climactic confrontation of the story). Glad you enjoyed it!

    Mike
Comment from Moon baby
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What can I say about this, it would not be a book I would be interested in reading. However, your mind has a creativity level beyond my wildest dreams! The descriptions of your experience were vivid to imagine.

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 Comment Written 18-Oct-2022


reply by the author on 18-Oct-2022
    Thank you - I love to be a bit different!

    Mike
Comment from djsaxon
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Such a solid pen. Love the narrative and the dialogue exchange. Long time since I've read your work. Sorry. We get so caught up in our own agendAS. Hope you have a publisher for this. Most deserving. Cheers - DJ

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
    Thank you, DJ :-). I plan to put this together with my other Mike Radshaw stories and seek representation for the collection. I know what you mean - it can be difficult to find time for interacting outside the current project.

    Mike