4 becomes 16
Dogs at rest remain at rest until. . .6 total reviews
Comment from write hand blue
We have a cocker spaniel, that is one becomes four.
Ours is so quiet, but four together would be pandemonium.
Yes they all like their treats. I like the picture.
good poem... :) Mel.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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We have a cocker spaniel, that is one becomes four.
Ours is so quiet, but four together would be pandemonium.
Yes they all like their treats. I like the picture.
good poem... :) Mel.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
We're not poets so we avoid reviewing on poetic style, that would be dangerous. This is cute, as we love dogs. Janie is tag teaming with me since I am 86 and in a rehab center with a broken hip and no computer. God loves you and so do we.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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We're not poets so we avoid reviewing on poetic style, that would be dangerous. This is cute, as we love dogs. Janie is tag teaming with me since I am 86 and in a rehab center with a broken hip and no computer. God loves you and so do we.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Hi and thank you. Hope all is going well with your recovery. I enjoy your writing thanks so much.
NonnyeLL7
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There's about 60 stories up from my novel, Behind Closed Doors that is on amazon.com. God loves you and I do too.
Comment from lakeport
4 becomes 16, indeed dogs are wonderful companions, I had 5 in my life, a very nice expressed Haiku, thanks for sharing it,Good luck in the contest, God bless you. Lakeport,
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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4 becomes 16, indeed dogs are wonderful companions, I had 5 in my life, a very nice expressed Haiku, thanks for sharing it,Good luck in the contest, God bless you. Lakeport,
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2013
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Hi and thank you.
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your welcome.Lakeport.
Comment from barkingdog
I guess the four seem like sixteen when they run around like crazy begging for the treat. LOL
Your syllable count is perfect.
Nice 'l' consonance(Silence,sleeping/click)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I guess the four seem like sixteen when they run around like crazy begging for the treat. LOL
Your syllable count is perfect.
Nice 'l' consonance(Silence,sleeping/click)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your feedback and time.
Comment from joneau2
Cute! I take it you mean four dogs awake and the sound of 16 paws scrambling to get to the treats is sheer pandemonium. I can picture the critters banging into things and themselves in their haste to get there. A good job.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Cute! I take it you mean four dogs awake and the sound of 16 paws scrambling to get to the treats is sheer pandemonium. I can picture the critters banging into things and themselves in their haste to get there. A good job.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you. Drawing the picture is what I was after.
Comment from boxergirl
A nice 5-7-5 syllable poem. I can visualize the sleeping dogs and the click to signal a treat which brings the rest of the crew. 16 dogs would surely be pandemonium! Good job and good luck! :-)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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A nice 5-7-5 syllable poem. I can visualize the sleeping dogs and the click to signal a treat which brings the rest of the crew. 16 dogs would surely be pandemonium! Good job and good luck! :-)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your feedback and time.
