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"The Gift of Life."

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True storiesof life loss and tragedy in this world

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Comment from EMB
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So does this speak of an incident that actually happened this year, involving a trip to Disney? I ask because you have this listed as "General Fiction." It's gripping either way.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2013

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
    April first at Midnight, Lara S. Moretti[the LSW.
    with "The Gift of Life" held my dead in a coma
    never to recover's son's hand while they opened
    His arms, chest, legs and removered vessels, organs
    of lesser to more immediate degee while "Brian
    {the driver's] cousin ? blabled to friends that a kid
    you may know was killed by my cousin.
    "Later, she stole the hospital {Atlantic City Medical's]
    Prayer Book and shared it with kids the next day!
    My daughter, Nichole {22}thoughts and others feelings
    who lost...
    {This is extremely hard...}
    "To make a loger story less{I'll write about this}
    a single lock of my son's hair is in a box { a memory box]
    and Lara did that for us and God gave me another chance to
    "Wake Up and Shake-up"
    This World...
    Ricky...
Comment from donkeyoatey
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Still, my heart mouns for your pain..pain can lessen, but never leave. Perhaps the good you have done by bringing the organ donor importance to us, will in some way, pave the road for a happy reunion. Donkeyoatey

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2013

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
    donkey...
    Such is such... A single lock is all of the DNA I got
    from Lara on April 1st, 2003 {Midnight.}
    But, is the joke on me...
    "Corrine {19 then} missed her first year at Rutgers..
    My wife Carolyn stopped here pressure meds and died 8
    months later...
    Dana {17 at the time} dealt drugs through a 30 year old
    and did 2 years {cost me $5,000.00.}
    "I institutionalized myself and flushed a 36 year carrier
    down the drain with a good part of my brain.
    Today...
    "Corrine Alexis Smrkovsky {triple majored} and has an office
    in Mannhattan and and works as a graphic, advertiser, artist
    for major, drug, companies, [no kids.}
    Dana, has her own place and gave me "Alexander the Commander"} almost five and he keeps me grounded and alive!!!
    Nikki takes care of a house fulled with mentally ill adults
    like me!!!
    Kyle Erin Harbach Drum is finally getting her "Commander" and me...
    Well world we will just have to see!
    Thanks,
    Ricky.
Comment from jen2000
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Excellent story Ricki...especially enjoyed all the great vocabulary-definitely enhanced the poem/story to its fullest! I would love some tips from u on how to make my stories more interesting!!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2013

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2013
    Jen,
    Either write me here and provide your hone number of Facebook request me and I'll shoot you into my free site "Poetry and Writing" a poem of the day and the South Jersey weather report.
    Ricky.
    I can give you more time after posting ten.