The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Seeking Work Closer To Home "Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from Jay Squires
A rather long chapter Geoff, but I'm seeing more and more the vastness of your experience in the job market.
Your chapters are anecdotal and humorous and, while you didn't describe in great detail your work environment you did one of your fellow employees. I could almost smell him as I read your description.
A good chapter. I couldn't find any SPAG. I know you said you will work on "diologuing" it up during the next edit.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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A rather long chapter Geoff, but I'm seeing more and more the vastness of your experience in the job market.
Your chapters are anecdotal and humorous and, while you didn't describe in great detail your work environment you did one of your fellow employees. I could almost smell him as I read your description.
A good chapter. I couldn't find any SPAG. I know you said you will work on "diologuing" it up during the next edit.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Hi mate yeah it is a bit long and may try to cut it a bit. I guess because it covers 3 jobs could be the reason. People are still asking for more though maybe nother chapter split or something is in the offing. Thanks mate.
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Jay it was a long time ago you reviewed this lots of changes if you wanna look again getting closer to publishing sorry no rewards.
Comment from Far North Reader
An interesting and humorous chapter depicting some memorable characters and experiences unique to that era. The focus on human relations as well as the jobs experienced add colour to this account of what some may perceive as mundane positions. Perhaps an expansion on the last paragraph about that lonely, fearful time during your mother's absence would be interesting too. Overall, well written, good paragraph lengths compared with earlier chapters, with good expansion and descriptions.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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An interesting and humorous chapter depicting some memorable characters and experiences unique to that era. The focus on human relations as well as the jobs experienced add colour to this account of what some may perceive as mundane positions. Perhaps an expansion on the last paragraph about that lonely, fearful time during your mother's absence would be interesting too. Overall, well written, good paragraph lengths compared with earlier chapters, with good expansion and descriptions.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Were the paragraphs too big before or too short? I know one of the writers in here often fills up on short paragraphs. Thanks very much I found a photo of me and my Mum at Masco airport when she was leaving for Eritrea. When I do her Megoirs you will see the terrible time the Poms gave her in Eritrea being a colonial of course.
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Hi there Sis this chapter had a revision this week I know you are busy be good if you would com abnd look through these again soon as you have time thanks Lots of changes
Comment from seaglass
Only one actual error:
"In America you can (for get) the pies." Should be one word-(forget)
A couple of paragraphs that i am sure you had spaced apart seems to have uploaded so that the space isn't between them. I've noticed the posting site does that to mine sometimes. Separating these makes it easier for the reader.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Only one actual error:
"In America you can (for get) the pies." Should be one word-(forget)
A couple of paragraphs that i am sure you had spaced apart seems to have uploaded so that the space isn't between them. I've noticed the posting site does that to mine sometimes. Separating these makes it easier for the reader.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thanks for your diligence in picking up the spags. I appreciate it very much. In may if you are still around I will be able to give you some rewards for your reviewing as I am all run out of "gifts" atm hehe.
Comment from lindalcreel
I think it's wonderful that you are writing about your life. My sisters and I joke that if we ever did that kind of story, we would title it - "With six you get Prozac." I couldn't imagine my mother having five daughters and a son. I think that you have brought some humor into the story, and that will always keep the reader interested. So glad that you're sharing this with the rest of us.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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I think it's wonderful that you are writing about your life. My sisters and I joke that if we ever did that kind of story, we would title it - "With six you get Prozac." I couldn't imagine my mother having five daughters and a son. I think that you have brought some humor into the story, and that will always keep the reader interested. So glad that you're sharing this with the rest of us.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Thanks my wife is a little nervous as to just how much I am sharing on FS. he he! Appreciate the review.
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I'm sure that when she sees how interested everyone is in your life story, she will be proud. Maybe one day I'll write that biography, but I think I would write about the time I spent with my grandmother when I was a little girl. I never wanted to go home and it wasn't until school started that I spent any time away from her. Then I spent every vacation and every summer with her. Some of my sisters were always bored, but she taught me to cook and I loved spending time with her. Since her death, I'm the only one that knows how to make some of her famous dishes. I know my dad appreciates that and so does the rest of the family.
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Hey I a glad Louise did Home economics (Cooking ) at school. on my side there are 3 or 4 generations of good cooks well there was my Grandmother, Mum and my Sister ands my Niece is not bad either never see sister or Niece though.
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I started cooking when I was three years old and even though my grandmother never really measured the spices, I could still make her dishes taste the same. Lucky I had a good memory. My kids enjoyed her candied apples, and famous pies, but my dad loves the hot potato salad that is made with bacon, and a vinaigrette dressing. My daughter keeps trying to make it, but she swears it never comes out the same. Practice makes perfect. lol
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yeah that's right there are a couple of packt Potato bakes I find one is better than the other for being able to brown it up in the oven better. We just had potato bake the other (well actually we got 2 nights ) out of it.
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Louise comes from a very private back ground. Her folks would freak out if they knew half of what is in my book. They know about it and ask me but I don't want to show it to them as some of it would be very "not kosher" to them..no they are not Jewish. I have put a bit in the latest edit on Inlaws and Outlaws on their tendancy to be Mrs Buckets keeping up appearances etc.
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It is a biography so there has to be some truth to it.
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Yeah and they are all a part of my life even in only as through my wife pardon the poultry hehe.
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The truth is the truth and sometimes it hurts but as you say they are part of your life. It's an inheritance that doesn't go away.
Comment from CR Delport
It is always interesting to read someone elses life and how they experienced it, especially of it is this well written. This makes for a really interesting read.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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It is always interesting to read someone elses life and how they experienced it, especially of it is this well written. This makes for a really interesting read.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Aw I really appreciate your review thanks. I only did the latest changes in here today and the other chapter No 17 I think also has some updating. Thanks again. haven't seen any of your stuff lately where ya bin? Can't remember if we are Fans of each other. I do remember you were one of my first reviewers way back when I first joined FS. Thanks again.
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I post every day ... well except maybe Saturdays :)
Comment from allborn66
This is an amazing work history. You did a lo of different things. I really hate those people who act like you're not trying to get a job just because you don't have one.
Barbara
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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This is an amazing work history. You did a lo of different things. I really hate those people who act like you're not trying to get a job just because you don't have one.
Barbara
Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Yeah Barbara you read the abuse I got from my sister in law after getting home from another interview. As I think I said I had more than 20 interviews before I got that first job in the city. Still just under 17 years of age.
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Hi folks just been through and done another addition and edit in here. Hope you can check it out.
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Hi Barbara have not seen you around for a while I have now revised all the chapters in my autobiography and stuff has mopved around if you have not noticved. Hope you can check them out as you have time. This chapter you reviewed here might have moed as well everything more sequential now.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is another interesting chapter to add to the collection that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is about school days and the trials that it brings. We can all relate to this.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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This is another interesting chapter to add to the collection that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is about school days and the trials that it brings. We can all relate to this.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Thanks mate appreciated hold on a bit you are goingn to see a switch and mo0ve in a sec hehe Chapters Nine and 10 have to be reversed I think or 8 and 9 I forget hehe
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My pleasure.
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Hi folks just been through and done another addition and edit in here. Hope you can check it out
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H8i Bro have not see you about in as while this chapter has been revised as have the whole book in more sequential order maybe this chapter is a different one to this original review you did.
Comment from 22allgood
You have a good way of explaining people and situations at your work place. It must have been difficult though to work in those places at times. A good story about all the difficulties you faced at that time.
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2013
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You have a good way of explaining people and situations at your work place. It must have been difficult though to work in those places at times. A good story about all the difficulties you faced at that time.
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Comment Written 14-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2013
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Thanks for the great review.
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Hi Sis Chapter 15 finished except I had some help on getting Charlie Ritchie's song working will get to it tomnorrow
Comment from BethShelby
This is one I've read before so I don't if they give you credit of another review. I enjoyed reading it again. This starting working experience a learning experience. It isn't good to be sleepy on the job. My son has to sleep with a C-pap machine to make sure he sleeps better and is more rested.
This is very written and it gives us a great picture of the employment up and downs in your life. I think it is a bit long. In the future it might be a good idea to limit the words or put it in two chapters. I did enjoy reading it. For a while I worked for a temporary agency and got to experience many different types of work. It only paid minimum wage, but when I needed to be off for some reason, it wasn't a problem.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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This is one I've read before so I don't if they give you credit of another review. I enjoyed reading it again. This starting working experience a learning experience. It isn't good to be sleepy on the job. My son has to sleep with a C-pap machine to make sure he sleeps better and is more rested.
This is very written and it gives us a great picture of the employment up and downs in your life. I think it is a bit long. In the future it might be a good idea to limit the words or put it in two chapters. I did enjoy reading it. For a while I worked for a temporary agency and got to experience many different types of work. It only paid minimum wage, but when I needed to be off for some reason, it wasn't a problem.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Hi Beth yeah I could split it up and we have not come to the end of my employment years yet. This is only the time I worked in the private sector. I am glad someone thought it was a bit long. I have the story about the Car fire and the Finance company business where it is as that was near the end of the private secotr work era as well.Thanks for the review. You would be amazed at the amount of "Tangents" I deleted hehe could write another book of all those haha.
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have done some deiting if you would like to come back and read it again thanks
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Hi Beth back again I hope I split it after your last review hehe...may not even be the same chapter either ho hum...just been through and done another addition and edit in here. Hope you can check it out
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Hi Beth have not seen you in a long long time. Hope y0ou are still in FS. Not sure this is still the smae chapter you reviewed before I have mopved a lot of stuff around to be more sequential as to wqhen things actuyally happened currently doing a big revision right through up to here atm. Hope you can come by.
Comment from cinderbella
I did enjoy this chapter very much although I did find it a little bit lengthy. Your experiences were relayed to the reader with matter-of-fact honesty, and I was surprised you could remember all these details.
One tiny detail:
"I was engaged to work in the musical instruments section, and as a..." I would just leave out the word "and", I think the sentence would flow a little better. This of course, doesn't affect my review.
You've done a fabulous job. I really liked it. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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I did enjoy this chapter very much although I did find it a little bit lengthy. Your experiences were relayed to the reader with matter-of-fact honesty, and I was surprised you could remember all these details.
One tiny detail:
"I was engaged to work in the musical instruments section, and as a..." I would just leave out the word "and", I think the sentence would flow a little better. This of course, doesn't affect my review.
You've done a fabulous job. I really liked it. :) Sandra
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Hi Sandra thanks very much I could edit that part you mention to say that I also demonstrated the organs as I was mostly employed in the musical instruments area ie guitars, drums, etc thanks. One other editor also agrees it is a bit long as I pointed out this is only the Private sector part the Public Service bit is yet to come but I thought incorporating the Finance Company chapter was in the right place as that all happened pretty close to when I started working for our Federal Government. Thanks for a great review.
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have done some deiting if you would like to come back and read it again thanks
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It's okay, as I said it didn't affect your review at all, I only mentioned it so you could fix it up. You really are doing a good job. Keep it up. :) Sandra
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Thanks for dropping by. Appreciated.
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Hi folks just been through and done another addition and edit in here. Hope you can check it out
